This was the first erotic story I ever wrote and I enjoyed the process and want to get better at writing it. I was told this would be a good place to post it to get some feedback. There’s two more written parts and one unwritten part that I’m stuck on. Hopefully the feedback will help. Thanks
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Clark checked the clock before he put on the emergency brake and turned off the car. It was closer to 8pm than he wanted it to be but traffic on his way into the city had been worse than he had planned. He grabbed his belongings from the trunk and began to walk towards his friends place where he would be spending the weekend. Clark and Luke had known each other since they were young but Clark was more interested in Luke’s roommate, Savannah. They had met briefly the last time Luke had Clark over for drinks and she had immediately peaked Clark’s interests. She had short brown hair with blonde highlights and the left side cut short that reminded Clark of a sprite. She had piercing hazel eyes and a smile that drove Clark crazy. She stood at 5’9”, 135lbs with cute 28” hips, 24” waist and amazing 34G breasts that Clark could stare at for hours. She wore tight jeans that hugged her hips and a sweater that was comfortable for Savannah but still gave Clark enough to look at when he saw her.