My first time publishing a story. Feedback is welcome

The rendezvous.
Tilly sat nervously as she applied her make up. Lips red as a rose, just the right amount of blush to her already flushed cheeks. Her eyes, lined to perfection with kohl, sparkled with anticipation of the meeting. Tonight was her first date with Daddy, an old friend from years back she’d been chatting to online. Jay was older by a few years but ex forces and had made her laugh at his suggestive comments on her posts. Theyd struck up a quick and exciting relationship, he was very complimentary and funny. But had a wonderful sexy way about him. Theyd exchanged likes and found much in common, tonight was to be a chance to prove to him how sexy she could be.
Tilly had chosen her outfit very carefully, she knew it would drive him wild with lust when he saw her. She squirmed, her pussy pulsing and already wet, her nipples hard and sensitive under the lace material of her body stocking.
“Good job I’m sat on a towel!” She thought to herself as the perfect image looked back at her from the mirror. Standing, she admired her newly grown bush, she’d grown it out for Daddy as he liked hairy pussy. It was perfectly framed in the crotchless area of the lace bodysuit that arrived earlier in the day.
‘Mmmm” Tilly purred as her fingers caressed her wet slit though the soft hair. She jolted as she brushed over her aroused clit. “Maybe just once more” she said as she reached for the hairbrush, carefully inserting the handle into her slick love hole. Wet with juice and dripping it slid in and out with ease. Her other hand reaching up to pinch and tease her hard nipples, her breath coming quicker as she shuddered to a very speedy climax. ” Wow…” she breathed, ” that was quick” She giggled as the hairbrush slipped out dragging a trail of juice all the way to the dressing table.
Composing herself she slipped a blouse on feeling the crisp material make her already sensitive nipples harden even more. Smiling at this she slid the skirt up over her hourglass hips and fastened the zip. Spinning round she admired the way it flared out, knowing she could flash him any time as they sat in the bar.
Tilly grinned. “This is going to be so much FUN!” she said as she stepped into her black patent leather stilettos. Grabbing her Mac she headed downstairs to collect her car keys and set off towards their rendezvous…

Jay stood in the shower as the suds ran from his hair across his broad shoulders and down his back. He sighed, shaking his head. “How on Earth did you get here?” he thought, a wry smile played across his face. It was a purely chance comment on an Instagram post that had opened a new world of sexy opportunities to him. Tilly had posted a few saucy memes but he’d never thought there would ever be any more than that. How wrong was he! Tilly had opened up about her sexy side and blown his mind with her revelations about her own sexuality and tastes. They were so similar to his own and many shared kinks. His hand found his hardening shaft, stroking it as the warm water cascaded over his face and down to his groin. He had to calm down or he was going to come and he didn’t want that yet, he was saving it for Tilly. She’d called him Daddy. It suited the situation and allowed them to roleplay, further increasing their sexual tension.
He turned the shower to cold in a bid to stop his cock throbbing, it seemed to have the opposite effect and his glans protruded from his foreskin, he couldn’t remember the last time he was this hard. It took every ounce of self control to stop. Eventually his erection subsided and he turned the shower off and stepped out to dry off. Dressing in casual polo shirt and slacks he contemplated going commando but decided, due to the amount of precome coming from his cock that boxers would be better to contain the flow of his juices. A dab of aftershave and grabbing his jacket he set off to meet his new beau….

