First attempt at writing erotica. Need feedback please. mf oral

This is my first attempt at writing erotica; don't know if I have what it takes to write something erotica readers would enjoy. Would appreciate any feedback you can give me. Thank you.

His facial imperfections were hard getting over. The indent in the middle of the forehead was accentuated by the bone beneath his thick long eyebrows. The width of the forehead seemed small but really, it was the protruding cheekbones that made it seem so. The cheeks were almost flat, with a shadow cast on them that made his face appear older. His facial hair was long and course but individual hairs appeared too far spread out that reminded him of cat whiskers. His eyes looked tired and heavy. This was due to the eyelids drooping down on the side a bit, just enough to give them that sad old look. He had semi dark circles underneath the eyes that were hereditary on his father's side. Those unflattering looks and the protruding, unshapely nose, that had lost all symmetry, if it ever had any, were the only inheritance from his absent father. Julio was very self-aware; overall, his appearance was not worse than average but he focused on individual details. He was not as meticulous when judging the looks of the opposite sex.

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My first girlfriend (and eventually her friends): Part 1 [MF, oral, mast)

Edit: Part 2

Warning: This might get kind of long. This is the first in a series of true stories about how in my senior year of high school I went from an introverted virgin to fucking my innocent girlfriend, three of her friends and her coworker. Yes, I know, I was a piece of shit but my ego and my other head were definitely in control during this exciting time. This can get kind of long so this first part will set things up and include the first blowjob she ever gave me. If there’s interest, Part 2 will detail one of the best fucks we ever had. Parts 3, 4, 5, and 6 will be about fucking her best friend, a petite little Latina with a super-tight body, finding out the teammate on her high school soccer team is a kinky little slut, learning the truth about her foul-mouthed friend with the enormous breasts, and finally, being seduced by her beautiful mixed-race coworker.

End of one journey, start of another [f/F] [exh] [voy] [oral] [lesb]

