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**Writing a story by parts. Could use some critique (Pos/Neg). Let me know what you all think please and thank you!**
“Her worried expression turns mellowed when he sat beside her, an almost anxious or shy tone calming over her facial features to be replaced with that of excitement. Her breathing slows via the elongated respirations of her bosom rising and falling at a rhythmic pace and her beautiful green eyes cascaded in the Sun’s illumination light to affix to his. She remains waiting for her next command, be it a sweet gesture or a lawful demand. For at a second’s notice, she can switch between a hopeless romantic to obedient slave.
Her head is filled with sorrow from the past, scars mark over her hurt expression allowing her eyes to tell it all. A wall was placed to reinforce her stronghold of emotions, keeping the deepest feelings safe around her psyche. Her heart however remains open, allowing a slow drain only provoked larger with her permission to lead true and stand strong. She knows she was not always like this, but she’s learned how to live and prosper further through. Her life better then worse. Her being stronger, showing no weakness from the keen eye.
Her hands lay still among the tops of her knees as a quaint laugh rings through her lips. She is shy and embarrassed, but none the less eager to please and willing to serve. It takes a special bond that is forever being constructed to gain this in a slave. The next words proving her loyalty as ‘Yes Sir…”
Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/lnn3zs/a_tribute_story_piece