Hired Help (looking for feedback, unfinished, long) [MFF] [threesome] [anal] [depravity] [squirting]

I got to know someone and wanted to write a story for her. While this is unfinished I was wanting to end it with the couple doing anal while the hired help was getting them both of, but overall wanting a critique of this. It seems a bit long compared to some of the stories here, but I feel a backstory adds to the tension. What do you like, and what wouldyou have written differently?

HIRED HELP

Michelle was a survivor. Going from home to home, hardly having friends to rely on, much less being in a stable relationship; she wanted to be a part of something, to be wanted, to know her purpose in life. It certainly didn’t come from the attention of policemen, nor the repeated warnings from store managers when she got caught stealing things, but somehow the attention came from her gorgeous neighbor Jack and his wife Erin. Sure the couple had a busy lifestyle but they could always use more help, especially when it came to cleanup duty. Michelle had her moments of OCD, but her wanting to feel a part of something, and Jack and Erin always needing an extra hand; Michelle found a niche she could fulfill.

The Eclipse Annals – Part 6 – Never Trust a Kerg

Edit: **[Freeuse][Anal][Deepthroat][Scifi]**

The following is a Freeuse fetish story. If you do not approve of the Freeuse fetish, please read something else. And if you do, make sure to check out the freeuse subreddit.

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Captain Eberhardt studied the large reptile-like thing of a ship that hung before them. He had seen Kerg battleships before, just not so close. Or without the whole Imperial Navy behind him. He sighed and slowly slid his cock in and out of First Commander Jade’s ass.

“Lieutenant Flora. Try to get Ruiz on again.”

The Comms Lieutenant looked down at her panel. He grabbed Jade’s hips and thrust harder into her for a few strokes. The ebony woman’s breasts swung as he pushed into her. She held tight to the railing in front of her to keep steady.

“Still nothing, sir. They are still jamming us.”

Captain Eberhardt nodded. It was what he had expected. But some part of him just had to try. He closed his eyes and focused on Jade’s asshole. A minute or so later he filled her up with cum and slid out of her.

“Jade. Erbest. Flora. My quarters for deliberation.”

The Camgirl Part XXII: Just Taking Care of Ourselves [Anal (plug)] [FF] [Mast (mutual)]

**XXII: Blake**

A few hours later, Blake found herself relaxing on her bed in a fresh pair of silk panties, sweaty dress and underwear discarded in a pile on the floor with Marie’s. Blake’s blonde roommate lay perpendicular to her, towel-wrapped head on Blake’s belly. They’d decided to spend the night in Blake’s room together, as Marie missed having someone to cuddle up to, and Blake couldn’t deny that she did as well.

“I can’t believe you had a plug in that whole time,” Marie remarked for the second time since they had gotten out of the shower.

Blake snorted, wiggling her hips, “Still do, remember? I’ve got a show tomorrow.”

She laughed as Marie’s face went red. A moment later, Marie shifted on the bed, propping her head up with one elbow as she snuggled next to Blake.

“How big is it?”

Blake raised an eyebrow, then giggled at how red her roommate’s cheeks still were. She held up her forefingers a little less than two inches apart, “That wide,” she widened them another inch, “And about that long.”

She laughed when Marie’s eyes widened, “Fuck.”

The big butt hottie from the diner [MF] (long)

The hostess lead me to my seat, a small 2 person “date booth” with a single seat on either side, positioned just slightly out of the way of the rest of the diner between a doorway to the outside seating area and the pathway to the restrooms to my rear. Last night’s shift was brutal; 12 overtime hours in the factory with temperatures climbing over 110 degrees as I clocked out. I didn’t envy the day shift, as I knew it would be even hotter for them as the day carried on. I sunk into my seat, the old leather groaning and aging springs of the bench creaking and squeaking as I sunk in and stared blankly at my table. My brain power was at its minimum. My body felt weak. My stomach craved something, anything to fill it. A glance at my phone said it was now 11:28am; my last meal was at 3:15 this morning. Why was I continuing to work this hellish job? They don’t care about me there. I’m replaceable. The pay isn’t bad, but-

My thought was interrupted by a voice. I break from my trance and look up from the stained table to see my waitress. As more of a habit than an actual question, I blurt out a confused “huh… What?”

The wax lady rubbed my pussy …. and I couldn’t avoid get wet… [FF]

Since 2014 I wax my pussy with the same woman. She has been the only wax expert that has seen my pussy,  and I feel really comfy with her.
One month ago she left to Colombia due to some family issues and I was getting anxious and frustrated with all this hair growing.
Today I texted her and she replies that maybe in one month she will be returning but she left a replacement: another Colombian, who knows how to deal with wax. I was grumpy but agreed to her solution.  

