Tips and tweaks from the ladies needed

First off, I’m a man, and I’m not a writer. Never have been, and probably never will be. This all started because I have a ridiculous hotwife fantasy. She doesn’t want to sleep with anyone else, so I’ve tried to think of other things to kinda satisfy the fantasy. Now she is a writer, and good at it, though she’s never written any kind of erotica. My idea was that she could come up with a story of her own (fictional) account of cheating on me while at work. My intent was to help fulfill the fantasy for me while also giving her a chance to be creative and tell me a bit more of what she would like. She agreed, just wasn’t sure where to start, so I thought I could maybe give an outline for her to complete with detail. It started out that way, as you will notice in the beginning, but I got into it, and carried away. It’s written from her perspective to tell me, but again, I’m a guy. I can only go at what I guess at and my imagination, so any tips and/or tweaks to make it more realistic would be greatly appreciated. Again, I’m not a writer, I just got carried away, but now I wonder if her reading it might be a good turn on for her, so I want it to be awesome, lol

You were at work, and the kids were with my parents. The insurance guy came by to inspect the house. He knocked on the door to let me know he was here. I was taken aback, as he was younger than I expected (insert close age and short description of him to your liking) just as he was walking away from the door, I looked down and noticed a large bulge. I closed the door as he was looking at the house and kept thinking about how big it might be. When he knocked on the door again to let me know he was done, I scrambled to think of a way to get him to stay. I asked if he needed to inspect inside the house, he said “no ma’am, just the outside.” Trying to think quick I asked he would like a drink. He obliged, so I invited him in. I handed him a water and leaned against the counter. I had been wearing a big tshirt and short shorts that you couldn’t see anyways, but while he was outside, I took off the shorts. Only wearing the big t shirt. But I could tell he noticed. I let him take a drink, and tried to casually bring it up. “So.. not trying to be weird or anything,” I said- “but I couldn’t help but notice your dick bulging in your pants.. and to be honest, it was all I could think about while you were outside.” He looked shocked, but intrigued. “You know.. my husband wants me to sleep with other men.” He took a few steps forward, I stood up straight and lightly stepped forward as he did. As he kept slowly stepping forward, he asked “are you sure? I wouldn’t want to risk my job over-“ at this point he was close enough that I reached out and rubbed his dick outside his pants. I got closer and out my hand on his chest while still gently rubbing him. “I’m sure” I said softly as I looked up at him slowly. He gently grabbed my face and started kissing me, slowly at first, then pushing his tongue between my lips into my mouth. I felt the first twitch of my bits as I started to get a little wet. He moved his hands down from my face to my sides, gently grazing my breasts as he passed them. When he got to my thigh, he lifted my shirt and squeezed my butt. He knew for sure now that I wasn’t wearing anything. He kept squeezing my cheeks with both hands, then slowly reached between my legs. I was starting to get really wet now. He gently rubbed my lips, until my wetness was spreading all over. He stopped to pull off his shirt. After his shirt was off, I slowly knelt down, kissing down his chest and stomach. I started undoing his belt, then his pants, then his zipper. I reached in to pull down his underwear. He was clean shaven, and as I pulled his underwear down, I realized just how big it was. I pulled it out, and slowly licked the bottom, from his balls, to the tip. I felt it twitch as he was already almost rock solid. I kept licking until I decided it was time to put it in my mouth. I could hardly open up wide enough, and couldn’t even get half of it in. I sucked until he came in my mouth. It was a lot of cum, and I nearly choked trying to swallow it. I thought he might be done after that, and got kind of sad. He must’ve noticed, cause he grabbed my face, picking me back up to his face, and started kissing me again. I grabbed his now rock solid dick, realizing he wasn’t done. He reached back down between my legs, rubbing my lips again, slowing pressing his finger between them, finding my clit. I was dripping by now, he rubbed a little quicker, then moved his fingers back to my hole. As he pressed a finger in, his other hand started rubbing my clit again. He slowly fingered me while rubbing my clit, until I came. I came hard. The rush of cheating was more than I expected. Better. After I came, he grabbed my ass with both hands and picked me up and set me on the kitchen counter. He finished taking his pants off. As he did, I pulled off my shirt, revealing my perfect little tits. He moved his hands softly up my side and grabbed both of them, gently squeezing. As he got closer, I felt his dick press against me. I leaned back so that he could rub my clit with his big member. I was so wet by now that it was even dribbling onto the counter. He rubbed my clit with his dick until I came. Again. Even harder this time. The rush was incredible. I started thinking this could be a regular thing, as I felt almost addicted to the feeling already. After cumming yet again, he slowly pressed the tip against my pussy. Even as wet as I was, it didn’t immediately go in. I was tight, and he was large. It took what seemed like a few minutes to get all the way in me. At least all that I could fit. I was completely filled, yet when I looked down, he still had plenty of dick left. I had never been stretched quite like this. It hurt, but felt so good. He slowly started moving in and out, all the while with his tongue in my mouth. He slowly built up speed until he was pumping me hard. I looked down, and with each stroke, he was all the way in. I couldn’t believe that I could fit it all. As he pumped, I started to shake. My hips started to buck, and I tried to pull away. As he got close to cumming, he said he was going to pull out. I heard him, but didn’t say anything, as I was too caught up. My whole body started quivering, as I was completely filled, and he hit every spot inside me. I was shaking, hips bucking, and he was about to blow. As he started to pull out, I wrapped my legs around him and pulled him back him. I could tell he was surprised, but he knew I wanted it. As he was throbbing inside me, pumping me full of his warm cum, I threw my head back, and came again. This time harder than ever. So hard, that I felt the intense urge to pee, but it wasn’t pee. I squirted on him. I couldn’t believe it. I had never done that before. It was by far the best orgasm I had ever had. He was soaked, the counter was soaked, the floor was soaked. He stayed there inside me, still pumping me full of cum. The thought of it all made me cum one more time. I was filled with pleasure. With ecstasy. As I slowly came down, he looked into my eyes. He knew it was his time to leave, and so did I. Though, I didn’t want him to. As he pulled out, my pussy flooded the counter with his cum. My pussy was gaping slightly, stretched from his large dick. His cum oozed out of me, so much that it too dropped to the floor. He went to the bathroom to get cleaned up, and I debated even cleaning up the mess. Should I leave it for you to find? I didn’t. I cleaned it up. I wasn’t ready to tell you what I had done. I felt slightly guilty, knowing I had just cheated on you. But it was the best I had ever felt. Anyways, you were into it, so why should I feel guilty? You had already encouraged me to fuck another man. Now I had done it, and it was so worth it. Next time, I’ll let you watch. Watch how much it turns you on, how rock hard you get, watching your innocent wife cum on another mans dick. 

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