Who tells it better, men or women?

Hey there, so a myself and a friend have been swapping short stories and debating who tells it better. Would love to hear what you guys think?

Story 1

It was a hot summers day, Fiona was doing her normal routine and getting the train to work, but this morning was different.

She was a little later getting the train, and by the time it arrived it had minimal carriages resulting in the dart being jam packed. The doors opened and people nearly fell out it was that full. She slowly pushed her way in to the middle holding onto the pole in the center. Already she couldn’t wait to get off the train, squashed between back packs, men and women and starting to feel a little worried she won’t be able to breathe.