In every chance i have, I warned my boyfriend about Colombian womens.  *They are the most sweet, beautiful, loving, and mesmerizing females on earth, and they can make you drool before you notice (just look at Sofia Vergara right?!) Usually in my country, Colombian girls are so fucking beautiful, like they have beautiful hair, skin, big boobs and everything that turns a man crazy*… also they are experts in beauty stuff and make up things. They are like real life mermaids.

Office fling (MF,MFF, noncon-con,anal,strap-on)

This is my first attempt at wring erotica so please comment to give any suggestions/ improvements for other stories. Thanks.

Ethan sat down at his desk, his computer whirring into life as he reflected on the meeting he had just had with the board about the downsizing of the western branch. He was interrupted as his screen began to flash with emails that he had missed whilst he was away from his desk. He began to doze as he flicked through the various sales reports sent to him by the Western branch, his mind weary from the lack of sleep he’d had over the last few weeks since his wife returned from a business trip to Hong Kong covered in cuts and bruises. 

“Ethan. Ethan. ETHAN!!!” Michelle’s voice rang through the office waking her boss from his slumber. “Mr Cornelius is here to talk to you about those reports he sent to you earlier.” 

A Girl with Peculiarities – Part Three [Fantasy] [Anal] [MF]

[A Girl with Peculiarities Part Two](https://www.reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/cwd6sw/a_girl_with_peculiarities_part_two_fantasy_mf/)

**Disclaimer:** I’m not sure this if this is finished, and it could use some editing, but I’m looking for feedback. **Warning:** This story contains fantasy elements, anal, and dub-con.
 

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Mr. Foster answered, with a hoarse grumbling sound of affirmation, and then she felt the potent weight of his cock slap down between her ass cheeks. He stroked himself with her ass twice before reaching for shorts.

She let out a shocked little moan when she felt his fingers at her waistband. This was it she knew, in a few moments she would lose her virginity. His thighs remained pressed to hers, as he began pulling down her shorts. Inch by inch the cotton fabric was peeled away until the material was only just a puddle at her feet.

“…Oh, my… God…” Mr. Foster murmured, as the Amelia’s perfect ass came into full view.

His fingers hungrily bit deep into her succulent ass-meat drawing furrows into her creamy white skin, he pulled her ass open, her cheeks coming audibly unglued as if he had split open a massive peach with his bare hands. The edges of her puckered asshole opened, descending into a glossy pink crater, slightly agape and quivering like a tiny pussy slit with her full unbroken pussy lips just beneath it.

[MF][Cheat][Cons][Oral] – The Work Wife, Part 2.

[It had been a week since we fucked in her Range Rover in the work parking lot.](https://www.reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/ckqfny/mf_cheat_cons_the_work_wife/) We talked about it, but she felt guilty and it clearly upset her that she had done it. I gave her space which was hard since we were still co-workers.

That morning I suggested we get some coffee, something we did frequently and she agreed. We had time to make the trip and be back in time for the morning meeting. We got into her Range Rover and she drove us. We sat in silence during the short drive. We got to Starbuck and got out. Placed our order and waited as we had dozens of times before. We didn’t say anything to each other. I waited, feeling more and more guilty, questioning if I misread things, hoping she would be ok, but still I wanted her. We returned to her car and she pulled away to drive back to the office.

“I’m sorry,” I said.

“Don’t,” she said, “we did it and it’s done.”

“Look… I—I think I’m going—I don’t know. What do we want—what should we do?” I didn’t know what I wanted to say, I was full of conflict.

My Sister Lizzy [Oral] [Anal] [Spanking] [Part 2]

 Lizzy told me she thought that cum would taste horrible, but she was wrong, it tasted salty but wonderful, she especially liked the silky feel of cum in her mouth.

 “I think Dave is going to be surprised next time we go out, and to think I denied myself and Dave this pleasure, I’m done being a “good girl.” ”

After we returned home I had to go into town to run some errands.

As I got into town I ran into Dave, we made some small talk about nothing at all.

Just before we parted Dave started asking me about Lizzy and what she thought about their relationship.

 “Dave, I’m not in the best position to tell you what she thinks, I will say that she likes you a lot and hasn’t said anything negative.

One other thing and if you tell her that I said this to you she will kill me and you know what kind of temper she has, the kind of temper that you never want to be on the receiving end of twice in your life.