Tilly grabbed her bag and headed for the car. Settling herself into the drivers seat she started the engine and had a sudden thought. She reached into her bag a found the princess butt plug. Popping into her mouth to coat it in spit she slid forward in her seat and pushed the plug home. She giggled again, her pussy was so wet she needn’t have bothered to suck the plug, her juices completely coating her ass.
She arrived at the agreed hotel and checked her make up in the rear view mirror. Applying another coat of the blood red lipstick, she took a deep breath, stepped out of the car and went inside..
Jay was stood at the bar and watched as Tilly made her entrance, every pair of eyes that wasnt perusing a menu was trained on this vision of feminine beauty as she sashayed to where Jay stood, pint in hand, smile on his face, beaming.
“Hi!” She said quietly smiling back up at him. “Hi, you look absolutely gorgeous” Jay was trembling slightly. It was sheer bliss, knowing this stunning vision of womanly beauty was here for him and him alone. Tilly took his hand and stretched up to kiss him. He met her advance with a small kiss on her perfect red lips, lips he was already imagining wrapped around his already stiffening shaft. Taking the wine he had ordered for her, they scanned for a quiet seat. The bar was fairly quiet for a change, they chose a table in a secluded corner away from the bar. Jay could almost feel the stab of envious eyes as they took their table. He tried to suppress his glee as they moved into the booth. Tilly removed her mac and placed it beside her on the bench seat, Jay slid into his seat opposite her and took a deep sip of his beer, more to try and stop his hand trembling and lubricate his throat which had suddenly felt rather dry.
He looked at her, ” Nice stockings” he complimented her. “Not stockings” she smiled back and pushed her shoulders back, forcing her lace clad breasts to push against the fabric of her blouse. “Bodystocking?” he enquired with a smile. “Nicer!” He smiled, swallowing hard. She giggled and shifted in her seat, her butt plug pushing deep into her tight anus. Keeping her composure was getting more difficult and she leant forward to whisper “wanna see Daddy? Does my Daddy want to see why his little girl cant sit still?” Jay felt a flush of heat in his cheeks as the enormity of the situation hit him. “Yes. Show Daddy.” He said quietly. Sitting back he took a sip, Tilly too, picked up her glass and leant back, crossing her legs, teasing him. She sipped her wine and put the glass down. Dropping her hands to the hem of her skirt. Lifting it, she quickly uncrossed and recrossed her legs. Jays eyes widened and the flush crept back into his face as he realised just what he’d seen. His hand shook as he picked his pint up and took another deep draught.
“Oh fuck!” He hissed. His head swimming with lust for this beauty sitting opposite him flashing her pussy at him. His cock strained in his boxers, precome leaking from the tip making his shorts wet and threatening to stain his pants. “Thats fucking beautiful my gorgeous naughty baby girl! Keep that up and im gonna come in my pants!” “No! Please dont Daddy, i want it, all of it. Please?” She pouted like a little girl who’d just been denied sweets. He laughed softly, ” Ha! Ive not done that for many years” smiling at her play acting. “Of course you can have it all, you naughty girl”. “Thank you Daddy but can we eat first? Im hungry” Tilly pouted again making him laugh at her antics. She reached across the gap and placed her hand directly on his cock, squeezing it. “Hungry for this” her eyes sparkled with lust. J leaned forward and kissed her again, only harder, more urgently. Her lips parted as his tongue sort her willing mouth. She returned the kiss with more passion than he expected. Her own tongue pushing past his in an incredible display of passionate lust. J pulled back, breathing hard. His own eyes glazed with fiery passion. “Food first!” He stood, adjusting his uncomfortable cock. Tilly’s eyes widened as she licked her lips at the sight before her. Her hand pressed between her legs, then quick as lightning lifted her skirt again, flashing her sopping wet pussy to J’s gaze. “Fuck!” J hissed and went to order more drinks…
Tilly smiled as she sat back sipping her wine. Her pussy was drenched with juice and the plug in her ass was doing wonders as it put pressure on her G spot. She felt deliciously naughty. Her free hand found its way back to her crotch, slipping two fingers either side of her clit, her eyes focused in the far distance.
“Hey? Baby girl” J’s deep voice found her in the pool of her thoughts, pulling her back to the shore and the proffered glass of dry white wine. Her head was already fuzzy from the alcohol, this second glass could tip her into total abandon. Tilly snapped out of her reverie as J sat down. A waitress brought cutlery and condiments, the meal arrived shortly after.
The conversation was punctuated with giggles and laughter from the pair as they ate sparingly knowing that a full stomach was bound to lead to indigestion. Dinner was dispatched without either mentioning what lay in store later.
Tilly stood taking her mac and bag to the ladies, emerging a few minutes later mac on ready to leave. J slipped his arm round her shoulder as they made their way outside.
The evening was overcast but warm, insects buzzed as they strolled towards the lake, the gravel crunching under fot as they walked. Peaceful and alone, Tilly undid the belt that held her coat, allowing it to fall open. J gasped as he saw she’d removed her blouse and skirt altogether. Her nipples standing proudly erect as her coat brushed passed them as she walked. J slid his hand down her back finding the split in the rear, he put his hand through and felt her exposed ass. He slid his fingers down the crease of her buttocks probing until he found the jewel of her butt plug. Gripping it between his forefinger and thumb he pulled gently, rotating it inside Tilly’s ass. Tilly gasped and shuddered with delight as the pressure of the plug pressed against her g spot causing a spurt of pee to escape and trickle down her thigh. “I need to go” she said. J let go of the plug and knelt before her, “do it, now!” he commanded as Tilly grasped his head pulling his face into her pussy, she began to piss. J opened his mouth hungry for her sweet nectar, swallowing as fast as he could, the slightly acrid piss burned but was so good. He’d craved this over the past weeks during their chats online and now it was happening. Js cock grew hard as the drops of pee that escaped hit his shirt and turned cold. He didnt care he was in heaven drinking this goddesses piss.
He licked her pussy clean, paying special attention to her clit. Tilly moaned as she came hard on his mouth. J stood and bent down to kiss Tilly, who met his kiss with equal passion. “Thanks, i needed that” she said gazing into his deep set blue eyes, “my absolute pleasure” he replied, smiling and wiping the residue from his beard, licking his palm.”mmmmm, delicious” he complimented her. Tilly giggled again and wrapped her coat round her to ward off the sudden chill she felt. “Perhaps we should head back?” She said turning back towards the hotel. J smiled in agreement, slipping his hand back under her coat he held her hip exposing her semi naked ass as they walked back…

