hey there i am new here, i wrote a small part of a sexual erotic encounter and wanted u guys to help me improve and maybe refer me to adult literature work that could improve mine.
i would like to mention that it’s not finished but i did not want to continue without checking if my work holds any merit first and is not basically horse crap.
thank you
As she was laughing from my joke she lightly brushed her soft hand against my shoulder, my hand moved of its own gently placing itself on her arm, setting my heart ablaze.
As Her gaze constantly venturing between the lust in my eyes and the hunger of my lips, she dares to slightly close the mirrors of the soul and lean towards me
In this moment i dare to wait for a moment and admire the beautiful being that is before me, from her beautiful green eyes to her large luscious breasts, to the majestic peach shape of her godly bottom and all the way back to the stuttre of her sexy dark lips, i take her all. I lean in, gently placing my hungry lips on hers, i can feel my heartbeat being placed by an orchestra of thunderstorms, she starts sucking gently on my upper lips, as she does, i notice her sweet scent. my nostrils widen, my pupils dilate, and i take a one last breath of sanity before becoming an animal tasked with the soul purpose of succumbing to the pleasures of the flesh.
My tongue gently pushing against her lips and into her, is greeted with a stutter, then a silent moan, she presses her right hand against my chest slowly making its way across my stomach.
I pause to look at her while leaning back for a moment, utterly intoxicated by her presence while exchanging lustful looks, i then return to the sucumfort of her lips, she takes a large breath from her nose while sucking gently on my tongue, my right hand is placed on her lower back and under her shirt, my fingers gently stroking her as we kiss. My left hand ventures to her right upper thigh and she slightly open her legs in an approving gesture, while stroking my lower stomach with the tip of her fingers, her touch sends jolts of energy down from my spine towards my manhood, engulfing both of our essense in lustful flames and boiling blood.
I then move my right hand under her shirt and grasp her right breast firmly, although my touch is not absent pain, she is turned on by my sudden aggressiveness and releases a louder moan filled with pleasure while tilting her head backwords, momenterly departing my lips.
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