I should make it clear. I've always been comfortable with my body. If you told me to strip completely naked right now, I would do it without hesitation. I've always been like that. When I was younger, I was always the first to get naked as soon as I got home, and go skinny dipping by the lake. Similarly, from my teen years, I was comfortable stripping naked in a locker room, then walking bare to the showers, with around 50 teen girls witnessing my body. Of course I got comments like "slut", "whore", "no shame", did I care? No, if I want to be nude, I will be nude, everyone else can deal with it however they want. Of course, as I got to my mid-teenage years, with the arrival of alcohol and parties, me getting naked got a lot more prevalent not just at school, and boys would notice this, then act. More often than not, I was happy to end up pleasing a guy. This gave me a reputation, but once again it did not concern me. By the time I was 18, I was just finishing my higher education, getting ready for university, and had been sexually active for 3 years (if you hadn't have guessed yet, I am a free spirit). Around that time, my feelings started to change. The change started at a location I've already mentioned; the gym locker rooms. Although I was not having lessons, I would go to the school gym after school. One day, after a work out session, I ran into my ex gym teacher Miss Bellerose in the locker room. She also frequently used the gym after school. She was in her early 30s, yet by her looks could have been mistaken for a pupil, she had blonde hair, a statuesque 5'11 height, with long legs and a toned body. All of the boys in my class would always comment on her attractiveness, and I could now see why, as she came in with a low cut top, exposing her navel, and hot pants, she always seemed to be smiling too. Her look admittedly contrasted mine, I was a petite brunette, who could only hope to have a body as toned as hers. "Hey Laura! How are you doing?" She said in her usual happy tone. "Oh hey there miss Bellerose, I'm good thank you." "Please Laura, you're almost leaving to university soon, call me Amber. By the way, how are your studies going?" "Great thanks, should get into Peterson university" "That's great, I actually went there myself! Great for the parties if you get what I mean. Sorry I shouldn't be telling you that. But let's just say, you discover a lot about yourself there…" she replied in a sly tone. "Ok well I better go hit the showers, of course now with you leaving, I can speak to you as person to person, so we can continue our talk there if you want?" Was she serious? Was my ex gym teacher really suggesting that I could come and shower with her. Given she'd seen me nude many times in the locker room, and I had actually once asked her a question whilst completely nude, but I still couldn't believe it. I politely declined. As soon as I did, what happened next would change my view on life completely. With no apprehension, miss Bellerose stripped down to her bra and panties, most girls would shower like that, except for me of course as I thought it was a shame to get them wet. Clearly miss Bellerose was confident enough to think the same. Unhooking her bra, she revealed her smaller yet perfect breasts, then slid down her panties past those legs which went for miles, and took them off, chucking them in a bag. She was taking a shower au natural, and my eyes couldn't help but secretly stare, as she stretched out her flexible body, to make sure that she could get soap and water all around her luscious body. I'd felt an attraction to miss Bellerose I had never felt towards a woman. I wanted to discover more of her. I'd felt lust for teenage boys at parties, but this was a woman and more importantly my ex gym teacher. I went casually, but could not stop thinking about my feelings towards my teacher and how I viewed her bare, exposed, toned body in the shower, as well as that she had offered to converse with me, while we would both be nude, applying soap and washing our bodies in the school showers. Over the next week, until I knew that we'd meet at another gym session (for which I'd have to time things perfectly), I had cleared up my feelings about Miss Bellerose. If I had an attraction to her, I should just go with the flow, if she presented me with an opportunity, I should just go with it, and see where things go. Next gym session I knew I was going to meet her in the locker room, I had seen her stuff, and I had time to prepare getting there first. I decided to do what I'd done all throughout, be myself. I then decided to take a very long shower, waiting for her to come in, until I realised that she was not coming. I looked round and to my surprise, she had been sneaking a look at me all this time. I then performed a bit of a show for my ex gym teacher. I lavished my perk breasts with hot soapy water, making bubbles on them and cleaning them off, making sure that my erect nipples in particular were clear. The water then cleansed my whole body, including the inside of my pussy. All in full view, I then fully turned around and greeted her. "oh hi miss Bellerose, didn't see you there. Don't mind me, I'm just getting clean, you should have seen me, I was dripping after my session, well of course, I'm still dripping now" "oh sorry Laura, I wa… was… just coming in to… get changed" "I meant to say Amber, sorry, I know you told me to call you that the other day, if you want to continue our chat from the other day, I'm more than happy to talk to you here" "I might take you up on…that Laura" She then took all of her clothes off, more nervously and apprehensively than the other day. Until the woman, formerly my gym teacher, now my new focus of attraction and I were in the showers together. "So, Amber, you were saying about how you discover a lot about yourself at university. But I think I've discovered something about myself more recently" "What's that?" she says trying to keep composure. "I think I like girls miss. I especially like blondes, you know the ones with the toned body's" I then went for it. I leaned in and kissed her. She did the same, I knew she felt the same as I was, and I was so excited for our passionate, dirty encounter that would ironically be in a school shower. We kept on kissing, then she broke and said "in which case, let me show you what I learnt at university Laura". Shower still running, she caressed my petite body, and bent down her long eloquent legs, kissing first my soapy breasts, before licking my navel until I felt pleasure from just belly button play, then she went all the way. Looking up at me with experienced eyes, she bows her head towards my nether regions, tickles my lips the tip of her tongue, teasing me. Until, with the full length of her tongue, she explores my clitoris. Being the first time with a girl, I can't help but moan and move her head, I'm screaming so loud, but I can't help this wave of sexual pleasure. All the other times, I've just had to have or touch or suck an inexperienced cock at the height of my inebriation, yet this gives me a feeling I've never felt before. I'm forced into cumming like a whore, until I lay naked and almost motionless in a shower. "so did you like today's lesson Laura" "Yes miss" "Do you know what a bad girl you've been" "Yes miss" "Turn over you slutty little girl" I complied, and she spanked my bare ass as hard as it's been hit, making me release a moan. "Now, I'm afraid due to the standards being set, you're going to have to get some extra tuition and homework. I need you to come to mine so I can set it" "Yes miss" I did not know what was going to happen, I could hardly comprehend the amazing events that had just happened, but all I knew was that I was no longer just going to be Laura the gym student.

Finally hooked up with my friend, the one I’ve been sending my GW pics to [18F/20M][First time] [Hesitation/Encouragement][Shower][Oral]

A bit of background. I don’t post a lot on GW, but the reason why I started posting at all is because of a friend who I’ve recently been getting a lot of attention from. I’ve never had a boyfriend, always stayed the virgin girl focused on college who sometimes stayed up at night frustrated because of a school crush I’ve been getting mixed signals from, the typical profile—until he came along.

I’ve been I’ve been encouraged to write this for some of the nice people of the GW community who have been asking whether we’ve hooked up already given that I’ve been sending him so many teasing pictures of myself. He’s from a different college an hour away from mine and lives with his younger brother, but just this week we finally found a good time to meet up and have a sleepover while his brother was away.

When we got to his place though, I started getting really shy. He let me settle down first while he looked over some of his textbooks, but when I asked if he could let me shower and if I could borrow a towel (the commute left me hot and stuffy in a bad way) he looked up and then said sure, and that we should get in together.

(M)y (f)irst part 3: first date

Edit: link to part 2 https://www.reddit.com/r/gonewildstories/comments/37lc2q/my_first_part_2_eeeeeeeeva/

I woke up the next morning to hair tickling my face. Kristine was still asleep, one of my arms still draped over her, and I took care to not wake her as I sat up and reached for my phone. It was pretty early, but I usually had trouble sleeping in anyway, so I got up, went to the bathroom, and climbed out the window to stand on the roof of my house and smoke a cigarette. One of my housemates must've heard me, since he came out to join me with a joint. We smoked and chilled for a bit, then I headed back in and to my room. To my surprise, Kristine was already gone. I'd kinda been planning on waking her up and fucking her, so I was a bit disappointed. Her body actually reminded me a lot of Lily Thai's, though I think Kristine is taller, so I watched some videos of her getting railed by massive black cocks and rubbed one out before taking a shower and heading out to class.

