first time writing. need thoughts and constructive criticism. mostly need help in conversations(SPH)(femdom)

Introduction

The Covid pandemic hit some people hard, but not everyone. For Eric and Jessica it was a blessing, the lockdown brought them closer together. They were both very happy together; they met in college at a party, Jessica at the time was a freshman and Eric was just about to graduate. They continued dating for four years until Jessica graduated from college, then Eric proposed to her that summer. For Eric everything was going according to plan; he got a job right after graduation at a big investment corporation. He is charismatic, smart and worked hard. He had saved enough money to become a freelance investment advisor, and became very successful right away. The happy couple got married in march.2020. The Lockdown was in order soon after and travel was banned. But Eric and Jessica were not too upset about it, yes they could not go on their honeymoon, but they could spend alone time together as newlyweds; and grow their relationship much stronger. Eric was at the right place at the right time. Business boomed for him soon after; he made a lot of money, and so in the summer of 2021 he decided to take his bride on their belated honeymoon to a Caribbean paradise island.

Chapter I

(New Friends)

The couple gets to the resort just fine, check in and get settled; everything was perfect. They go to a romantic dinner at the beach then get back to their room to make love; they were both very satisfied. The next morning after a delicious breakfast in bed, they get into their swimwear and head to the pool. They settle into their sun beds, apply sunscreen on and order mimosas; it was very relaxing. Eric is a very attractive young man; he is a bit short though and has a slim frame. Jessica is very attractive as well, even though she does not flaunt it; in fact she is a bit shy. She is a bit taller than Eric, so she never wore high heels. She has a perfect hourglass body; her breasts are a c-cup and perky, her nipples are small and pink. Her butt is perfectly round and curvy. Sitting next to them there is another couple; they are very different from Eric and Jessica. Bruce and Crystal, they are obviously attractive. Bruce is tall and muscular, he looked intimidating. Crystal also tall and has a stunning body; D-cup perky breasts and a perfectly round butt. They both have several tattoos.

Bruce turns to Eric and introduces himself; they both introduce their wives and enjoy some light chat. Then Eric offers to buy them mimosas, but Bruce wants something stronger so he orders a bottle of tequila for shots and beers for everyone.

Bruce: the beers would cool us down and the tequila will keep the party going.

Eric: ummm, we’re not really into shots, I don’t think we can handle them.

Bruce: you’re on vacation; you gotta go a bit out of your comfort zone

Jessica: I don’t know….

Crystal: oh c’mon….. Get into vacation mode and have a little fun…

Bruce: c’mon buddy, a couple shots won’t hurt you.

Jessica: Eric honey, maybe a couple shots would be fun, just like college.

Eric: I guess a couple won’t hurt us.

The couples start drinking and soon get a little drunk. Eric and Jessica decide to go into the pool to cool off. When they return they find crystal had taken her top off and was only wearing a thong bikini bottom, and Bruce was applying tanning oil for her, massaging her entire body. Eric turns his eyes away and apologizes; Jessica looks down at the floor and blushes.

Crystal: what are you apologizing for???

Eric: ummm, I can see your ummmm breasts.

Crystal: so what, I don’t want any tan lines, plus you’ve seen breasts before right?

Bruce: don’t be a prude, we’re all grownups here.

Eric: ummmm I guess so.

Bruce: let’s have another round of shots.

Eric: I have to go use the toilet first.

Crystal: we’ll start the party without you….

The three of them take shots while Eric leaves

Crystal: Jessica, why don’t you take your top off and get a proper tan?

Jessica: oh I can’t….. I’m too shy

Crystal: c’mon honey, just try it…. It feels great

Jessica: I don’t know, I can’t…. No one has seen my breasts other than Eric. Plus I don’t think he would like it.

Bruce: I’m sure he won’t mind, he wants you to relax and have fun right?

Crystal: plus I’m sure those tan lines annoy you, right?

Jessica: I guess so.

Crystal: Lie on your belly and ill help you

Jessica: I need another shot first

They all laugh and have their shots, and Jessica lies on her belly. Crystal undoes Jessica’s top and then lays a towel on Jessica’s butt. Then she reaches under it and pulls off Jessica’s bottoms.

Jessica: aw, what are you doing?

Crystal: you hate tan lines remember?

Jessica: I’m not going nude!

Crystal: hahaha, I know, I’m gonna lend you one of my thong bikini bottoms

Jessica: I don’t know….

Crystal: just have another shot and ill take care of you honey

Crystal then slips on Jessica a thong bikini bottom and pulls off the towel.

Crystal: where is Eric? He’s been gone a while

Jessica: he’s OCD about using public toilets; he went to use the bathroom in our room.

Crystal and Bruce start laughing out loud

Bruce: he really does that? Wow you guys are a real shy couple.

Then Bruce sprays tanning oil on Jessica’s body and starts massaging her. Jessica was stunned that another man was touching her and wanted to stop him but couldn’t get herself to say anything; his touch felt amazing, he was a real good masseuse. Plus there is something about him that makes Jessica unable to say ‘No’ to him, He intimidated her somehow. She was only used to Eric, but Bruce is different, he’s a bad boy…. Also he’s manlier than Eric is and a much bigger guy…. ‘oooh’ she cries out.

