Wake Up Call- First short, critique would be great!

I woke up in a daze. Sunlight peeked through the blinds of the bedroom window, dancing in the air before it reached my cheek. I grimaced, and turned over, pulling the blanket over my head.

“It’s going to be a long day.” I sighed.

I shifted a little in my sheets against the warm body that slept next to me. The man next to me rolled onto his back and continued to snore lightly. You came home a little late last night, not even bothering to change from your work clothes. My shifting and the alarm hadn’t even affected you. You must have been exhausted, I thought.

It had been a while since we’d kissed, and it was getting on my nerves.

We were both so busy with work, school, new home projects, and family visits, that we barely had time for the simple pleasures of our relationship.
So, naturally, seeing you lying there, with your face so close to mine, I could hardly resist waking you up with a morning kiss.

My lips touched yours, and I sighed a little against their warmth. You stirred, and I felt your lips start to move against mine as well. I moved my body over yours, straddling your waist , and deepen the kiss.
You break away and look at me, smiling through sleepy eyes.

“That’s probably the best way to wake me up.” You sighed, pulling my body closer to you, and burying your face into the nape of my neck.

“Tough night?” I sighed out, relishing the warmth of your lips on my neck. You nodded, and pulled me down to you side.

“The patient reviews took me a lot longer than I thought they would,” you yawned.

“Go back to sleep then, kid. I have work to do as well.” I said, slowly standing, stretching, and putting your shoes away in the closet.

Before I could turn around to walk to the bathroom, your arms circled around my waist, lifted me up and threw me back into bed.

“I can’t have that, sweetie. Not today,” you growled playfully.
“I have stuff to do,” I whined, grinning up at you.
“Too bad.” You kissed me playfully, making a trail from my lips to my ear, to the soft spot on my neck.
“I thought you were tired,” I scolded weakly, craning my neck to give you more access to my bare skin. Your teeth sank in a little and I groaned.
“Never too tired for you,” you whispered in between kisses.

Your hands roamed down my curves, stopping to cup my breasts roughly, before pulling my hips oh so intimately closer to yours. I could feel your hard pressing into my thigh, ever so slightly through your work pants. My hands reached up to your buttoned shirt, and began unfastening them slowly.

“You’re so worked up already, babe..” I mused, exposing more of your chest. Your lips moved from my neck to my lips, biting ever so softly, then entwining your tongue with mine.

“Feels like I haven’t seen you in so long.” You murmured, eyes clouding in lust. “And I won’t be waiting any longer.”

With that, you ripped off my t-shirt and exposed my full breasts. My rosy red nipples were already hard from your earlier ministrations. I gasped as your mouth engulfed my left breast, your tongue tracing my nipple. I groaned as your hand moved to my right mound, kneading and pulling. I moaned your name as I felt your teeth bite down, and my hips began to writhe against yours. My hands clawed at your back, desperately trying to close the non-existent gap between us. You smirked up at me, grinding your hips slowly against mine.

“You have too many clothes on” I pouted. I had only gone to sleep wearing a t-shirt and red panties. You chuckled, and removed yourself from my chest to shrug off your shirt and pants. Standing in your boxers, I could see the bulge of your cock twitch as you looked over my half-naked form. That look could always make me wet, no matter where we were. And you knew that all too well…

Before long you had descended upon me once again, pinning my arms over my head, kissing me ferociously. Our tongues danced together as our warm centers touched. Your bulge was perfectly perched over my silk-covered pussy, as you slowly resumed grinding against my wet core. I whined and bucked my hips, signaling you to speed things along, but you kept with your agonizingly slow rate.

“Nuh uh. No rushing today, babe. I’m doing this right.” Your lips found my neck once again and began sickling on my ear. “I want to make you nice and wet, before I do anything else.”

You let go of my arms, and let your fingers languidly drift down my sides, brushing my nipples lightly before pinching them roughly. I moaned as you gripped at my skin, all while still keeping the same, slow, steady rhythm in my hips.

“Please baby, I need it so bad..” I whined, biting your ear and furiously grinding my hips. You nuzzled my neck, your morning stubble lightly scratching at my skin, as you hands continued their southern descent. I moaned your name when you finally reached my panties, and slowly slipped your hand inside. Your fingers easy slipped between my soaked lips, your thumb lightly grazing my swollen clit. I began gyrated my hips roughly, clawing at your back and biting at your neck. I reached my hand down and grabbed your rock hard cock through your boxers, reveling in its length. You groaned as your hips jerked into my hand, setting into the rhythm of my hips.

“You know I don’t like to be teased” I said huskily, as my hand moved slowly up and down your manhood. Ooh, how nice it would be to taste it right now. I pushed aside your boxers and watched your cock spring out, fully erect and ready for me. You moaned as my hand came in contact with your hot skin, quickening my pace, squeezing more firmly than before. I smirked as a few drops of precum dripped out of your head, bringing it to my mouth with my fingers.

Suddenly, you flipped me over onto my stomach, and yanked down my red panties.

“No more games” You growled roughly. Pinning down my shoulders, I felt you thick cock prod at my pussy from behind. Your head grazed the entrance of my glistening lips. You could already feel me throbbing in anticipation.

“Shit, baby, please…”

“Please what, my dear?”

“Please fuck me, baby!”

With that, you slipped your cock inside me, and starting pounding into my tight walls. The slapping of our skin against each other filled the room, only to be accompanied by my moans and your heavy breathing.
“Oh, yes, baby…right there!” I cried out, craning my head back in ecstasy. I squealed as your hand made contact with my ass, spanking and pulling at me as you drilled into my wet core. My pussy tightens up with each hit.

“Do you like this cock inside you?”

“Mmmm yes!” I moan, gripping the sheets.

“Who do you belong to, baby?” You panted into my ear.

“You.” I whimpered softly.

You smacked my ass harder, pounding into me relentlessly.

“I didn’t hear you. Who. Do. BELONG. To? “ He growled, biting into my neck.

“YOU! I’m yours!” I screamed out.

“Then cum for me baby. Right now. Cum!” You growled, going deeper and harder, pressing your teeth into my neck. I gripped the sheets of the bed as I felt you drill into me even faster. Suddenly, my orgasm hits me, my walls clenching around your cock hard. You tense up, and after a few more pumps, you cum too, spilling yourself inside me.

You collapse on top of me, and we catch our breath before you pull out and roll over, and pull me to you chest. You lazily kiss my lips, then my forehead.

“I was wrong before” You said. I looked at you with a confused look.
“THAT was probably the best way to wake me up.”

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