First time writer. What do you think? The adventures of D and J

(Back story to this fantasy)

~This girl and I recently had a “break up” and all. We agreed on a break at first but it progressed to a break up. Within that first initial break, we agreed to some rules: flirting and kissing with others was okay. Sex and such would be off limits. Well, there was no sex involved during her first encounter but I couldn’t help but fantasize about her and him~

It started off as an innocent night. J (her) and D(him) are co workers at a local poki-bowl store. J and D decided to have a few drinks while on the clock. Not the smartest decision J made but hey, she was single. Why would she care? So as the night progressed, it became closer to closing time. They proceeded with their drinking till they started feeling it. J and D cracked jokes, some turning dirty quickly. They became closer to each other, physically and emotionally.

Things were starting to heat up. D got closer to J, they both leaned in and kisses. She told me it was no more than a kiss but proceeded to tell me that there was touching involved. She said “yeah, there was some skin to skin touching, he rubbed me and I felt him…” which I was shocked about.

Nonetheless, I’ll carry on my fantasy of it:

J let her lips press against D’s, a passionate drunk kiss. J blushed and giggled as they pulled back. Not long before they got back to it, this time with more meaning. Their tongues met each others as D pushed J against the wall. J sighed pleasantly as she continued to tongue wrestle D. D they proceeded with his hands, letting them fall to her hips, bringing them closer to each other, still kissing.

D then slipped his hand under the waist band of J’s leggings, resting just above her slit. J was freshly shaven which was very apparent to D. He then slide his hand inside her panties, feeling the warmth between her legs. J let out a soft moan as D started to rub along her slit , stimulating J.

Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/j5zjsr/first_time_writer_what_do_you_think_the