You emerge from the bathroom, having had a luxurious hot bath. The bathroom has been adorned with rose petals and subdued candlelight, the water scented with lavender. You are wrapped in a white fluffy bath sheet which goes all the way to the ground so that when you walk your pretty little toes are all that peek out from the bottom of the fabric. You enter the bedroom which has also been scattered with candles, giving it a warm glow. I am sitting on a stool in front of the bed, admiring the sight that is you. I beckon you over and run my hand up under the towel feeling your smooth, shaved legs. I gently pull your left leg over my right shoulder exposing your mound, I lean forward and inhale the musky scent of your sex. Then I slowly begin to lick the folds of your labia, missing for the moment the little bud of your clitoris, waiting for the moment when it is swollen and ready for the attention it deserves. The wetness of your pussy is amazing, my tongue lapping up every delicious drop, rotating, licking, penetrating the depths of the prize. Your head is thrown back in delight and joy, the sounds coming from your throat urging me to go deeper. Your fingers are digging into my shoulders and you pull my head deeper into the juncture of your thighs, as you cum on my tongue. You push yourself away from my attentive tongue and take my hand, guiding me directly to the spot where you know the greatest of pleasure will derive. I finger you gently using the wetness to lubricate the sensitive skin between your pussy and ass. Again this is a wild and wonderful feeling and I can feel the groundswell of another climax coming on. I slow the movements to prolong the sensations you are feeling and then with one swift thrust I push my finger into the tight hole that is your ass. This brings on another orgasm and you are whispering my name, the sounds are pushing me towards the edge and I have to have you. I pull you down onto the bed and hover over you, my rampant cock throbbing in anticipation. You feel me, running your fingers up and down the shaft, cupping my balls, then finally pulling me down where I am able to enter you and …………………………..
Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/qp9nq7/my_first_attempt
Good read. Double enter for paragraph spacing. Otherwise, keep up the good work
Its really good but my advice would be to use the adjectives for the physical sex as well, you paint a really good picture of the situation and surroundings, really descriptive etc. But then it seems to just go “then she came” – try being more descriptive in that like “I felt your muscles begin to tighten as your pussy enveloped my fingers, your breathing quickened” etc
But as a whole, it’s a great story!
Edit – spelling etc.