New writer would love feedback!

Here is just a small paragraph in the story I have been writing please let me know what you think!

You come over to me bending forward to let me see down your shirt. I take your hands in mine looking into your beautiful eyes as I do. My big strong hands take you by the hips. Pulling you into my powerful chest. My hand going to the small of your back while you look up at me biting those sexy pouty lips of yours. I turn you around pulling you tight into me. My fingers lightly caress your neck. Just barely touching your skin. Everywhere my fingers touch sets your skin on fire. You can feel the trail of my fingers tingling with sensation. I slowly pull your bra strap over your shoulder kissing my way down your neck to your shoulder as you grind back into me. You can feel me swelling with desire for you.

Source: reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/xg9hyz/new_writer_would_love_feedback

2 comments

Comments are closed.