So one rainy afternoon, a woman was casually washing the dishes after a long day of work. She was tired and wanted to sleep. Then all of a sudden, she heard banging on her door. It was her friend and he came barging in, soaked. He couldn’t get a ride and the roads were full of beeping cars. She got him a towel and made some coffee for him. She was happy he stopped by because she was having a really rough, hard day. They both sat down and started talking for a while. Laughing and smiling. After a long time, they decided to lay down and watch a movie to pass some time. The rain continues to pour down extremely hard. She made a joke abt the movie and they started to both crack down, dying of laughter. He got on top of her by accident and lifted up her shirt. They both went red really quickly. He apologized
After he apologized to her, it’s a long pause of them just breathing, then slightly blushing, both getting closer and closer until she kisses him and backs off unable to look at him in the eyes. He grabs her and pins her to the bed, then kisses her, then he starts taking her shirt off, feeling every part of her body. He touches her boobs, barely squeezing her nipples; she moans as he now, kissing her neck, pulls down her leggings.
As he pulled them off, he could feel the warmth of her soft skin. He makes his way from her neck down to her tits. He starts licking and caressing them, making her even more turned on. He makes his way all the way down to her sweet, wet pussy. Her clit was already throbbing from the pleasure. He gently started to kiss her sticky pussy. Her juices were all over his lips. One hand fingering her pussy and one hand caressing her tit, making her even more horny.
She breathes heavily and curls her toes in pleasure. Her head is flying back in pure ecstasy as he goes even faster. He shouts his love for her as she pants like a dog telling him to go even faster. He tells her that he can’t hold himself back and proceeds to take off his pants. She sees his “insert text here”, and gets hornier than before. She pounces on him like a cheetah hunting in the jungle. She starts rubbing her dripping wet pussy against his erection and loses control. She grabs his “insert text here” and puts it between her thighs and gives him a thigh job. “I’m about to cum and Sarah’s telling me “not yet” what is up with this girl?” He says. She moans “I want you to inseminate me!!!” and jumps on his dick as he cums inside her. Juices from both parties flow out and she slides off revealing a pussy dripping with semen. “You’ve made a mess of me”.
-The End
Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/p5hrb3/im_new_at_this_also_im_as_good_as_everyone_else
Hi, here are some pointers.
You mix present and past tenses which makes things confusing. The present tense at the beginning also sounds like the setup to a joke.
Pick one character and tell the story from their perspective. Including inner thoughts grounds the reader and helps the story not sound like a recitation of events. Also name both characters before the finale. Sarah’s name feels like it comes out of nowhere.
And change “insert text here” to cock or penis or member.