I am at a loss of words for how much I love my girl friend. I discovered I really love writing this for her. I’d appreciate any kind of feedback as this is something I want to get good at for her and possibly a community of people one day. I barely passed any English classes I attended, so excuse any lack of knowledge of forming a sentence or paragraph. Lol.
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I softly awaken to you probably being awake for hours. Lying there half uncovered just going through your morning routine. Checking the weather, Instagram, Wordle of the day, all of these things that for some reason makes me smile. Unknowing to you, it’s becoming one of my favorite things about my morning. Saturday, no plans on the calendar. Both of us wondering if we will have a day of adventure or equally as satisfying lounge around the house.
Red lights flicker on as you have them set to do, to signal that we’ve been in bed too long. You turn toward me, locking eyes with me for the first time of the day. I had already been staring at you for what seemed like hours even though 15 minutes had only passed. Seeing your shirt lifted halfway up your stomach, revealing your life story of tattoos,scattered across your body. Thoughts swirl through my mind of softly kissing each one as if my lips had never been there before. You tease me without effort at all, making me nervous to even make a move. As dominant as I can be at times, you still have so much more control over me. Makes my blood feel hot as I reach to touch you for the first time of the day.
Starting along the side of your hip, slowly moving toward your stomach. Viewing your body in this red light does things to me that I cannot explain, it makes your body look as if it is being advertised to me. Both our breathing changes as we tell each other “Good morning.” Often I wonder as you stare at me, if you get just as aroused from our early morning touch and gazing. Being that you turn me on so much, I already feel my cock get larger. Not getting hard yet but feeling like the slightest movement of your hand grazing across my face or bare chest would instantly get me there. I secretly love this feeling of complete control over my body.
I extend my neck so my lips can softly touch yours. Kissing you lightly as if I am testing cold waters before jumping in. Always doubting whether you want me to just grab a hold of you, and have my way. Wanting so badly to grab you neck and pull you closer. My hands firmly working their way down your body til I make it to your firm and muscular thighs. I would slow down after getting to that point hoping that you had enough time to get as wet, as I was getting hard. However, I didn’t jump in the water because I was afraid the water was too cold. I simply kissed you and watched you walk away without even trying.
Although watching you walk away does have its pleasures. Seeing you walk away to start your morning routine reminds me how lucky I am. I see you in those times no one else gets to see you. Walking back and forth between the bathroom and your dresser in just your underwear also starts a fire inside me. Seeing your ass that has this perfect round crevasse that meets your incredibly sexy tone legs. It is undoubtedly your sexiest physical feature.
After getting ready for your lazy morning. You lock eyes with me, walk towards the bed, fold your hair over to one side as you crawl across the bed towards me like a cat that wants something from you. Thinking in my head, “What does this beautiful woman want from me?” You kiss me. Look me in the eyes again and tell me you are going to have breakfast. I tell you “I love you” almost in a stunned way because I have such strong feeling for you(emotionally and sexually). You give me that adorable smirk of a smile and reply with “I love you too” as you always do. Yet again a moment where I want to dive head first into the water, but hold back. I know you need your time in the morning.
You walk out of the room, giving me time to recollect myself (aka allow my dick to give some of the blood back to my body). I stretch out and move closer to your side of the bed. Feeling the heat from which you made laying there still trying not to wake me. Everything about being around you makes me appreciate being able to wake up in the mornings with you. I fall asleep to the warmth that you left in bed for another 30 mins or so. Upon awakening, I go through my morning ritual of IG, text, funny post that you have sent me. Reddit being my new fix for entertaining my brain, I scroll through it for a while. Anything from local news to sex. Spending time reading about anything I think is relevant to me, before getting up myself.
One of my favorite times of the week comes. After running through my morning ritual, I get to walk out to the living room. Sometimes I feel like it’s as good as Christmas morning. I walk down the hallway eagerly and there she is, my favorite person, in her recliner as I’m walking past toward the kitchen. Only briefly slowing down so I can see her calmly collecting herself for the day, reading on her phone. I smile so much at that point and she never even gets to see. I continue past her, circle around the living room to the other entrance where I turn the corner. I give her a second to find a stopping place in her reading, getting the third kiss of the day. It feels as if it was the first one I took from her this morning. “Good morning,” you say with a smile. I smile and say the same and continue back to the kitchen.
Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/vsxffq/looking_for_some_feedback_on_some_writing_i_did