The night was magical. She had been impatiently for this night for far too long. Thinking about his return from his business trip was enough to get her moist. She was waiting in their bedroom, tracing slow circles around her clit through wet lingerie—anticipating his manhood entering into her again and again and again. She licked her finger clean of her juices. She massaged her breast through the black laces of her bra. She forced herself to stop. It was all she could do from not finger fucking herself raw again. He was coming home in a few minutes.
She heard the car pull up the drive way.
She went downstairs to greet him. She threw on her red silk robe. He loved the way she teased him. She waited at the bottom of the stairs and called out to him. He looked tired, yet his tongue told a different story. He cupped her face in his strong hands and his tongue danced in her mouth. He tasted like whisky and cigarettes. It was funny. He never smoked. She loved the new taste and let his tongue explore her mouth.
He took off his suit and shirt without breaking their kiss. She left his mouth to suck on his nipple. Her tongue traced down his abs to his man hood.
He was throbbing.
She unbuckled his belt and pulled down his pants. She could see a wet spot on the tip of his dick. She grabbed the shaft of his manhood and slowly began to stroke it from tip to base. The smell of his dick intoxicated her. She took the fleshy circumcised tip in her mouth and sucked on it. She ran her the tip of her tongue underneath his dick from the base to the tip and unceremoniously took his fullness inside her mouth.
He grabbed a fistful of her dark hair and head fucked her. He forced himself farther down her mouth until he hit the back of her throat. She began to choke, but he kept her head down.
She couldn’t breathe.
The moment he let go of her, she came up and kissed him deeply. He could taste the muskiness of his own cock. He grabbed her and brought her up to their room. He dropped her off the bed and ripped off her panties. He went down on her pussy. It tasted like pepsi cola. He held down her hips with his hands as he flicked his tongue up and down the slit of her pussy. He sucked on her pink soft mounds. He engulfed her little clit with his whole mouth and traced circles around her clit with his tongue. He put two fingers inside her and began to pump slowly. She moaned loudly, without care. Her breathing began to quicken and her breasts began to rise and fall rapidly. He grinned and roughly flipped her over.
She moaned, a mixture of annoyance of being denied climax and of excitement to his next idea. She raised her hips and gave him a full view of her dripping pussy. She shook her ass a little bit and looked back at him with a playful smile.
He spat on his dick and rubbed his saliva all around the tip. He spat inside her ass and stuck a finger inside. Her ass tightened around his finger and he throbbed at the tightness. He slapped her ass and left a red mark. He forced himself in her ass like how John Green makes his characters fall in love.
Slowly, then all at once.
He held on her hips as he thrust himself in her tight ass. He felt his climax building. He pulled out and flipped her on her back. He raised her legs above his shoulders and thrust himself in her pussy. Her breasts bounced uncontrollably as he fucked her furiously. He brought down his hands down her throat and squeezed, gently but with force. He came in one explosive burst inside her womb. He pulled out and she sucked his dick clean of her anal and pussy juice and his cum.
Still left unsatisfied, she continued to suck him until he regained more vitality. Once he was throbbing hard again, she mounted him and took in the fullness of his cock. She rocked back and forth, riding him and driving him wild. She slowed down her rhythm when she could feel him begin to throb too quickly. She picked up her pace to build her own climax. He came inside her again. She nibbled on his ear as he stroked himself hard again. He fingered her ass and sucked on her tits. She rode him again as soon as he regained his firmness. She felt her pussy tighten around his cock. Her climax began to build with momentum and her hips fell in rhythm with her breathing. She felt her strength leave her as she felt her juices run down her thigh. He pushed her off and licked her pussy clean. He licked her juices from her thigh. He kissed her deeply and she tasted her own pussy. He collapsed beside her. She saw his still throbbing cock and sucked him off again. She swallowed every last drop of his load. Exhausted, worn out, and fully fucked out, she collapsed beside him again. She snuggled close to him and he embraced her. He kissed her forehead and fell asleep.
She listened to him as he slept. She rested her head on his chest and traced circles on his chest. She couldn’t stop thinking about tomorrow. He would leave her again and go back to his wife and their beautiful children. And the children were beautiful. They had his eyes and the dark red hair of their mother. His wife was pretty, but didn’t love him the way she did. Otherwise, he would never fuck her with such passion. His wife left him unsatisfied, and he was a difficult man to satisfy. She hoped that his seed would quicken inside her and she would carry his child. He was a powerful enough man to take care of a mistress and an illegitimate child. Everyone would get their own happy ending. She smiled at the thought of carrying his illegitimate child. She fell asleep, content with her own delusion.
This night was magical.
A/N: I would love some feedback.
Source: reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/2c488k/a_writing_prompt_gone_wild_mf_anal_oral_rough_sex
"like how John Green makes his characters fall in love… Slowly then all at once" hahahahahahahaha that’s great.
I thought it was well written, and exciting! However, I was hoping for more anal sex description (it was more of a one liner). But overall, I would definitely give it two thumbs up. Like I said, it was exciting, and I wasn’t bored at all. Thanks for that :)
Ahh, I see what you mean. I didn’t give as much attention to the scene as I thought. Thanks for the feedback! I’m super excited that you liked it.
Honestly, I was just thinking of a non-cheesy way to describe how he stuck it up her pooper. As I was thinking about the scene, I thought about the excruciating pain of suddenly smashing his dick inside her ass. So I had to force him to ease off the gas pedal a little bit and take it nice and slow. After that, it was all aboard the train to pound town.
A note on your syntax: you have a pattern of short, straightforward sentences. To help break this up you could connect some into longer and more detailed descriptions. Otherwise, very well written and hot as well. Nice going. Also, I very much enjoyed the John Green analogy.
Though this thank you to your comment is a late, I took your feedback to heart. In both my erotic and non-erotic work, I really focused on mixing up the length of my sentences. It has made such a huge difference! I almost didn’t recognize my own work since the change was both subtle and yet so drastic. Thank you very much for pointing it out to me.
I’m glad I was able to help! Good luck in all your future writing.