I was laying there and watching him strip down to his underwear, he was tall and kind of chubby, It was Defintely a turn on as im watching he begins to do a playful strip tease , he takes off his shirt and throws it at me, laughing he took his pants off and stood there looking at me , as im biting my lip. He craws onto the bed, crawling over to me he begins kissing my soft lips, he starts to get more aggressive as we kiss, he pulls me closer while rubbing his hands up and down my thighs the kissing gets more aggressive as he begins biting my bottom lip hard, and harder. "mmm" I moan, he starts moaning a little into my lips while I kiss him harder. I push him off of me and push him down onto the bed, I take off my shirt and my bra and I get on top of him , rubbing on his chest I look into his eyes and tell him how much I want him, and im wanting to take him into my pussy. He puts his hands on my sides and starts rubbing them down my thighs and he plays with the lace on my panties he puts his hands down the front of my panties, he can feel the wetness that he's created. He rubs my clit for a few seconds the feeling feels so good, I tell him. He teases me for a few seconds, then he takes his hand out and begins sucking the wetness off his fingers, " mmm Baby you taste so good" he says to me.
I stand up over him as he helps me pull off my panties, then he grabs me and lays me down as he kisses me once again and then he kisses me down alll the way to my hips, and he makes his way down to my wet pussy, he begins kissing my pussy lips and then begins to lick them apart until he reaches the inside of my pussy. As he licks I start to squirm he begins to lick more faster and faster until I reach down pulling his hair and pushing his face into my wetness. He continues to do it until I almost reach orgasm, then he stops licking. He looks at me slightly laughing as im laying there frustrated, I bite my lip hard while looking up at him. He kisses me with my wetness still on his lips and I taste myself on his lips.
I watch him as he begins to stroke his dick as he spreads my legs open wide, so he can prop himself in between my legs, he slowly rubs my clit , then he grabs his dick as he guides it inside me slowly until I get used to him. As im getting used to him he goes deeper and deeper slowly so he doesn’t hurt me, he then starts to go faster and faster in and out of me, he watches me as I moan louder and louder the faster he goes. "Mmm , I love Your dick baby " I shout to him, he then Moans as he feels me getting wetter and wetter. He reaches his hands down to my clit and begins rubbing it as he goes in and out of my pussy.
Then , He takes his dick out of me and he flips me over to my stomach and tells me to get on my knees and pushes my front half of my body down so my butt is sticking in the air he grabs me by my hips and brings me closer to him, he inserts his dick into me, and begins going in and out fast and hard, as I cry out he goes faster and harder "Mmm, you like that baby, you like me fucking that pussy so deep" he says to me. "Mmm baby , keep fucking me like that" I moan back to him. He grabs me by my hips while I bounce back and forth onto him. He grabs me making me go faster and harder onto him. I go faster and faster until I feel myself coming to a climax, as im about to climax he pulls himself out of me and then rubs my clit until I start to squirt all over him and the sheets. After I cum, he lays down and I get on top of him and Grab his dick and put inside of me, I start to bounce up and down riding it slowly and getting faster as I go. He grabs my boobs and starts to play with them and rub my nipples , I throw my head back as it feels good, I moan in pleasure. I reach down towards him kissing him passionately but rough. " I fucking love fucking you" I Say to him in the middle of a kiss. Soon after that he gets close to cuming, so I keep going faster and harder, "Fuck im cuming baby" He yells out as he cums inside me, I get off of him and lay down next to him and he grabs me close kissing me and cuddling me
Source: reddit.com/r/eroticliterature/comments/3ob2te/this_my_first_ever_erotica_let_me_know_what_you
You’ve written this in the present tense but it really should be past tense, which would make it much easier to read and get into. You have mixed your tenses in some places for this reason. It’s an ok piece.