You awake to being tied to a broken bed with a 6ft 2 muscular white guy with a 11 in cock dangling between his legs.” Hello it’s good to see you are awake” he says with a deep commanding voice. “W-where am I?” You asked confused and slightly dazed. “In my sex slave training room where you are going to be trained” he says with a evil grin as he grabs a vibrator and three vibrating eggs and places one egg on each nipple and your clit taping them down. Then he places the vibrator into your ass and turns on all 4 at full power.
You scream as the sudden vibration surges through your body. “AaAaAaAah” you moan out . He looks at you and walks forward towards you with his cock now hard as a rock. He grabs your throat and starts choking you as he rams his cock into your pussy. You moan loudly as he rapes you viciously making your cunt walls stretch to his cock.
He rapes you for several hours filling your womb with his cum. He pulls out and squirts some cum on to your petite body and looks at you spasming from the vibrators that are still going and says ” welcome to your new life slave.
Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/ts117v/you_f_was_trained_on_how_to_be_a_good_girl_by_a
So a couple of things: first, you should probably have a content warning if you’re going to straight up use the r word xD. Beyond that, I like the concept. Your writing style is short and to the point. While I admit not everyone uses long soliloquies and prose, your writing strikes me almost like bullet points. This would work as EXCELLENT notes for a longer piece
Example:
“You awake to being tied to a broken bed with a 6ft 2 muscular white guy with a 11 in cock dangling between his legs.”
Could be developed into:
“You awake, tied to a broken bed. There’s a tall, muscular man beside you. Through the dim lighting of the room, you can guess that he’s white, maybe mid-50’s. And as your gaze drops down from his towering height, you notice the eleven inch cock dangling between his legs.”
So on and so forth. Hope this helps! <3