My erotica from the males perspective

Wondering if I can get some feedback on the first section of a story I have written, I have posted it to kindle for a $1 if anyone is interested in reading the full edit. I am brand new to this, please be kind but constructive criticism for the next stories is welcomed, as honestly – I didn’t do well in school.

Jimmy 27M from NZ Original content

UP AGAINST THE WINDOW

After a night of laughter and round after round, we make our way back to your apartment. I kick the door behind as you drag me by the hand to your room and begin to close the windows and curtains.

You’ve been saying how nice of a night you’ve had and how it feels so good to have someone to talk to that understands life as you do and it’s nice to connect with someone like that.

I don’t leave much more time for talking as we’ve been doing that for hours, I’ve been watching your lips talk. I have been thinking about how much I want to kiss them. I come up behind and press myself against you, giving you a little fright, but I see you smile from over your shoulder.

I run my hand up your front and find the bottom of your bra through your shirt. I run my hand along the bottom a couple of times and slip a couple of fingers behind it. I flick your nipple gently while the other rubs the inside of your thigh. Your jeans are a little warm around your panty line and the more I rub the more I can feel you getting warmer. You start to rub your ass against me slightly; but not enough to give away how turned on you already are.

Your blue jeans are tight. They show off your curves so nicely. You only dress modestly, but I can tell you have a killer body underneath. Your white loose fit crop top billows softly in the breeze and teases your amazing figure. You turn around and give up on the curtains, for now, having only just had enough time to shut the window. I push you up so your ass rests on the window sill. I press up against you with one hand holding up a leg to wrap around me. I hold your face and kiss your neck with little pecks up until your ear where I nibble slightly with my lips. My warm right-hand rests on the other side of your neck, my thumb running softly down your throat. I run my hand down the centre of your chest and then cheekily pull at your low collar so I can peek at your breasts a little. You exhale suddenly and breathe in deep, I can tell you’re turned on now and not afraid to show it.

I begin to press my hand firmly against your panties through your jeans as we kiss passionately, you forget to breathe as we make out. You pull away from my face and catch your breath as I begin to hit the right spots down below. You push away from me a little and undo your jeans; you can’t handle them being in the way. Your hands shake a little as they try to tackle the buttons too quickly. I put my hands over the top of yours and gently take over, slowing things down a little again. They drop to the ground and my hand begins to feel your warming pussy through your little basic-but-cute red panties. Still kissing you I feel your clit and press my middle fingers, firmer, in a side to side motion. Your body begins to sway with the movement.

You like to take control at times but then also love the feeling of getting lost in the moment. You want to make your way onto the bed now because these clothes have to come off, you say under your breath. You slide onto the bed facing the wall behind it and poke that beautiful ass of yours up in the air. I admire the view while I drop my pants as well, and quickly flick off my shirt. You throw almost all of your extra pillows onto the ground, seemingly ready to occupy almost all of the bed at one point or another.

Your ass is so soft and shapely. It’s slightly cold to touch which surprisingly is a turn on. I want to taste you so bad. I kneel at the end of the bed and press your ass into my face. I can tell you’re really wet so I begin to lick either side of your pussy to try and draw out the foreplay just that little bit longer. You sway your ass from side to side indicating a little bit of frustration. I think you want them ripped off, and of course, I do too. Instead, I press my tongue against your pussy and with how wet you are as well your panties are beginning to become soaked. You’re now pressing yourself onto my face. I’m feeling up your cheeks, squeezing, and the give the odd little slap to excite you a bit more. I pull your panties to the side and there it is, the softest, hot, little pussy I’ve ever seen just waiting for me. My tongue rushes for a taste and I’m shaken with satisfaction at how good you taste.

I push my tongue right to your little patch of well-trimmed pubes from behind then run my tongue past your clit and up into your pussy and push in as deep as I can. I repeat this and you’re starting to grab onto your sheets as you beg for your clit to be played with again. I rush my tongue past your clit back and forth again a few times and I can feel you start to tense up in time just waiting for my cock to be in there.

I push you down flat onto the bed, lying on top, and press my hard cock against your leg from through my jocks. I gently pull your hair lightly so I can kiss your cheek from behind and hear you moan slightly. As I’m kissing you I glide my cock over to your ass cheeks pressing it in between. I grab your jaw lifting your head a little and I can just reach your lips to nibble on as I press down harder on your ass. I take my jocks off and you look around and see that I am almost as hard as I can get. I give you that look of yearning and wanting more. I point my cock in between your cheeks again this time rubbing your pussy with the head a little from behind. You look back again at how hard I am. I press hard enough I’m almost inside of you.

You tell me before we fuck you want to return the favour and give me some foreplay. You quickly get up and give me that cheeky grin before laying me down on my back. You grab the hair tie off your wrist and tie your hair in a loose yet contained bun. I look over and remember you haven’t quite got to closing the curtains all the way and cheekily point that out to you. You look over briefly and smirk a little but your mouth is around my cock before I know it.

Your mouth is so warm and wet, it feels amazing. I think about how it was just rubbing against your pussy and I hope it’s just as wet. You know a few tricks with your tongue. You tease the end of my cock for a while before slamming your head down letting me hit the back of your mouth so quickly I never saw it coming. You swirl your tongue around as you begin to bob your head up and down, in an unpredictable timing. You take as much as you can fit in your mouth and then go back to teasing the tip. Your hand gently caresses my balls, then glides up and down my thigh with your index finger running back up inside my thigh and up to grab my cock.

Source: reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/ozr1zv/my_erotica_from_the_males_perspective