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Category: Erotica
First attempt at writing erotica. Need feedback please. mf oral
This is my first attempt at writing erotica; don't know if I have what it takes to write something erotica readers would enjoy. Would appreciate any feedback you can give me. Thank you.
His facial imperfections were hard getting over. The indent in the middle of the forehead was accentuated by the bone beneath his thick long eyebrows. The width of the forehead seemed small but really, it was the protruding cheekbones that made it seem so. The cheeks were almost flat, with a shadow cast on them that made his face appear older. His facial hair was long and course but individual hairs appeared too far spread out that reminded him of cat whiskers. His eyes looked tired and heavy. This was due to the eyelids drooping down on the side a bit, just enough to give them that sad old look. He had semi dark circles underneath the eyes that were hereditary on his father's side. Those unflattering looks and the protruding, unshapely nose, that had lost all symmetry, if it ever had any, were the only inheritance from his absent father. Julio was very self-aware; overall, his appearance was not worse than average but he focused on individual details. He was not as meticulous when judging the looks of the opposite sex.
New here first attempt (F)(M)
My partner was running late to get home oneday. It was a raining, cold and rather stormy. Id thought that maybe he was stuck in traffic or had to find another way home due to road closures. I had my phone next to me and thought id have a quick nap. 30 minutes later and he still wasnt home. Though i received a text from him, saying he was grabbing dinner and would be home in 45mins. I saw this as a great opportunity to make a move and have some fun with his body when he got back. Images of his body kept flashing through my mind. His arms, his legs, his handsome face, tantalising lips, warm hands…..the way his hips moved with the rhythm as he thrusted forwards and back…and how it felt to be filled by his heated and hard manhood. I decided id get dressed in one of his hoodies and wear the panties i knew he loved. His hoodie came down to just below my curvy ass, just enough to tease the eyes. I heard the car pulled up in the driveway and the door open and close quickly as he was trying to run inside without getting too wet. As he came in, i welcomed him home with a passionate and needy kiss. I bit down on his lip softly, enough to make him gasp and release a soft moan, i returned the favour with a moan of my own. After we separate, we both realise he is still holding the plastic bag with our dinner in it. He says to me whether we should eat dinner now. I replied with "Id rather you take me to the bed and eat me". He did just that. Dragged me the bed and threw me up on it. As he was about to help himself with my body, i denied him the pleasure to do so. His hard member was straining against his pants, wanting to be touched. I could feel his heat against my leg, making me shiver and pulse down there. I wanted to have some fun with him. I said "Get up and strip, then go sit against the bed head" He did just that, thankfully. I took his hoodie off, revealing a matching bra for those panties. "What are you going to do to me tonight?" he said, he was really excited and curious…as he naturally is anyways already. I straddled his hips, he bucked up slightly as i was settling down and the friction he received from rubbing his hard manhood over my covered, warm entrance was enough to make him gasp loudly. He so wanted it. We kissed roughly and passionately, and as each kiss was given, i grinded down desperately. Getting the shape of his manhood imprinted in my imagination. As i lifted my eager hips off his, i could see his manhood glistened in the light and was beading at his tip. I thought now would be the prime time to answer his question with wanting to know what id do to him. I crawled down the bed backwards a bit and grabbed his length in my hand. Stroking softly and then more firmly. When i saw he was ready to be taken inside my mouth, i went for my reply. After each sentence i said, i kissed his tip softly. "What am I going to do with you? Kiss you. Lick you. Suck you. Take you in, inch by inch into my tight warmth between my legs" Once that was said, his face flushed a bright pink and he got even harder. So hard. He felt so good. I took him inside my mouth after that, it only took about 5 minutes until he came. We had both planned that we would have some fun that night and we both had things we wanted the other to do. He had requested me to swallow tonight, so in regards to his wishes, i did just that. I swallowed his lust. He was still rock hard, throbbing and leaking just as bad as before. I gave into the need and want of having him inside me. "Position me how you want and do what you want to me" i said. With that, he pushed me backwards. Placed a pillow under my head and under my hips. The slight wet spot on my panties showed him exactly how excited and eager i was. When the pants were gone, the bra came off too. He spread my legs and whispered "My turn". He went down on me, and dear god was it good. Swirling his tongue on all the good spots and going inside me with his fingers, he tormented me so much. After a few minutes he pulled back, looked at me and kissed my forehead. He then whispered 'i love you' and rubbed the tip of his manhood against the outside of my warmth. After teasing me enough, he lined himself up. One swift thrust and was fully sheathed in me. That made me moan so badly, even louder than usual. Each thrust was strong and hot and i could of sworn he got bigger each thrust. He was filling me so much and his breath was so warm on my neck. He was moaning with me. Both of our bodies were rocking a good rhythm and as we both go close, my legs wrapped around him tighter. My heels were pushing against his hips so he went deeper into my warmth as we climaxed. One final push and i could feel him cum deep inside me. So hot and thick. Slowly rocking back and forth to ride out our highs, we kissed lovingly and softly. He stayed inside me until he was at semi, as he pulled out, some of his cum had followed and leaked out onto the bed covers. "That is definitely not a bad sight. I love you" he said. He helped me clean up and we both hopped under the sheets afterwards. Both knowing how lucky we were that we had each other after such a long battle of not knowing what was wanted. We fell asleep cuddling eachother. Our dinner was still sitting on the table in that plastic bag the next morning.
