This is part 2 of the Violet Rose story, posting here for feedback mainly.
Part 1 Link(long, and fixed Chiana’s wrong name) [https://amaazingpages.wordpress.com/2019/12/23/the-violet-rose-society-warhammer-40000-setting/](https://amaazingpages.wordpress.com/2019/12/23/the-violet-rose-society-warhammer-40000-setting/)
Part 2 (same as whats here but on the site to read) [https://amaazingpages.wordpress.com/2019/12/25/the-violet-rose-society-part-2-her-first-duties/](https://amaazingpages.wordpress.com/2019/12/25/the-violet-rose-society-part-2-her-first-duties/)
(with this I tried adding some extra immersion with noises the characters make during sex)
Give feedback to see if its too cringy.
Her First Duty.
The Genoxia’s central dome was once used to contain a massive sphere of compressed, metal rich rock. Large asteroids were caught by the ships colossal tractor beam situated at the front of the ship, and its raw substance was melted down by powerful molecular cutters as the material was pulled into a central chamber of the vessel. It lead to the dome, where the molten rock was held and compressed by gravity manipulation into a dense sphere. Which could then be mined by smaller drones, the ores transported to other districts of the ship to be refined and packed for transport where it was needed.