Writing a book, need advice!

I am writing a book, I would like some feedback from some like minded pervert. Thanks.

TRIGGERS: prostitution, bondage, semi-consensual, rape, MonMtF action

Alex was ready for one of his favorite performance, “the pretzel”. He was distended face up on an inclined bed, handcuffed with his hands behind his neck, a small wooden plank under his back to raise his chest and show his breasts, grown noticeably and pierced tastefully on the nipples. His legs were bent behind his head and kept steady by a short chain; his body almost bent in two to give maximum access to his boypussy. He was completely open and exposed, glistening with lube and ready to be used without mercy. The chains kept Alex legs and boypussy spread obscenely open, there was nothing he could do to stop or even slow a customer that wanted to just penetrate him brutally. His eyes were covered by a blindfold. He could not move at all, and his complete vulnerability turned the customers into wild animals, fucking his boypussy and mouthpussy in the most animalistic way. None of them lasted long, but they all came hard and there were a lot of them. Alex could not wait to start, the nipple piercings kept him in a continuous, torturing state of arousal. Alex really liked his body: smooth, supple, white as snow, fully feminine after the estrogen treatments and the surgeries. He especially liked his breasts, round, pink and with puffy areolas. Sometimes he thought about having his clitty amputated, but the customers were not happy with it. He was fully impotent, but he did not care since he already learned to come only with his prostate and his boypussy.