[MF] A Night Together

My [27M] boo and I [27F] had an amazingly sensual sort of non-traditional night together, and I was inspired to write it into a first person play-by-play. Throw-away account because I’m shy with my writing. Constructive criticism is appreciated! Here ya go:

The end credits roll and his breath is a soft metronome against my hair. His chest under my cheekbone is warm, and my face and shoulders rock slowly up and down in rhythm with his sighs. I rotate in his arms, determined to stay in his embrace as I aimlessly surf the internet on my phone. Minutes – or hours, I suppose – pass by; The Southern California night just outside my window is cool and breezy.