Hello Fellow writers and reader, I need your feedback and suggestion on the story I am developing. If I can change the writing format or descriptions.
Thanks in advance.
Link: [https://chyoa.com/chapter/Kitchen-of-your-Student-Dorm.602735](https://chyoa.com/chapter/Kitchen-of-your-Student-Dorm.602735)
Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/g5e89k/need_feedback_on_the_story_arc