Bruce: is everything ok? Did I hurt you?

Jessica: mmmm, no ….. I’m fine

Bruce had knelt over her, and his bulge brushed her butt, she felt something different. She had noticed Bruce’s bulge earlier but shied away from looking at it, now she felt it. It was different than what she was used to. She loved Eric and his man parts, but Bruce’s was much bigger and felt heavier. She was intrigued. Then Bruce reached lower and started massaging her thighs, reaching up slowly to start massaging her butt. He then rubbed his hand’s lower and reached her inner thighs brushing his fingers lightly against her vagina. She was in a Trans, it all felt great. She had never felt so aroused in her life.

Bruce: turn around and let me do your front.

Without any hesitation, Jessica complied. There he stood towering above her; she could only submit to his every order. He sprayed tanning oil on her breasts and torso and reached out to massage them, when they heard Eric shouting: STOP!

Eric: what the hell is going on? Why are you touching my wife? Jessica…. You are naked!

Jessica covers her breasts with her arms and blushes…

Bruce: hey buddy, what crawled up your ass? I was just applying tanning oil for her.

Eric: you were touching her breasts.

Bruce: that’s how you apply tanning oil!

Eric: and why are you naked, Jessica?

Crystal: dude….chill… She’s not naked! Just like me she doesn’t want to have horrible tan lines!

Eric turns to Jessica: are you comfortable with this?

Jessica: I am, but…. If it bothers you…..

Eric: I’m sorry, I was just a bit surprised…. I guess its fine….

Bruce: I guess you can help Jessica with the rest of the tanning oil….. I’m going to cool off in the pool, crystal?

Bruce and crystal go for a swim, while Eric and Jessica finish applying the tanning oil and sit back enjoying their beers. Eric apologizes to Jessica.

Eric: I’m sorry honey; I didn’t mean to get upset or jealous. I was just surprised.

Jessica: I understand dear, I’m a little surprised myself. I never thought I’d be exposed like this in public.

Eric: you kinda look hot like this

Jessica: awwww thank you. (She then stands up) look I’m also wearing a thong. Crystal loaned it to me.

Eric: I love it, you look stunning.

A short while later Bruce and crystal come out of the pool and start walking back towards Eric and Jessica. As Bruce emerges from the water, his swim shorts cling to his body and a huge cock print can be seen.

Jessica (with a stunned look on her face): look at Bruce dear, I can see everything

Eric (stunned as well): ummm yeah …. I see it

Jessica: its huge… look it’s so big! I didn’t know it could get that big.

Eric: ummm yeah, it looks big I guess…..

Jessica: big? Must be like five times your size!

Eric (stuttering slightly): yeah, penises come in a range of sizes I guess.

Eric had always known he had a small penis; it measured at almost four inches on his best days and it made him feel inadequate. He had only been with two girls his whole life but only lost his virginity with Jessica, who was the second girl he dated. Jessica didn’t date any guys before Eric and accepted his size as normal, she never thought about penis size. Sure he can’t make her cum from penetration, but he always goes down on her to her finish her off. The only other girl that saw Eric’s penis was his high school girlfriend. Now after the short conversation with Jessica about Bruce’s big swinging cock, his memories came back. Emma and Eric grew up together; they were neighbors and best friends. Naturally they started dating in high school. One day they were fooling around and piece by piece the clothes came off. Then Emma grabbed Eric’s boxer shorts and pulled them off. She then stopped and stared at the little tool Eric hid in the shed, he was sixteen at the time; his penis had only measured at three inches, fully erect. Then Emma blurts out: is that it? Eric stunned and ashamed just laid there completely paralyzed and speechless. Then Emma started giggling and said: you never told me you have a tiny dick! Eric replies: ummmm its not….

And he tried to cover it with his hands, but Emma pushed his hands away and said: are you kidding me….. It’s so small. Then Emma grabbed his penis with her thumb and index fingers and said: awww it’s so tiny. Eric’s dick then went limp, and down to less than an inch. Seeing that Emma said: looks like a baby’s penis, it’s so cute, and continued to play with it for a few minutes. Then she got up and started to get dressed, and then she told him that they can’t be romantic together and that it’s better if they remained friends. Off course, their friendship was no longer as close as before. She did however always tease him about his size whenever she saw him, but never told his secret to anyone.

Bruce and crystal get to the sun beds, Bruce stands in front of Eric and Jessica as if to exhibit his massive cock to their eyes, grabs his beer and takes a sip. Jessica looking up at him, he stood there blocking the sun, she could not look away from his crotch. Crystal sits next to Eric on his sun bed and leans over him to grab the tequila bottle, to support her weight she puts her hand on Eric’s thigh. As she is leaning over, her hand slips onto Eric’s crotch and pushes into his package feeling everything perfectly. She then looks into Eric’s eyes and apologizes with a grin on her face. She then gets up and pours four shots and hands everyone a shot. They all drink their shots and then Bruce tells them about a dance club that’s supposed to be great, him and crystal are going tonight because its tango night and they are tango dancers. He suggests that everyone go up take a nap and relax before going out tonight and so they all agree.

Source: reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/tk34o1/first_time_writing_need_thoughts_and_constructive

1 comment

  1. Is that a stylistic choice or do you genuinely not know how to write dialogue

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