This was a commission I received yesterday and finished a couple hours ago. The first/original draft was a lot harder and nastier but things were ultimately cut to fit the request. Overall, I’m very satisfied with the result and I would love your input on it.
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The sun was slowly rising over the snowy peaks of the mountain ahead. Normally, in this time of year people were leaving Alaska to go somewhere warmer and safer. Sara had other plans though. This tiny and cheerful 29 year old, might be standing at a mere 1,60 but she’s determined to travel deep into the frozen Alaskan wilds in order to finally spend some time with her biological dad. It has already been 25 years since her parents decided to end their relationship. Sara never explicitly learned the reason why they broke it off but they were never actually married and from the few times she spent time with her dad he seemed like a sweet man so she understood that it was nothing of her concern. Plus, when your father offers to put you up for a whole weekend in order to try and make up for all the years wasted you don’t exactly say no.
The plane landed on the frozen lake and moved in position close to a nearby wooden pier that was the only thing that her eyes could see in miles that even resembled human touch and civilisation. This was a total polar opposite for her as she is used to the warm climate and hospitality of the Mediterranean where she was raised by her mother and stepdad. Sara stepped out of the plane and immediately felt the shaving cold wind enter her clothes through every single opening as scarce as they were. She felt her temperature drop from her feet between her toes all the way to her busty E cup chest making her pink nipples harden almost to the point of hurting. It was then that she saw her father’s truck coming to pick her.
The truck stopped right in front of her and then she heard the door creak open before seeing her father walk out from the car. The only reason Sara was petite and delicate is because she got the genes from her grandma on her father’s side, her father on the other side took after every single gene from his father and his father’s father. Standing at a towering 1.98 the burly, bearded, beast of a man hugged Sara and immediately lifted her off of the ground. “I’ve missed you so much, babygirl” he said in his deep voice while Sara melted from the paternal affection she always wanted to feel. They put her stuff inside his truck and immediately rode off deeper in the mountains. Sara was mesmerised by the natural beauty that she was witnessing but her father could not take his eyes off of her. “I can’t wait to do all the stuff I should have done all these years ago” he said and Sara melted again, she finally had the father she craved.
They arrived at his isolated cabin in the heart of the frozen mountain and set her things up in the spare bedroom. “Wow daddy I can’t believe you actually live here all by yourself” she exclaimed. “Yeah some times it makes me crave another human’s touch, especially a woman’s.” He replied.
Sara not thinking much of what her father just said stripped down to a tight pair of light grey legging that now had a couple large dark sweat spots between her thighs and on her butt, a tanktop that hugged her bursting bosom and tiny pink ankle socks. Her father tried his best to hide it and supress it but the hormone-rich musk emanating from his own daughter’s sweaty body was the first time he was smelling a woman in almost a decade. Her scent combined with the sight of watching a petite, busty, blonde 29 year old prance around you home in clothes that leave little to the imagination are enough to drive anyone insane, let alone a father who has spent most of his life supressing his violent and downright incestuous urges towards his own daughter. “You look nothing like that cunt of a mother of yours.” He said with a deep almost gravelly voice “You remind me of my mum, your grandma” he added before Sara could even react to what he had just said. She felt the threatening undertone in his voice as the vibe of the room suddenly shifted. “Haha, you guys never really got along well, eh?” she said awkwardly as her father slowly lowered gigantic piece of wood in front of only door that the cabin had.
“No, we never did but thankfully I don’t see her in you at all so I have a feeling we’re going to have a great time you and I” her father said as he was now walking, menacingly, towards her. Sara took a couple steps back only to be stopped dead in her tracks by a large cold wooden wall. “Come on, babygirl, don’t make this difficult” he said as he started to caress her neck and breasts. “What the hell are you doing? Stop touching me!” She cried out in confusion as she desperately tried to get his cold, rough, hand to stop squeezing her swollen breast. He squeezed it harder and with tears in her eyes she started punching and kicking to no avail. He grabbed her by her hair and threw her over the large coffee table of the main room knocking down the candles and glasses of water that were once on it before her body ended up on the ground in front of the fireplace. The impact knocked the wind out of her lungs and everything became a little hazy for her. It was then that she felt the slightly cold air of the cabin touch the tight opening of her pink cunt as her father had roughly pulled down her leggings and panties, tearing them up, and was now spreading her open trying to take in all the aroma of his daughter’s painfully spread open holes. His belt buckle hit the floor as he kicked her legs open. Sara once again pointlessly tried to resist but her father weighed at least twice as much as her so there was nothing she could do to stop him. She cried and cried and screamed at the top of her lungs but there was no soul in sight for miles, they were all alone and deep down she knew it. Suddenly, she felt it. Her father’s cock was bigger than anything she had ever had inside her. She wasn’t sexually adventurous and it showed as her tiny vibrator and her boyfriend’s painfully average cock had done little to nothing to prepare her hole for the veiny monstrosity that her father’s cock was. In one motion he forced his bulging cock head all the way inside her now torn open cunt bottoming out hard against her bruised cervix.
