The Coming of Ellie Mae
Part 3
I have had some input on my last two stories. To set the stage for the story, I have had to use flashbacks that may or may not cause some confusion. I took the input and will put my flash backs in italics. If someone(s) have any information to properly handle flashbacks, please let me know. I am a new writer and will take any and all positive criticism in an effort to help me be a better writer. In saying this, all the comments I have received so far is either a great job or great job but work on this issue(s). To those that read this, please take time and let me know how I am doing or give me ideas for future actions for Ellie Mae. I write these stories for the joy of the readers, if I don’t get reads or lack to deliver what the reader expects, I am not doing my job as a writer. Thank for those that have commented and in advance for those that will in the future.
Ellie has been excited the last two weeks knowing I will be home soon. I have been in a total of three countries, four flights and two and a half days of travel to get to her. I have been dealing with nothing but foreigners since leaving work. I land in Atlanta after a 14.5 hour flight and now have to stand in line with 400 other people to clear US Customs.
I attempt to take a public bathroom shower (baby wipes & cologne) along with clean boxer briefs, socks and clean shirt, before boarding my last flight. I know I am so close to being in her arms. I am both excited and exhausted at the same time. I know I am boarding my last flight and a short 50 minute flight and I will be with Ellie for a very short time. It is so nice to be flying in, seeing familiar surroundings. We land and are now taxiing to our gate as I text her that I have landed.
As I walk from the gate, I see your beautiful smile through the glass wall. I walk through the doors and she literally jumps into my arms with her legs wrapped around me. As always, she smells fantastic and looks even better. I want to take her right there. She is wearing a mid-thigh length cotton summer dress with stocking on. That is not her normal combination but I am both overwhelmed and exhausted from my travel. The wind is blowing and she is very conscious about her dress blowing up, but I just discard that. As we get close to the car, there is a big gust of wind and instead of holding your dress down; Ellie lets the wind blow up her dress and I see that she is wearing a black lace garter that is attached to skin tone stockings with no panties on. I stop in my tracks as this is very out of the ordinary for her. Ellie turns around and see the grin on my face knowing that I saw. I place my stuff in the trunk of the car and go to unlock the car for her to open the door. She turns around and place two fingers in my mouth. I can smell the scent of her pussy and that fantastic taste of her on them. I savor the taste to get all that I can. I pull them out and continue to smell them. She just smiles and gets into the car.
I get into the car and proceed to drive out to the highway. Once we are on the highway, Ellie proceed to pull her dress up to expose her clean shaven pussy and begins to touch the soft glistening lips ever so lightly. She than takes her right hand and sticks 2 fingers deep into her pussy, withdraws her now glistening fingers and proceeds to rub them all over my mustache and nose. Ellie reaches over and start to rub my hard cock through my pants. She reclines the seat back a little so she is lying back and proceed to masturbate for me while I drive home. I take quick glimpses and see that her pussy is so wet; fingers just slide into her pussy so easily. She stops rubbing yourself to let me lick her fingers yet again. She proceeds to pull out a small vibrator and starts to use it on your clit. Ellie gently slide it in from time to time and back to your clit.
Ellie tells me, “Pull your cock for me”. I do as you instruct as I am more than willingly. My cock is so hard with my head all wet with pre-cum. She runs her finger over the head of my cock to pick up some of my pre-cum and puts her fingers in my mouth. “Suck on my finger Honey”. She uses her left hand and starts to stroke my cock, it feels so good.
Ellie stops masturbating and leans over to suck my cock. I have to move the seat back further. I place the car on cruise control and let her suck me. I can hear her inhaling my scent like I have some many times to her. Ellie has always loved my scent as much as I do her. After going so long without real sex I feel myself building up. Ellie takes notice and starts sucking harder as she flicks her tongue over the head of my cock while stroking my cock and with the other hands applying slight forceful pressure to my balls. She feels my balls starting to pull up and down and she knows I am past the point of no return, I pump huge loads of cum and she struggles to take it all in her mouth not wanting to miss any of it. I can hear her slurping and gagging as she take my entire length into her mouth.
She proceeds to spit out my entire load of cum into her hand and then proceeds to smear it all over her pussy. Ellie also pushes as much up inside as possible. She takes her hand and places it to my lips and I eagerly lick her hand and fingers clean. I even flick my tongue under her finger nails and suck on each finger. She pulls out a pair of boy panties from her bag and puts them on. “I want a nice marinated pussy for you to eat clean when you get home”. “I know how you like to eat my dirty pussy”. “I hope it is especially dirty and smells when we get home”. I want you to suck on my dirty pussy till I cum and want you to lick me clean, my little Cum Slut”.
