[FM] You and a Highschool friend reunite and take each others’ virginity [Str8] [Straight] [Vanilla] [Gentle Fdom] [Romantic] [Sensual] [2nd person] [Realistic]

Hey Reddit! This is my first time writing a full piece of erotica, and it’s mostly unedited. Any feedback is greatly appreciated!

Hope you enjoy!

Your hand hesitates for a second, an inch away from the door.

*Is this really happening?* You think. *And is this a good idea? Nah, fuck it. I’m probably never gonna get an opportunity like this again.*

You tap your hand gently on the door. No going back now.

A soft and familiar voice rings from inside the apartment.

“Enter!”

The door swings open as you push gently. A figure stands silhouetted in the moonlight shining through the apartment window. You can’t see her very clearly yet, but you can tell who it was without even thinking

“…Sasha….”

The name escapes your lips, and I turn towards you. “Come on in! Just because I have all night doesn’t mean you should waste time!” I say with a giggle and a smile.

Your mild kicks into overdrive as you take a few steps inside, closing the door behind you. The only light is the moon shining in through the floor to ceiling windows stretching across the far wall. Your eyes dart over my body, taking in every detail of the girl in front of you.

[f] [First Person] A [succubus] begins to come of age. (This is a beginning to a work in progress, feedback welcome) [No sex yet] [Draft] [Incomplete]

This is my first story of this sort, and one of my first fiction works, for that matter. I haven’t gotten far into it, and was looking for some critique on what I’ve written so far. What I’ve written at this point is ecchi at best, and I promise as it goes on, it’s gonna get a lot more dirty.

This is meant as a setup to the story, before anything really happens. I’d like some feedback, and suggestions regarding my style, voice, etc.

There are definitely some spots I already cringe at while reading, but I’d like to hear from you.