(OC) (Dom/Sub) I’d love some feedback on this SHORT story.

She knocks, the door opens and she enters quietly, a little nervous about what exactly she is doing there and how she is going to explain this to her conscience later. The doubting voices are silenced the moment she looks into the eyes of her tall, handsome lover, warm and inviting, flooding her body with relief, trust and a sudden rush of warmness. She is lead into the quickly darkening house as the afternoon turns to evening, table lamps provide a soft light and good music is playing in the background.

‘Welcome back to my home’ he says, offering her a glass of wine, which she accepts, happy to have a moment to arrive and feel the space she has entered. It has been a while since she was here,  and somehow it couldn’t feel more  different although it all looks the same. She looks around the room and notices that the kitchen window which looks into the neighbouring garden and is usually wide open has been closed and the curtain drawn tightly shut. Another flutter of nerves, but this time accompanied but the rush of anticipation and an undeniable dampness which she can feel starting to build between her thighs.

Her lover sits down on the couch with her, sipping his own glass of wine and lighting a cigarette. ‘Do you mind if I smoke too?’ she asks, wondering for a second why she felt the need to consult her host about something so trivial, but the thought passes in a moment. ‘Did you dress as you were told?’ he asks, and she is suddenly aware of his hungry eyes, searching over her body, lingering on her large perfect tits, and landing firmly on the crotch, exactly on the material covering her now wet pussy. Aware of how slutty she is feeling she nods, and slips her hand into her pocket to produce a small remote, giving him full control of the still resting egg, which she had slipped into her cunt before leaving home, exactly, as she had been told. ‘Good girl…’ he wispered, kissing her for the first time since she arrived, ‘shall we finish our wine and head out?’

Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/9jnq6d/oc_domsub_id_love_some_feedback_on_this_short