“Fuck, I can smell your cunt from here” he moaned to himself as he continued to violate his daughter’s vagina but it was hard to hear over Sara’s gut-wrenching screams and cries. He continued to mercilessly bash Sara’s cervix and every thrust tore her vaginal walls more and more in order to force her to accommodate his cock. Suddenly he pulled out, “My god Sara, we wouldn’t want to get you all knocked up now, would we?”. Sara just cried and cried as she was lying on the cold floor of his cabin in the middle of nowhere with her once tight vagina now violently torn into a gaping, dripping, swollen mess of a hole. You didn’t have to look hard inside her to notice her swollen cervix and it was because he had felt it that her father decided not to empty his swollen balls against it as he could tell she was ovulating from smelling her.
Her father walked to the kitchen counter and grabbed a large, half drank, bottle of beer and downed the remaining in one go, Sara saw the opportunity and tried to make a run for it but she had forgot the large piece of wood that was now blocking what was the only thing separating her and tens of thousands of miles of frozen landscape. He grabbed by the hair again and brought her face against his cock that was still wet by the wetness that was forced to come out of her pussy. “Suck it” he said but she started to scream and cry uncontrollably while trying to clench her mouth shut. With his second hand he forced her jaw to open and sent his swollen cockhead all the way down her throat. The sound coming from his daughter sounded like something straight out of a horror film as it was now a combination of crying, screaming and gagging uncontrollably she was struggling desperately to fight back against his cock that was forcing her to dry heave. No man had ever been that deep inside her pussy or mouth but the truth was that at least she had willingly used those holes in the past to pleasure her boyfriend. When her father pulled out of her torn up vagina deep inside she knew what was coming up next, he would attempt to do the same thing to her asshole. Josh, her boyfriend, had been pestering her about fucking her in the ass for years now but the answer was always “no” as she felt that it was something dirty and degrading for her; That was about to change. Sara’s father yanked her head by her hair and left her to gasp for air while ropes and ropes of thick spit dripped down her chin and onto her breasts. She tried to speak but all that was coming out were burps and dry heaving. Before she could even realise what was going on her father threw her over the arm of the couch and began to lick her asshole. “Mmm you smell so good babygirl” he said as he rubbed her foot while sniffing and licking her ass. Sara once again tried to protest but it was futile, her father grabbed his cock and began to force it inside Sara’s virgin asshole as she began to let out screams and sounds that didn’t sound human anymore. More and more of his gigantic cock was forced in her broken asshole as each violent thrust would tear Sara’s ass more and more just like it did to her busted cunt. “You’re going to drain daddy’s balls with that shithole of yours, baby” her father moaned as the tearing and borderline burning sensation in her ass made Sara sob harder and louder and then suddenly he drove the whole thing as deep as he possibly could and Sara began to feel his cock pulsing uncontrollably as he shot load after load deep inside her guts, deeper than any man had ever been. He pulled out and Sara let out one final loud cry before passing out and rolling down on the ground unconscious as her now destroyed asshole was making all sorts of sounds while her father’s seed flowed out of her.
“Goodnight, babygirl. I’ll see you tomorrow”.
Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/ho0377/goodnight_babygirl_ill_see_you_tomorrow_rape
That was a bit dark, but that made it quite a bit more hot in my opinion, I think it was well written. It kind of makes me wonder what was in that first draft that was apparently even harder.
Love this story. Couldn’t get enough of it
I love the last line. I love when stories like this have cutesie stuff, it serves to make the violent bits stand out even more vividly in a weird way.
I would read the whole original version and any future chapters.
Mmm, that looks sooo hot ?
For anyone interested I posted the original harder version [Here.](https://www.reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/hokcya/goodnight_babygirl_ill_see_you_tomorrow_original/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x)