As the title states, I recently wrote this 3 page story in about 2-3 hours for a friend of mine and I'm wondering if I should write more separate stories, rewrite this into a longer short story, or something completely different? My friend enjoyed of story a lot, but I'm unsure if that was because I just tailored it to her kinks. There are some parts that I think could work better if I rewrite them, but personally I thought the first three paragraphs where pretty good. Please be and brutal and honest as necessary, but I's prefer if it could stay constructive. Without further adieu, I'll include the story:
Satisfaction
It started with a brush against the thigh. Neither of them consciously thought twice about it, but it lingered and simmered in the back of their minds, longing to be expressed. Hours passed, as did days and weeks, but the thought still remained and began to surface. Both subtly tried to hint for attention, though that went unrequited due to their oblivious natures. They both wanted it so bad but couldn’t find the words, leaving them to masturbate alone, thinking of one another, longing for their touch. She began to where new fragrances, blouses, and underwear, anything to get his attention. While he foolishly “kept it cool” and acted as if he didn’t notice, though he saw every change, every haircut, every sideways forlorn glance and he wanted her touch so bad.