**Chapter 1**
* 1 week before the trip *
I found out about the trip from a letter. My school had sent one to everyone in our year, it was the first school trip that Clifton High had ever run. Clifton had just won a serious amount of money in an awards show, and so could finally afford to put on a trip. I quickly read the letter, just to find out the basic details. Venice, 1 week, £650. ‘Not too bad’ i thought to myself. I gave the letter to my mum to see if i could go, and after a couple minutes of silence she said yes. Almost instantly i pulled my phone out of my pocket and messaged Katie, my girlfriend.
Me: Hey, have u got the letter from school xx
Katie: Heyyy, about the trip? yeah, i gave it to my mum and she said i could go, but i’m only going if you are xx
Me: Aw, yeah i’m going…it’ll be our first time out of the country together xx
Katie: Oh yeah, maybe it could be our first time for something else as well ;) xx
This was the first time she had said anything like that. We’ve being dating for 7 months and hadn’t done anything sexual yet as she had always said she wasn’t ready. So, naturally, reading that turned me on. I should probably describe Katie for you, just so you know what she looks like. Brunette, hazel eyes, and the cutest smile I’ve ever seen. That’s all you need to know for now. I was really looking forward to this trip, as it finally gave me an opportunity to spend time with my gf outside of our hometown.
Over the next few days i spent some time with Katie, e.g going to the cinema, shopping and packing for the trip. We were both really looking forward to it, and during the week she kept referencing sex. She texted me about how easy it is to have sex in an airplane toilet, different positions, and all sorts of other stuff. It was really turning me on, and every now and then i masturbated to the thought of it. Little did i know, she was doing the same.
* The day of the flight *
We had agreed that i would go over to hers in the morning, and then her dad would drive us to the airport where we would meet the rest of the year. My alarm went off at 5am, i woke up and went into the shower. I made sure i was clean as possible, and then went back to my room to get dressed. I wore my normal outfit, black hoodie and black jeans. Then, at 6am i messaged Katie telling her i was coming over. I got to her house, and her dad let me in. He told me to go up to her room since she was just finishing getting ready. I went upstairs and into her room. She had just had a shower, and only had her underwear on. Her black lace bra really showed off her 36c’s, and her wet hair made her look even sexier. I had seen her in her underwear before, so she wasnt bothered that i was there. I sat down on her bed, and i could feel my dick getting harder and harder. She turned around and noticed that my hands were covering my boner. Instead of turning back around and carrying on getting changed, she winked and started to approach me. She got on her knees and pulled my hands away. We still had an hour before we needed to be at the airport so we had plenty of time.
She unzipped my flies and pulled my hard penis out of my boxers. She kissed all of it, my dick and my balls. It felt amazing, Them she placed my shaft into her mouth and started to suck on it, and she was really good for a first timer. She looked up at me and we were both filled with a feeling of pure bliss. Her lips moved up and down my shaft with my penis going further into her throat each time. I was surprised how good she was considering it was her first time. Maybe it wasnt? To be honest i didnt really care at that point in time, it felt amazing. After a couple minutes, i was about to cum. I pulled it out of her mouth and ejaculated straight into her mouth and between her eyes. She swallowed my cum without hesitation, wiped off the rest with a tissue and then got back to getting dressed. She looked back at me and said “theres more where that came from ;)” then carried on getting dressed.
An hour later we were at the airport, she was wearing an oversized hoodie, denim shorts and black tights. She looked cuter than i had ever seen her before. All i wanted right then and there was for my dick to be between her legs. We sat down next to each other on the plane, and 10 minutes later it took off headed for Venice.
*End of chapter 1*
Chapter 2 coming soon depending on response to this. This is my first time so im sorry about the bad quality
Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/eng1p9/the_island_chapter_1_mf_bj
Honestly, I think it’s good! Keep writing it! Two suggestions:
**Be a bit more detailed.**
Like, where did the letter come from? Was it addressed to him in his mailbox? Did his hometown teacher give it to him that morning? Just throw in a quick detail.
And like what did they get and where did they go shopping? What did they watch at the cinema? Spend a bit more time here, let us get to know the two characters a little bit more, build up the anticipation.
**Also, be a bit more realistic.**
Like the plane washroom thing. Is that really what she would be thinking about? It’s more like something full adults do, not virgin students. I think it’s more likely she’d be planning a midnight rendezvous in the hotel, maybe her roomie agrees to go spend the night with their other two friends. Or perhaps they both sneak out in the middle of the night.
And her dad telling him to go up because she is finishing getting ready. Why would he do that, send his daughter’s boyfriend up to possibly see her finish getting dressed? He must for some reason think she already is fully ready, totally oblivious to the truth.