An Excerpt from my lesbian fantasy piece – please give feedback!

I just want to see what people think of my sexy writing. I haven’t written the scenes before and after this beyond outline form yet, as they are just normal fantasy storytelling and I wanted to give the sex scene writing a shot.

Before this scene, Valentine, a rather plain young woman, was on her way to go live with a family friend after her father died. The trader caravan she was traveling with abandoned her during a rest stop and she gets lost in the woods. After an encounter with Mushroom Sprites and and magical vines, she is helped by Miss Evelynn, a beautiful witch who turns out to be the friend she is going to meet. After returning to Miss Evelynn’s cottage and having a meal and a bath, Valentine is trying settle in to sleep…

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