First attempt at writing erotica. Need feedback please. mf oral

This is my first attempt at writing erotica; don't know if I have what it takes to write something erotica readers would enjoy. Would appreciate any feedback you can give me. Thank you.

His facial imperfections were hard getting over. The indent in the middle of the forehead was accentuated by the bone beneath his thick long eyebrows. The width of the forehead seemed small but really, it was the protruding cheekbones that made it seem so. The cheeks were almost flat, with a shadow cast on them that made his face appear older. His facial hair was long and course but individual hairs appeared too far spread out that reminded him of cat whiskers. His eyes looked tired and heavy. This was due to the eyelids drooping down on the side a bit, just enough to give them that sad old look. He had semi dark circles underneath the eyes that were hereditary on his father's side. Those unflattering looks and the protruding, unshapely nose, that had lost all symmetry, if it ever had any, were the only inheritance from his absent father. Julio was very self-aware; overall, his appearance was not worse than average but he focused on individual details. He was not as meticulous when judging the looks of the opposite sex.

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