Wrote an erotic story for my girlfriend. Felt like I could do better, please provide criticism.

Illia was enamored with her pump after her session.
She began using it whenever she had her chats on her computer.
She got familiar with the technology on hand.
She has even improved on the design, making sure that the accident, while an immensely pleasurable experience, happens never again.
Though her continued and excessive use of the device was starting to have less of an effect on her.
Despite that using it in tandem with the stories she receives, amplifies her experience to new heights.
The taste of that new height left her usual material, slowly becoming ineffective.
She needed more.
She needed to reach new heights in pleasure.
That’s when a story her partner wrote inspired her.
After adding a new layer of her juices on the wall under her desk.
She began work on a new design for the pump
To make it autonomous
Her pussy began to moisten as the thoughts on the lack of control of her inflation.
That’s when she notices a trenchcoat she had lying around for a costume she was working on.
A thrilling thought went through her mind.
The next day, she left the house in a trenchcoat with a large backpack that had many tubes connected to it.