I am just blown away by that comment that you could have knocked me over with a feather, but I go along with it and reply: “Yes, Mam”. I’m not sure what has gotten into her but since it really turns me on, I encourage her by playing along with and showing my wiliness to do so.
It is one of the most incredible blow jobs I have ever gotten from her since she normally does not swallow. Ellie does not like my cum in her mouth but will occasionally swallow for me. She is willing to do what she would rather not from time to time. I guess this is because I love to eat her cum filled pussy all the time. I love the combined taste of her and I. I will even tell her to push it out so I can see it flow from her pussy. I will then suck on her whole pussy to get as much in my mouth. I do my best to clean up every mess I make, that is one of the things she loves about. I occasionally will go to kiss her but in most cases; she will turn her head to avoid it. “I don’t know how you can do that but I love when you do”.
She tells me to stop at the restaurant to get something to eat. She does this not in an effort to eat but to prolong us getting home. She is doing her best so that her pussy can get as dirty, smelly, and marinated as possible. I myself am a little oblivious to the reason due to jet lag and a mind blowing blowjob.
After 45 minutes, we finally walk in the door and I plop myself down on the cough. “You are not done yet, you have a dirty pussy and ass to clean”. You made the mess and now you are going to clean it up now”! “Yes Mam”, I reply. She grabs my hand pulling up and leading me into the bedroom. She bends over the side of the bed and lifts her dress up exposing her ass with her panties still on. “Get over her and smell my ass and pussy through my panties”. I eagerly place my nose right in the crack of her ass and inhale deeply. The smell is always intoxicating. I go to pull her panties to the side and she tells me “No”. “Leave them were they are and lick, smell, and eat me through my panties as I told you”.
I look and see her panties are soaking wet. I start to lightly bit and lick her large pussy lips. Ellie moans as I do my best to please her. This is driving me crazy and I pull her panties to the side but get stopped before I can expose her glistening pussy. “I told you NO, you will do as I tell you”, “Do You Understand Me”? I reply; “Yes Mam”. I go back to driving my face in her ass and pussy. I stick my nose into her ass crack and inhale as deep as I can. This is driving me nuts, I so want to drive my tongue deep in to her ass and then suck on it, licking her tight little brown pleasure hole. She reaches around with both hands and pulls my head deeper into her brown rose bud.
She gets up and tells me to lie on my back. I do as she tells me and she gets up and straddle my face with her pussy. She starts to fuck my face with her panty covered pussy. She is facing my feet so she can change position so as to fuck my face with either her pussy or ass. I can hardly breathe as she leans forward and fucks my face. She grinding my face with her pussy and is not holding back. I struggle but her pussy is firmly fucking my face. She reaches back and pulls her panties to the side and entitles me to drive my tongue deep in her cum filled pussy.
“Suck my pussy clean, you little cum loving slut”. “You made it dirty and now you need to make me clean”. “You like that smell, don’t you”? I reply “Yes Mam”. “You like the taste”? I reply; “Yes Mam” in a gargled voice. She sits up and so her tight little ass hole is over my mouth. “Lick my ass you dirty little whole”, “make it all clean”, “Stick your tongue deep in my ass, tongue fuck me, NOW”!
I drive my tongue as deep in her ass as possible. I am driving my tongue in and out as fast as I can. I can her hear her moaning as she is rubbing her clitbucking her hips but never leaving my mouth and tongue. This makes her fuck my tongue and mouth even harder. I am having hard time breathing but won’t stop. I decide to suck on her ass as she loves this. This puts her over the edge and starts to orgasm violently, fucking my tongue and squeezing my head between her legs. “Suck my ass hard Honey, don’t stop”! My face is drenched in her juices and is running to the back of my head and neck. I am in sheer bliss being covered in our cum.
She slumps down, lying down on top of me. This gives me a perfect view of her completely soaked pussy and ass. I slowly lick her juices up. Normally she is very sensitive after and orgasm so I have to lick her ever so carefully so as not to disturb her serenity. I slide my tongue in her pussy lightly to savor her fine wine. I so love the taste of her pussy both clean and dirty. She slowly moves her hips to match the motion of my tongues and mouth. “Lick my pussy softly and drink my juices Honey”, “I know it has been a long time since you have done so”. “Yes Mam, it has”. She must have let me softly lick and suck on her pussy for 20 minutes. She gets up and said that she needed to give me a bath so as to relax. I could have fallen asleep right then covered in sweat, cum and juices and after the extreme exhilaration and the mental stimulation she has given me since getting off the plane.
While the tub is filling with water she adds essential oils and Epson salts. The whole time she was dominating me for her pleasure, I was fully dressed. She unbuttons my shirt and rubs her hands all over my chest. She bends down and lightly sucks and bites my nipple than the other as she runs her hand over my hairy chest. She undoes my belts, pulls the zipper down and then pulls my pants down ever so slowly. She runs her hands over my wet, cum stained boxer briefs and with semi hard cock twitches. She pulls my briefs down and takes my cock in her hand and slowly strokes me. She takes her other hand and slides one finger in my ass half way. As suddenly as she begins to play with my cock and ass, she stops and tells me to get in the tub to bath and relax.
