So this is the first story I wrote for a friend, I have posted it elsewhere but would really appreciate some feedback. Let me know what you think.
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I should have known you would be trouble tonight. As i arrived to pick you up you had that look in your eye to go with your cheeky little grin. I had to admit, though I had far more distracting things on my mind, like that dress, elegant, black held up on one shoulder and hugging your body tightly in all the curves. Ending a little below your ass, just enough to maintain that classy look you do so well. Made me feel like quite the chump in black trousers and shirt. Well at least the pearlescent red tie brought me up a notch, but still nothing on you.
“Now you have picked your jaw up off the floor, can we go eat?” you had asked.
Which brings us to hear, the main course has just finished along with the second bottle of wine. I for one am feeling the effects of the alcohol and the filthy lines you have dropped in to conversation over the meal. The waiter approaches to ask for dessert choices.