The Hunter [mf]
“It must have been early morning when I heard her moving. Padding softly across the carpet, her form graceful, I know, as she slides out of her bed and over to my futon upon the floor. I crack my eyes, and she stands before me: tallish and lithe, with the wan skin of her kind. Textured magenta hair and pink lips on a face rendered silver-white in the moonlight. Black, ever-so-slightly pointed teeth. Black irises on blacker sclera.
She is naked, and she bears the lacy, complex black ritual tattoos of flowery curves and geometric wheels on her legs, extending down from the inner thigh, encasing each appendage below such that it appears as midnight. Another tattoo – symmetrical and slender – begins at her clitoris and extends two-thirds of the way up her belly. Still one more beneath her left eye, this one atypical, a stylized net of veins stretching towards her ear. And the horns: ebony, spiralling horns nearly a hand’s width long (surprisingly lightweight, for she moves her head with ease), rise through her hair from her upper skull.
She is breathtakingly beautiful.
She also so much resembles a succubus of ancient Earth that the irony is painful.
“Service? Please?~” [mf][femdom][milking][bondage][pegging] Part 2
“Service? Please?~” [mf][facesitting][milking][bondage][pegging] Part 1
"Bloody hell.. It's her."
"Who?"
"What's 'er name? Kerr? That model chick?"
"Miranda Kerr..?"
"Yes, she's bought the whole fucking first class lounge to herself and locked herself inside for the flight."
"Fucking hell, what I'd do just to tou-.."
"Flight Attendants, Stewardesses, Please start serving now."
The familiar sound came on, down each row of each plane, you know an A380 can carry over 800 passengers in one flight? That's a lot of M&Ms and Headphones to hand out just to keep everybody happy, just so that they can come back the next time for their dismal job or attempt at a vacation. This flight felt like it was no different then any other, hell, everything was the same, crying babies, coughing, sneezing, requests for food from people who probably should be going for the salad, and requests for salads from people who should be going for anything else. Everything about this flight was normal, there was somebody rich in the front lounge of the plane, as always. You see, the way the planes work for our organisation is that the lounge suite is a whole designated area, apparently it costs a bloody fortune to get in, and rumor had it, that Miranda Kerr was on this plane, in that very suite… Fucking hell.
Football Player And Band Geek [mf][oral][sex]
I walked out of the shower. It had been a tough game, but we won. I got stuck with a few interviews, so I was the only player left when I entered the locker room. I kept the towel wrapped around me and almost reached my locker when I noticed a band player over on the other end of the hall. It was late and she looked exhausted from the game. She looked like she’d just gotten out of the shower as she was wearing a sports bra and shorts. She glanced over to me, seeing me in just a towel and turned bright red. Her short clothes and fantastic body turned me on. I could feel my erection rising and I knew that she could see it. I covered myself with my hands and turned my body away from her.
“Uh, good game” she said to me as she turned away. It seemed like she was putting in a lot of effort not to notice my hard on.
“Thanks” I said. As she turned her around, I saw her ass outlined through her near see-through shorts, making my jaw drop. “Hey, uh… Could you, uh… could you come over here for a second? I need your help with something.”
An evening of pleasure [mf][anal][oral]
Standing on the deck…
…Harold couldn't imagine how any of this had begun. A few dates and yet here she was, the most beatiful woman he had ever met. They clicked. LIke they had known each other for decades. The sound of the water and the feel of the cold air against his face was sobering. Sliding the screen door quietly he stepped back into the quiet of the house.
Mara was sprawled out in a tangle of blankets. Naked, asleep, her body curled next to the indentation where his form had been. He could never really sleep after sex. Perhaps it was the energy of the act, it woke him like coffee or cigarettes never could. When the body was depleted, the mind regained control. Pensive he stood, naked himself, admiring her form, her lines. He went back to the bedroom, the bed still made, the sheets and covers taught over the bed. Quietly he picked out a pair of shorts and then went back to the floor. Staring up at the ceiling, he replayed the events in his mind…
A Pretty Good Day on Isla Mujeres – a recounting I wrote for her [MF, oral]
This is a 96% accurate recounting of a day of our vacation on Isla Mujeres
DIFFICULT DECISIONS I let the water of the shower drape over me, and take a minute to just rest. It’s been a great day so far and I think back through all that we’ve done so far. It started in bed, and I had better not think about that too much right now or I’ll run the risk of me embarrassing myself by walking out of the shower with a raging hard-on. You’d get a good laugh out of that, wouldn’t you? Anyway, when we finally decided it was time to get out of bed, breakfast was waiting for us. I don’t think you can have a much more relaxing breakfast than to enjoy the scenery from the patio overlooking the pool and ocean on another beautiful morning. Eventually, discussion led to what our plan was for the day.
Mystic Vice: Hunter’s Moon (Excerpt)[F/M, Werewolf, Bondage]
This is an excerpt from the Mystic Vice Novella, Hunter's Moon. Its free if you sign up for my mailing list. I hope you enjoy.
“Victoria?” Jin called from the backroom. His voice sounded rough but still human. I took a deep, centering breath, and went to the backroom. Jin was on his knees, hanging limply from the chains. His head was hung low.
“Are you alright?” I asked, opening the door all the way. Jin looked up at me. He was sweating and he had a groggy look on his face.
“Water,” he groaned absently. “Water.”
I left, grabbed a bottle of water from the fridge and returned. Tentatively kneeling in front of him, I undid the cap and put the bottle to his lips. Jin drank greedily, like he was dying of thirst. He moaned lasciviously as he swallowed each mouthful. There was a sensual edge to it that wouldn’t have escaped anyone’s notice.