I lay in the tub relaxing totally for the first time since I left the house last time 6 months ago. My last 6 months was spent walking from my tent to the shower tent in my shower shoes. I was truly home in the safety of my wife and home. I take the natural sponge and proceed to clean my body from head to toe.
Ellie comes in with a very devious look on her face and kneels on the floor next to the tub. She takes the sponge and proceeds to move it over my cock and ass to make sure I am clean. She places a finger in my ass and it feels so good as she slides it in. She immediately finds my prostate and rubs it ever so lightly. She slides it in and out and each time she proceeds a little faster each time. As she notices me taking her finger easily, she slips two fingers in my ass. I love the feel of my ass getting stretched that I start to moan. “You are so good to me Mam”. She replies; “Well since you are so obedient and eager to please me, I thought I would give you some pleasure now”. “Baby, you have already pleased me so much already, I truly just want to please you”. I am trying to keep giving her the confidence to continue in the dominate manner and see how far this goes.
I did not take very long for me to find out her next suprise. She produces a large butt plug that I have never seen before. She places it at my opening and starts to apply pressure to my very willing ass. She starts off like her fingers and pushes in slightly and withdraws without it ever leaving my ass. Each time my ass opens more to take it further. “Come on Honey, you know you want me to fuck that tight little ass of yours”. “Remember that ass is mine to take as I please”. “Things are going to change a little around here and now I am going to watch your ass get fucked like you have fucked mine so many times before”. “I want your ass to hurt like mine after you fuck mine”. “I want you to know what it feels like”. “Thank you Mam, my ass is all yours and do what you want with it”. “It is all yours, for your pleasure”.
She knows how much I have wanted her to dominate me. I have never had a woman take me in a forceful way but know feel that she just might the first woman to use me for their pleasure. The good thing is her pleasure is mine as well.
She pushes the butt plug all the way into my ass and my hips come out of the water as the pain is sharp. “Oh, did that hurt”? “It hurt a little”. “Well that is how I feel when you get a little impatient when you fuck my ass”. She reaches down and slowly pulls it out and the pain is intense as the wide base stretches my ass out yet again. Once it is out she slides it back in totally but the pain is less and the pleasure is more. Like fucking my ass with her fingers, she picks up the tempo faster and faster till I am taking the butt plug like her ass takes my cock.
She tells me to get out of tub and bend over holding the towel rack as she fucks my ass faster. My cock is now rigid with cum dripping from the prostate stimulation. “Let’s see if I can get you to cum without any stimulation to your cock”? She pulls the butt plug out for the last time and pulls out our large girthed 8” dildo She lubes it up and slams it into my ass without hesitation. “You like it my little Bitch”? “Yes Mam, fuck my ass harder”. “Beg for it, tell me how much you want your ass fucked”. “Fuck my ass Mam, I need it bad, fuck me harder, harder, push it deep in my ass, I need it”. “That’s a good little slut, here you go”. She slams into my ass with no reservation. “My ass is all yours, take it as you please”. “I am and I don’t need your approval, this is all for me”. It’s nice to see what you see when you fuck my ass, I know why you like it so much”
The mental stimulation, the physical stimulation is too much for me and I start to cum for the second time today. She put her hand down to catch my cum as I shoot more and more. My hips are bucking back and forth as I push back to meet every plunge of the dildo into my ass.
I start to subside and she leaves the dildo as far in my ass as possible. She than moves it side to side, up and down but never withdrawing it. I am in overload due to the anal assault I have been given by Ellie. She than takes her cum filled hand and places over my mouth. “Lick that cum up you little cum slut” “You will always clean up you mess every time you cum from now on”. “You like that”? “Yes Mam I do”. “Make sure you don’t miss any, now you know what is like when you cum in my mouth”. “Make sure you swallow it all”.
“Now get in the shower and clean up, I want you all clean before you get in the bed”…………
Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/ltd1wk/the_coming_of_ellie_mae_part_3
Other than some mixed pronouns that lack continuity between first and third person, the overall flow of all three parts is good and the detail is good. The enthusiasm is there and very enjoyable. I personally love the description of the smells and sounds in the room, feeling the vibe as it all builds. I’d love to hear more of that in this to “be in the room.” You speak fondly of the actions, I don’t really experience the emotional level of the sex, but that might not be something you are trying to share in the flow of the story.
Write more. Each part got better. The fact the story chapters had connected elements (she sucked my finger to show she wanted sex) are effective devices.