Would love any feedback on this or advice on making it better.
Story involves quickie sex at in a bar bathroom, slight cum-eating, cannabis, & drinking. I find consent very hot and have tried to make it as overt as possible, but if you feel that tipsy/stoned sex between two people that just met is not consensual or is triggering than you may want to avoid.
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We’re both at a show. It’s loud, loud like I’m-going-to-be-regretting-it-tomorrow loud. The band is…meh? They’re fine. They’re from Wisconsin. They’re loud. They’re meh. They’re whatever.
By now most of the people who came to the show either left, are still in the crowd but clearly regretting it, or they, like us, went straight to the bar at some point in the last hour. You and I have been eyeing each other for that last hour. Slowly our friend groups dwindled away, and it’s pretty much just us at the bar.
You wouldn’t hear me if I said anything, we’re too far apart, so I wave from across the bar. You wave back and smile a big and beautiful smile that sinks into me like a hook. My heart drops a beat. You motion me over with this kind of cowgirl mosey on over thing. So I do.