Me met Sally when Sally's daughter was 11. Delilah never had a father figure so she took to me almost instantly. Sally raised Delilah in a very loving and affectionate household; hugs and kisses before bed, snuggling, and I love yous. Soon Sally and I got married and Delilah started calling Me dad. I didn't know if she more excited about having a me move in or that she could tell her friends about her mom AND dad.
As Delilah grew into young lady, I started noticing that the goodnight kisses moved from from my cheek to my lips. I didn't think much of it as I had raised her for the last 3 years. I caught her spying on me from the closet while I showered; I covered myself immediately and confronted her. She claimed that she was looking for some clothes that must have got mixed in with moms when they did laundry. That's when I started paying more attention to Delilah's observations of me.
One night after Delilah's 17th birthday party Sally and I were getting frisky once everyone left. I noticed Delilah slightly open the door and start watching. By this point, Delilah had developed into a beautiful woman and it was hard not to notice, so I didn't say anything about her peeking in. I was as interested in this situation as Delilah, so I position Sally on top facing me, allowing me to keep an eye on both Sally and Delilah. As Sally and I near climax, I noticed Delilah's hand down her pants… This triggered overwhelming excitement and caused one of the most intense orgasms of my life.
For the next few weeks whenever Delilah and I were in the same room we would exchange glances suggesting that we both were aware of each other that night. After that night she would go out of her way to be close to me; always volunteering to run errands with me, cuddling up next to me at night when we'd watch TV, and touching me whenever she could. Sally never batted at an eye at this activity as she knew Delilah had been fond of me since the beginning.
The night of our first encounter happened when Sally went out of town for the weekend to visit her mom. Delilah was staying at a friends for the weekend so I had the house to myself. I bought a bottle of whiskey and decided to catch up on some recorded shows on the DVR. I must have had a bit too much that night because I passed out on the couch on the living room. You'll have to imagine my surprise when I woke up to Delilah massaging my cock… She didn't noticed that I had come to, so I decided to pretend to stay asleep and see where this went. As soon as I realized what was happening I instantly became aroused. Delilah took this as her sign to unzip my pants and start sucking my cock. It too everything in me not to stir and give her the impression that I was awake. The combination of how deep she was taking my cock and the massaging of my testicles made it one of the best blowjobs I've ever received. At this point I couldn't help but moan a bit… at that Delilah took my cock as deep as she could and held it until I filled her throat with my thick cum. Without missing a beat, she's naked and mounted on top of me. She starts grinding on me like a seasoned veteran; gyrating while moving up and down. She leans down and whispers that she wants to feel my warm cum inside her. She slides of my cock and turns around and bends over. She takes two fingers and starts playing with her tight little asshole. I can't help but take advantage of the situation… She was headed off to college in a matter of weeks, so we could avoid Sally sensing any tension between us once she left. So I grabbed her ass, spread her cheeks and licked her asshole until she moaned. I stripped off my pants and proceeded to fuck her tight little asshole until she was screaming out. She must have felt me cum in we ass, because she jumped off and jammed my cock into her mouth to suck my cock dry. She sits back and smiles at me, then gets up and heads to her room…
The day we drop her off at college, she leans in and whispers something in my ear that will stick with me forever.
Source: reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/21a10e/dad_and_daughter_1st_attempt_at_writing
As I promised, a review. ;) You had a good idea here, but really rushed through at the end. And as a self proclaimed grammar nazi, your errors here and there really took away from the reading experience. Run through and fix those, and take your time with the finish (add some shit), and I will re-read!!! This had huge potential :)