You get a last-minute invitation to an exclusive kink party and shyly ask if I would like to go over the phone, secretly worrying it is too soon in our relationship but eager to show me this side of you. We already had dinner plans and I can hear the hesitation in your voice but this is something I am curious about and want to experience even if it’s just once and, especially, with you. After discussing details with time, attire, and expectations, both exhilaration and nervousness sweep through me as I accept and hearing both relief and excitement in your voice with my acceptance puts a huge smile on my face. The party is this afternoon and since our plans were evening ones, I quickly get ready and pack my bag with the things we discussed and smirk as I add a few “extras.”
I can feel the butterflies fluttering as I knock on your door and my panties are moist with anticipation from the thoughts on the drive over. You open the door with a sexy grin and immediately pull me inside, your lips desperately taking mine in a hungry kiss. God, you taste so good! Dropping my bag, my arms circle around your neck and pull you closer while my hips involuntarily grind against you. You moan down my throat deepening the kiss and I can feel how excited you are against my stomach as your hands slide down my back to my ass leaving goosebumps in their wake.
Leaning back, you pick me up and I wrap my legs around your waist as you carry me to the kitchen and set me on the counter continuing to kiss me then nibbling my lips. I release your neck and run my nails up to your head to lightly scratch, enjoying the feeling of your hard body against my soft one. My nails send waves of pleasure through your body to your toes and I can feel your body shiver in my hold as you nibble my lips and make your way to my ear where you whisper, “I want you before we leave.” With my head leaning back, you thrust your hips against my core so I can feel your desire and I softly moan, “yes, please.”
I can feel your smile against my ear, “good,” you whisper and the tip your tongue touches my earlobe before leaning back to look at me. You grin and I smile as you kiss the tip of my nose, stepping away to make us a drink. Immediately, I feel the loss of our closeness and after a brief moment, I hop down heading to the door to take off my shoes and using this time to gather my senses a bit.
Walking back to the kitchen, my pussy clenches at the sight of all that is you – your tall stature, strong jawline, handsome physique, and that devilish grin on your sexy face while you finish up our drinks. I take a deep breath loving how much chemistry we have. You turn to hand me a drink clinking my glass, “to new beginnings. Cheers.” “To new beginnings. Cheers,” I repeat and we both take a drink as you close the distance between us with a wicked grin. Your body touches mine as you set your glass on the counter near me. A jolt of pleasure shoots straight to my core and I sigh, “I need you.”
Staring into my eyes, we slowly undress each other never losing eye contact and you can see the desire building deep inside. I can feel your sexual energy surround me and I shiver with anticipation, softly moaning your name. Hearing my breathy voice sends tingles all over your body straight to the tip of your dick and your lips find mine as you start to leak precum. You hoist me onto the counter again and passionately kiss me as you pull me close, my legs spreading even more. Your cock is standing at attention between us and I pull you close until my pussy lips wrap around your shaft. I can feel you throb as you leak onto my belly. You involuntarily thrust on a groan and your hands drift down my sides as you break the kiss, moving to nibble on my neck. I set my drink down as my head falls back and moan my pleasure.You lean forward until I am laying back whispering, “just close your eyes and enjoy it,” and continue kissing your way down my torso eager to get to your prize. I comply and feel your lips on my inner thigh where you kiss and nibble both sides up to my lips then spreading them with the tip of your tongue as you lick up and down my slit until they swell, moaning at how good I taste.
Using your hands to hold me apart, your tongue slides up to my clit where you slowly lick in circular motions, listening to my pleasure as my breathing picks up. My pleasure is your pleasure and a thrill shoots through you at these thoughts, the noises I make and how my engorged clit feels on the flat of your tongue. You continue with the same motions and pressure as you inhale my scent causing pleasure to flow throughout your body and your cock to bob and leak even more. You’re so hard it almost hurts. As I start to quiver, you lift your head to look at me while inserting two fingers deep inside, finding my g-spot and begin to massage firmly towards my lower belly. “Mmm, I want to cum,” I moan and you answer, “don’t hold back. Cum when you’re ready.” Leaning back down to find my clit again with your mouth, you lightly kiss it before you begin licking in circular motions as you continue working my g-spot and listen to my breathing.
