My first story :) please give feedback so I can improve (MM)

It is a cold night sky in the city, not much people are present in the streets. Aren and Eren are walking at the pavement at the left side of the road, going home after their college tuition. They hear only their footsteps, and the sound of engines time to time. Eren is tired because of helping Aren carry his books and started panting soundly. That caught Aren’s attention.

Aren likes the sound that Eren is making, and try to hide it. Eren glance over to Aren and his face is slightly red. At first, he thought it’s just from the walking. Aren starts panting faster and his cheeks become bright pink because of the walking. Eren noticed it and his face turn bright pink as well. Eren felt suspicious of him as he is not panting at all. He tries to ignore it and pulls out his phone to check the time. But as he glances down, he saw something weird about Aren’s pants.

Frightened but intrigued, he questioned Aren. Aren felt ashamed and tries to cover it up saying it’s nothing, but failed. Eren asked if Aren is having a very visible erection because of him. With nowhere to run or hide, Aren gave in and told him honestly about his panting sounds and bright red cheeks. Eren flirted with him and said he can make Aren’s cheeks bright red too. Both of them are now visibly embarrassed but excited, but are desperately trying to hide it. Eren’s growing love rod is not helping either.

Eren then forcefully pull Aren into an alley to conceal themselves. He then ask if Aren consents. At first, Aren was reluctant to give in, but after giving it some thought, he decides to surrender his smaller body to Eren. Eren then pushes the helpless Aren onto the wall and force himself on Aren, who enjoys their saliva mixing and tongues touching eachother. He then lift up Aren’s shirt while Aren is still too stunned at how dominant and sexy Eren is.

Eren gently lick and suck on Aren’s already-hard nipples, and Aren lets out a soft moan for every bit of pleasure he felt. He then slowly move himself to Aren’s midriff, that’s when Aren starts panting even harder.

Slowly, Eren pulls down his pants. It revealed boxers with a moderate bulge on it. Aren sheepishly apologised for not having a big meat rod but Eren quickly stood up and gave him a quick kiss in the lips, then comforted him, saying that it is not needed. Aren was in awe of what is happening while Eren turned him to face the wall. While thinking about the things he wants Eren to do to his body, He got his boxers ripped off then quickly, his love hole licked and butt groped by Eren’s big strong hand. Aren starts moaning soundly as his knees grew weak.

After realising his knees are going to fail soon, Eren swiftly put the bags of books he had with him on the floor and command Aren to kneel on it against the wall. Aren obliged just as swiftly as he is very excited now and can’t wait to get his tiny hole stretched by Eren’s big love stick that’s throbbing visibly from his sweatpants. Eren proceeds to lock onto Aren’s soft and delicate thighs then continue eating his love hole out. After a short while, Aren’s pleasure hole gave in to Eren and starts to  moan louder as Eren’s tongue went in it and starts vigorously licking the insides. He then roughly split the bag of books into two sections and sat on the one behind. He ordered Aren to sit on the front one and lie on his chest.

Aren, not realising what Eren is trying to do, obediently did so. Eren then starts to massage aren’s asshole. After it is big enough, Eren starts fingering Aron roughly and pinch his nipples. After a very short time, Aren moans loudly again and semen erupts from his rod. He then begs Eren to keep making him feel good, to which Eren agrees.

Eren gently lifted Aren up by his arms and aimed for his asshole with his throbbing hard cock. Then drops him on it. Aren moaned soundly again, followed by a few soft moans. He can feel Eren’s rod throbbing inside him. Eren then stood up while carrying Aren with his arms, while his cock is still in Aren. He pushed Aren’s face against the wall and once he’s in position, Eren caress Aren’s body again. Eren starts thrusting Aren’s tight asshole slowly but firmly so Aren can feel every inch and the warmth of Eren’s love pole. Aren then begged Eren to use him as fast as possible and make him Eren’s personal fucktoy.

Charmed by those words, Eren hold his waist firmly and bend him over more, as he knows he’s going to make Aren’s knees weaker than ever. He then starts thrusting Aren at a not so fast speed, to make sure Aren’s not hurt. Aren realised and begged again, but Eren refused for Aren’s safety. But Aren’s cute moans are too hard to resist and he ends up thrusting him nice and hard. Aren’s knees grew weak after every orgasm he have from the hardcore thrusting but Eren is holding him firmly. After a lot thrusting and loving, Eren gave him a big anal creampie and slowly rest Aren’s on the books. He put his cock into Aren’s mouth to make sure both of his holes knows the taste of his cum.

Aren felt like a used fuckdoll, which is what he wanted. After both of them rest for a while, they leave the scene. Ever since then, they are hanging out more often.

Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/rhxh4u/my_first_story_please_give_feedback_so_i_can