Acting out my fantasy mmf

In the best Asian accent you can imagine, "Georgie do good at school you should too, make good money, go to haavaard." Well like my tiger mom implored me to, I did well at school, though didn't get into haavaard much to her disappointment, but still made good money as a management consultant. Now I found myself 32, making good money, married to a perfectly boring doctor who when not on call was more interesting in hanging out with his friends, or playing fantasy sports. During football seasons, my husband Dave spent his Saturdays hunched over his computer either reading about football, or twiddling spreadsheets involving player stats. On Sundays, he spent the entire day watching football with his friends, simultaneously watching god knows how many games on TV and screaming obscenities at the TV.

Affairs with my host mother [m/F]

When I was in high school, I went over to Shanghai as part of an exchange program. I wasn't a virgin at the time, but had slept mainly with girls my own age. However, in Shanghai, I grew to appreciate older women, more specifically older married Asian women. There's something so arousing about knowing that the conservative married woman was deep down a slut and with you around willing to be that slut. There are no games, just hot needy sex, whenever and wherever the opportunity arises.

The Chen's my host family consisted of Su Wen a 32 year old housewife who prior to getting married worked as a translator for a Chinese firm, her husband Hai Yee who was a wealthy businessman, and their three year old son. They had agreed to host me ostensibly to I could help Su Wen practice her English as well as help her teach her son English. But I think it was mainly because Su Wen was lonely.

M/f Sarah’s birthday surprise cums wrapped between two cheeks. Part 3

This is a continuation of an on-going series. I consider this to be a stand alone story so previous readings are not required to the posting below.

The gift of the Sexual Coupon

Sarah and I had been bf/gf for a few months now and our relationship was predominately sex based with a little actual couple related stuff thrown in here and there. I was an innocent naive virgin before all this started and she laid conquest after sexual conquest in those regards. We had a name for everything; pussy poundings, anal adventures, bondage barealls, flogging free-for-all's, toying tests, breast beatings, nipple nastiness, fanny figgings, bum beatings, rectum ravagings, vagina vindications, oral operations.. the list was growing at every encounter.

Sarah was 21 and I was coming up on my 20th birthday. She was average height with long brunette hair down to her back and sparkling hazel green eyes. Her California body was dark and tan except where her milky skin met with gorgeous two-piece bikini tanlines. Thin streaks of white invitations that circled her torso and hips leading to her tits, pussy and that perfect ass.

I fail painfully in my attempt to rock a black girl’s world

I'm a writer and I go by Johnny Dongle, which is a pen name, because everything I write is 100% true and if I used my real name, well — that'd be bad. This is one of my true stories. If it entertains you guys, I'll post more.

I am an equal-opportunity lover, and as such, I LOVE me some brown sugar on occasion. It would definitely be more than “on occasion” if I could convince more black women to sleep with me, but by and large I'm not exactly blow-the-doors-off successful in that department. I believe in the Chris Rock theory of why I can't get a lot of action with black girls: while it's a common fantasy for white women to want to fuck black men, that shit just doesn't work the other way around, unfortunately. Not nearly as often anyway. To paraphrase Mr. Rock, “Sure, a black woman will fuck Brad Pitt or George Clooney, but other than than, black women don’t give a fuck about fuckin’ white boys.”

The weekend Sex adventure from Hell! [M/f/f and m?] (Kinky, Funny and OMGWTF!) Part 2 of 2

Continuation of Part 1

Recap: Val and I meet up for some sexy fun time on an anticipated 4 day weekend. We head over to her friend Chel's place where I'm introduced to what turns out to be a weekend filled with hedonism and debauchery of the best kind. While shying away from the sexcapades at first, Chel joins the fun to what turns out to be the single most memorable 3-way of our lives.

Day 2 continues – Threesome fun

Chel's face down prone form is still a loaf of bliss and erotic sensations. Still recovering from her monumental orgasm, she has little strength left to fend of our ass-sault on her helpless lady parts. Val is probing her pussy with fingering and clit rubbing while I've moved on from her now plugged ass to massaging her tense muscles and shoulders. Poor Chel can do little but occasionally protest through whimpers and grunts of misguided disapproval. "please… let me.. uuuughhh… rest". Having none of that, Val and I redouble our efforts and turn our hapless Hostess into a vessel of sensual desire. Our persistence pays off as Chel starts to move and gyrate with the motions of Val's probing. While still silent as ever, her hips and bubble butt ass thrust back and forth into her best friends soaked fingers.