I can feel the build of my orgasm pushing me towards the edge of ecstasy as you play my body like a finely tuned instrument made just for you, completely lost in pleasuring me. I start to shake as you push me over the edge and I bring my hands to your head pulling you closer. I wrap my legs around you, “Oh my god,” I moan loudly and start to writhe uncontrollably. My orgasm washes through me in a swoosh and my pussy spasms hard around your fingers almost pushing them out as I cum all over your face but you keep going all the way through the end of my orgasm, licking and swallowing all my juices. Relishing in the taste. The Scent.
As my body starts to calm, I release your head and my eyes find yours and I whisper your name. You pull your fingers out and lick the cream off, moaning as you stand. You’re ready to burst as you slowly rub the tip of your throbbing cock up and down my wet slit mixing our juices and teasing me before you push your head into my tight channel. Words cannot describe how good it feels to finally be connected. You grab my hips to hold me steady, pushing in painstakingly slow as my opening spreads to conform to your girth until you are seated balls deep. My mouth drops open, “ahhhhhh,” I moan just as you grind at the bottom pulling my hips down at the same time to get deeper and moan my name as you close your eyes, feeling the intensity of our connection sweep through you. Desperately trying not to cum. I can feel your cock twitch deep inside and my pussy contracts at how amazing you feel buried deep.
After a few moments to gain control, you reach down and grab my arms to help me to a sitting position and lightly kiss my lips as I wrap my legs around you trying to get closer. Your hands glide down my back and you slide me off the counter at the same time thrusting your hips as you walk me to the couch, turn and sit. Taking another moment squeezing my hips, “go easy, I don’t want to cum too quickly,” you say on a groan and I can feel you pulsing inside me. My eyes find yours as I grin and say, “You’re not allowed to orgasm but you will take what I give you and watch me have another one.”
As I sit fully seated on your cock, staring into your eyes, I wait for you to acknowledge my demand. Your hands are on my hips and I can feel your cock deep inside my tight wet pussy as I slowly grind my hips down to get you further inside. I lean in and trace your lips with my tongue getting all my juices off and wrap my arms around your neck. I kiss the corner of your mouth and over your jaw to your ear where I nibble, grab your hair and pull your head back to look into your eyes before I whisper, “Do not disappoint me.”
You nod and squeeze my hips as I start to lift up to the tip and back down again, grinding down at the bottom of each stroke. Feeling you everywhere deep inside as I begin to move my hips faster and we moan simultaneously. I release your hair and put my hands on your shoulders for balance and begin to stroke you harder and deeper. “Play with my nipples,” I command and you comply. Letting go of my hips with one hand you reach down and roll my nipple between your thumb and forefinger. Hearing me moan my pleasure encourages you to lift me slightly and bend to get your mouth around the other one. Using your tongue, you circle my areola and flick the tip before you suck, lightly using your teeth. I moan your name telling you not to stop and you move to the other breast with your mouth. Nibbling and sucking while your other hand plays with the other nipple.
I can feel myself edging closer and closer and I hold your head to my breast as I fuck you harder. Faster. Pushing the pleasure further. I can feel you everywhere and beads of sweat form on my skin and I continue my pace. I can hear your erratic breathing as you try not to cum and I can smell our sex. I am so turned on and tell you I’m going to cum again as I grab your hair and pull your head back so you can see me. You grab my hips and thrust up and I grind down creating a beautiful mix of pleasure that pushes me over the edge. I close my eyes and moan your name, bringing my head to your neck where it meets your shoulder, pulling your head to the side by your hair and I bite down not hard enough to break skin but enough to leave a nice size mark. That pushes you over as you moan, “fuck, I’m going to cum,” and I bite and suck harder through your orgasm.
Shaking as the tingles go down your spine to the tip of your dick you shoot your hot load deep inside. I can feel your cock pulsing as you instinctively thrust your hips upward on a deep groan and squeeze my hips tight. I release your neck and kiss the deep purple bite mark as your breathing starts to slow. We are both coming down and I kiss my way up your neck to your ear where I whisper, “now I have to punish you.”
As your hands are softly caressing my back, I nibble on your earlobe where I lightly blow into your ear and softly say on a sigh, “tell me your limits.” I can feel your still hard cock jump and you freeze for a moment as my words begin to penetrate through the orgasm haze. I lick your jaw in one motion back to your mouth where I bite then kiss your lips, enjoying the connection of our bodies and grinding my hips one last time, feeling a spark of pleasure shoot through my core. Breaking the kiss, I lean back on your lap, my eyes finding yours as I lightly scratch your muscular chest. You softly moan and after a few moments you boldly say, “none.” A wicked grin forms on my face and I say, “you surprise me, handsome.” Uncertainty washes over you as you quickly amend your statement with, “uhhhhh, I reserve the right to modify that any point.” My smile broadens and I continue to stare into your eyes, leaving your uncertainty floating in the air for several long moments before I whisper, “of course.”