Tilly smiled as she sat back sipping her wine. Her pussy was drenched with juice and the plug in her ass was doing wonders as it put pressure on her G spot. She felt deliciously naughty. Her free hand found its way back to her crotch, slipping two fingers either side of her clit, her eyes focused in the far distance.
“Hey? Baby girl” J’s deep voice found her in the pool of her thoughts, pulling her back to the shore and the proffered glass of dry white wine. Her head was already fuzzy from the alcohol, this second glass could tip her into total abandon. Tilly snapped out of her reverie as J sat down. A waitress brought cutlery and condiments, the meal arrived shortly after.
The conversation was punctuated with giggles and laughter from the pair as they ate sparingly knowing that a full stomach was bound to lead to indigestion. Dinner was dispatched without either mentioning what lay in store later.
Tilly stood taking her mac and bag to the ladies, emerging a few minutes later mac on ready to leave. J slipped his arm round her shoulder as they made their way outside.
The evening was overcast but warm, insects buzzed as they strolled towards the lake, the gravel crunching under fot as they walked. Peaceful and alone, Tilly undid the belt that held her coat, allowing it to fall open. J gasped as he saw she’d removed her blouse and skirt altogether. Her nipples standing proudly erect as her coat brushed passed them as she walked. J slid his hand down her back finding the split in the rear, he put his hand through and felt her exposed ass. He slid his fingers down the crease of her buttocks probing until he found the jewel of her butt plug. Gripping it between his forefinger and thumb he pulled gently, rotating it inside Tilly’s ass. Tilly gasped and shuddered with delight as the pressure of the plug pressed against her g spot causing a spurt of pee to escape and trickle down her thigh. “I need to go” she said. J let go of the plug and knelt before her, “do it, now!” he commanded as Tilly grasped his head pulling his face into her pussy, she began to piss. J opened his mouth hungry for her sweet nectar, swallowing as fast as he could, the slightly acrid piss burned but was so good. He’d craved this over the past weeks during their chats online and now it was happening. Js cock grew hard as the drops of pee that escaped hit his shirt and turned cold. He didnt care he was in heaven drinking this goddesses piss.
He licked her pussy clean, paying special attention to her clit. Tilly moaned as she came hard on his mouth. J stood and bent down to kiss Tilly, who met his kiss with equal passion. “Thanks, i needed that” she said gazing into his deep set blue eyes, “my absolute pleasure” he replied, smiling and wiping the residue from his beard, licking his palm.”mmmmm, delicious” he complimented her. Tilly giggled again and wrapped her coat round her to ward off the sudden chill she felt. “Perhaps we should head back?” She said turning back towards the hotel. J smiled in agreement, slipping his hand back under her coat he held her hip exposing her semi naked ass as they walked back…
I will write more if enough interest…

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