decent start? [Nsfw]

I’m an amateur writer, what are your tips for me.

Thanks in advance

An amazing person.

I want to stare into a lover’s eye.
Take her hand and pull It close, hug her to me, enjoy the shared warmth and peaceful release of oxytocin.

I want to feel her curves over her clothes with my hands, feel our chests moving against each other’s with each breath.

Nibble her ears and I massage her hips, kiss her neck as I move my hands to her shoulder blades.

I need her to know how much I want her, I need her- how much desire I have for her to claim me, and for her to let me do my best to set her on fire.

I want her to push me against the wall, where I let her be aggressive til I decide to push back,

My hands up and down her back, from the hips to her shoulder blades, gently laying her down on the bed, staring into her eyes as I tell her how amazing she is.

How I appreciate her hard work and how important her job is, how I love how she makes the best of what she has, her optimism, her jokes and quick wit.

She’s so beautiful, she’s amazing, in this moment I stare at her in disbelief, she’s a blazing wildfire, and I’m a single candle flame.

I start at her hip, kisses slowly trailing up towards her stomach, I pause to tell her, ” you’re going to make a fantastic mother” kisses continue as I speak “you’re beautiful” *I kiss her to the side of her belly button* ” you’re fiercely independent” *I kiss her rib cage* ” you’re smart, and amazing” *I kiss her right below her breast*. ” you’d make an amazing mother” *I kiss her nipple.*

I stand up, ” babe, you’re sexy as hell, I love you”.
I place my hands under her ribcage and pull myself to her, an awkward hug… But I don’t care.

She’s my everything, my friend, my trusted advisor, my soon to be wife.

I gently grab her head, tilt to one side, exposing her neck, I gently bite. She gasps and her already rapidly beating heart beats faster. Her breathes quickening.

I bite her ear, then I embrace her lips with mine, my hand massages her inner thigh, teasing her with anticipation, I alternate between making out with her and neck kisses and ear nibbling- as I kiss I slowly and gently rub her, her panties are warm and there’s a patch of wetness

I smile, I’m glad she’s enjoying this as much as I am, as I’m alternating kisses, I’m alternating my stimulation of her, fingers on the clitoris, then flat palm on her crotch, slight pressure , followed by firm massages on her inner thigh.then back to 2 fingers on her clit, circular but occasionally up and down.

She hates when I tease her

But I love it, her body showing me signs of immense pleasure, she’s breathing rapidly, panties are soaked through, she’s ready for me.

I cup her breasts, one in each hand- they fit perfectly in my large hands.

Her hips are twitching, she’s biting her lower lip

She reaches for my zipper.

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