I give you a chaste kiss before I slowly lift my hips, your cock sliding out, and our juices drip a little onto you then down my legs as I stand. I reach my hand out to help you stand and you take it, promptly standing in front of me. I grab your hips and reverse our spots sitting on the couch in front of you. “On your knees,” I command and you comply. I slide my bottom to the edge of the couch and say, “you will kiss my feet then thoroughly clean the mess you’ve made using only your tongue.” A thrill runs through your body at the thought of pleasuring me by licking my pussy and a small smile forms on your sexy mouth. You bend, lightly kissing both my feet, and start up my legs alternating between the two until you get to my knees where the juices have dripped to.
Using your hands, you spread my legs even further and take the flat of your tongue begin licking my inner thigh in one motion halfway up the left, swallowing then repeating the same on the right side until you reach my core and moaning at the beauty of our unique taste as you go. You lift my legs resting them on your shoulders then sliding your hands underneath both cheeks to keep me steady but as you do, juices leak from my slit over my perineum and down my ass crack. “Mmmm,” you moan as you watch the cream then use your hands to part my ass cheeks further and start licking me clean from the bottom up ensuring to get every drop of us as you make your way to my slit. Licking my vulva and then parting my lips as your tongue dives deep into my swollen hole. You close your eyes to savor the taste and taking a deep breath, breathe in our scent while using a scooping motion with your tongue to lap up every single drop.
Unsure if you have it all you use your fingers, inserting them into my vagina then pulling them out to lick them clean, rubbing against my g-spot purposely each time. Absolutely loving the thought of me cumming on your face again. After several times and hearing my breathing pick up with every stroke, you smile and put them in one last time and begin massaging my g-spot more forcefully. Eagerly you start to lick and suck my clit, cleaning it at first then for my pleasure as you listen to my breathing and soft moans as they escape my lips. Pleasure flows through your body at the thought of giving me another orgasm before we go and you moan. Smiling when I hear your pleasure I say, “enough,” forcefully to get your attention and you stop. Putting my hands on your head I lightly push you away and your eyes find mine questioning…
“That’s enough,” I say and I can see the disappointment in your eyes but this is for your punishment not your pleasure. “Go clean yourself up so we can go.” Slowly you stand then stop, still questioning me with your eyes, “Go!” I say louder without emotion or a smile and you turn, quickly picking up your clothes as you head to take a shower almost hurt at my lack of emotion and not being able to make me cum again. Satisfied I am clean and you are disappointed, I smile as I get up, put my dress on and finish my drink while I wait for you to get ready thinking, I’m not sure if that was his punishment or mine as my body begs me for release. Squirming as my body hums, I shake my head at these thoughts, and finish my drink knowing by the look on your face this punishment is something you won’t soon forget.
You aren’t gone long and I hear you before I see you. Smiling at how sexy you look, I can still see the uncertainty in your eyes but you grin when I open my arms to you and walk in for a tight hug. I squeeze and pull you closer, my hands traveling up to your head and kiss bite mark hidden by your shirt before I run my nose up your neck inhaling deep, loving the way you smell and licking upwards with the tip of my tongue until I get to your ear where I whisper, “your scent is intoxicating and I can’t get enough of you, baby.” My words and embrace ease your mind a bit and the knot releases in your belly as you sigh but you’re still reeling from earlier events. “I didn’t expect that type of punishment,” you say on a squeeze before you pull back and look into my eyes. “I know,” I whisper, studying your face for a moment before we grab our bags and head out.
Source: reddit.com/r/sexystories/comments/7jldmy/mf_your_punishment_written_in_first_person_and_i
Ok, so im not an expert, but here is how you could’ve made the story better for me. The start is a bit fast. The first few words should not be the same as the rest of the text, rather something the reader can use to quickly catch on. The «extra» thing would’ve worked great. Next is the pacing and description of thing in general. Your descriptions are good in general, but they can become a bit to detailed and leave nothing to the imagination. Cause when writing a story such as this, leave more to the imagenation and try and get more plot or «action» per word. I got through 4 paragrapfs before I gave up, because thing were moving so slowly, considering the reader is horny. Good luck.