A sample of my writing any feedback is welcome

James was nervous, he was sure what was about to happen. He had never had an encounter like this before, of course he had slept with his share of women but none of those occasions were like this. As the woman in the doorway kept gesturing towards him James started towards her, his heart was pumping out of his chest, he looked around him to make sure nobody was watching. He didnt know why he cared if anyone was watching, maybe a little part of him felt like what he was doing was illegal as anything he had done before that caused his heart to beat like this was, in fact, illegal. With every step James grew more nervous, his knees grew more weak and his stomach filled with more and more butterflies.

Before he had a chance to doubt himself he was standing within touching distance of this random woman. Both of them stood there, again staring deep into each others eyes for what seemed like an eternity before James decided to speak. As he took the shallow breath before he spoke the woman stopped him in his tracks, pressing her finger against his lips. She didnt want him to speak, she didnt need him to, their eyes were saying everything that their lips wanted to.

The woman was wearing a crimson red silk robe, tightened just enough around the waist show off her curves but loose enough to leave something to the imagination, not that imagination would be needed for much longer. Her eyes were the colour of a stormy ocean, blue but with hints of white, she wasnt wearing any makeup – she didnt need it.

James leaned forward, put his hand around the small of her back and pulled her close to him. He dropped his bag with whiskey and ice, the used he free hand to hold her face as he kissed her. As the kissing continued the breathing became heavier. They stumbled into the hallway closing the door behind them. james stood back a few inches and pulled string off her robe, then pulled it off her shoulders. As the robe fell to the floor she could feel the silk brush against her as it did so. The feeling of the soft silk brushing against her nipples as it fell drove her insane. At this point she was growing more and more desperate to see what James had to offer.

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