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First erotic story, written by me! Constructive criticism is always appreciated, guaranteed reply (possibly even rewarded?) I want to know what you think, please leave thoughts or pm me!
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You’re standing at the edge of the bed. You look at me, “you’ve been well behaved today, which one of my holes should I use?” I’m sitting in the middle of the bed, my feet are under me and my hands are in my lap. I’m wearing a sexy black one piece, if you can call it that. There’s hardly anything to it; more straps than material. I was pretty good today, although I did try to tease him throughout the day; typical brat stuff. I playfully cross my arms and respond, “I don’t know Sir,” I put my finger to my lip and look up. I love playing the innocent card. I reply “I think I want Daddy’s cock in his slut’s mouth.” A smile creeps on his face. I know how much he loves a good blow job. A smile begins on my face aswell, I start crawling toward the edge of the bed. I stand up and playful push him toward the wall behind him. He places his hand under my chin, he gently pulls up so I’m looking at him. He looks at me with a look in his eyes, I know it so well- strong and caring. “That was the right answer little one.” His hand moves to my shoulder. I place my hands on his stomach and move them towards his hips. You push down with your strong hands and I bend my knees. I’m kneeling in front of you now, a position I’m so familiar with. I look at your belt. My fingers quickly undo it and the button. I stop at the zipper and look up. He’s so tall, he just about towers over me. “You’ve learned so fast,” he tells me. I can’t help but to respond with “I learn from the best.” I put my hands back on your hips and undo the zipper with my teeth. “Oh little one…” I pull down your underwear with your pants. You’re sporting a semi-hard on, but won’t be for long.
I press the head against my lips. I stick my tongue out and tease you a little, I slap your cock on my tongue. Your cock is getting harder in my hand, I can feel it swelling. I look at you with a smile. I look back down at your cock. I start at the base and slowly lick to the top. I swirl my tongue around your head. You drop your head back and moan. I slowly lick the shaft up and down. I put your head in my mouth and suck just a little. I lick up and down the front of your shaft. I reach for your balls. I start playing with them in my hand. Rubbing the top with my thumb, rolling them between my fingers. I hold your now very hard cock with one hand and graze your balls with the tip of my tongue, you jerk your hips. “Oh youuuuuu… dirty girl,” you groan. I know your balls like the attention. Now I’m licking your balls, going back and forth. Giving them the attention they deserve. Before you know it, one is in my mouth. And then the other. You moan again, this time louder. I make a sound, like at the end of a question. He knows what I mean, “yes little girl, just like that.” I suck on them and move them with my tounge. I can tell you really like it. I’m still holding your cock with my left hand and I start stroking, slow. Up and down, again and again. With your balls still in my mouth, you say “little girl, I love that wet hole” I look up at you and let go of your balls, one at a time.
“Does Daddy want his cock in the back of this wet hole?” I give you a sly smile and look back down at your cock. I hold it with my right hand and slap it against my tongue, making sure to open wide. Before you respond, you bend over and hold the sides of my face. “Stick your tongue out” you say strongly. I immediately do so, you spit in mouth and say “yes, little one, keep going.” I like it when you treat me like the slut I am. I do as I’m told and place my lips back on the tip. I’m obedient, but I love to tease you, I start by lightly sucking on the tip and just a little bit of the shaft. I go up, and then back down, taking in a little more each time. Again and again making sure to keep a slow pace. I want to take the whole thing. I lower my mouth as slow as you’ll let me. I’m almost down to the base when you push your hips. I can feel your cock fill my mouth, you let out a louddd moan. I go back up making sure to keep suction around your hard cock. I place one hand at the base and go down again. This time my hand follows me back up. I’m still going pretty slow, but not for long. I start going a little faster. Up and down. My hand matching the pace of my mouth, twisting and sucking. “All the way down little one.” I look up at you, knowing exactly what you want. I let go of my hand, I hold eye contact and go all the way down making sure to stay. Choking, my body forces me to come up for air. I break eye contact and gasp for air, I have spit hanging from my mouth. I pull the spit from my mouth with my hand and put it back on your cock. Your cock is so wet and so hard, I love it. I’m stroking it faster now. I put your cock back in my mouth, up and down, over and over. I go all the way down. I can feel your cock pushing against my throat. I choke, and try to stay longer, I have to come up for air. “Gooooddd girl,” you say with a tone of approval. I smile, I yearn to hear those words. Gasping, I stroke your cock with my hand, it’s covered in strings of spit. I know how much a sloppy blow job turns you on and I want to make you cum.
I get off my knees and sit back on my heels. I go back to sucking your cock. I go down as far as I can without choking. Every time I go up, I make sure to create a tight seal with my lips and suck hard. You let out another loud moan. I can tell your almost there, you moans always get louder and closer together. You grab the sides of my face again. You start face fucking me. I love the feeling, your cock filling my mouth and throat. My legs are open and my hands are on my knees. “I want you to rub my clit,” you say sternly. “Yes Sir” I respond. “I’m letting you touch your self because you’ve been so good.” I reach down and feel immediately how wet I am. Blow jobs always make my little slit so wet. You pull out and I gasp for air. A string of spit forms between my mouth and your cock. A tear rolls down my cheek, taking mascara with it. “Aw look, a blow job tear” you say to me. “Let’s see if we can make another one” I respond. I’m rubbing faster and faster, I can tell my clit and labia are swollen with lust. You notice my speed, “Does little one want to cum?” “Yes Sir, I really want to cum. I really want to cum with your cock filling one of your holes.” You immediately put your cock back in my mouth. You begin fucking my hole again, slower this time “You wouldn’t cum without asking, would you?” He asks me. I know better, and I try to say no sir. All that comes out is “nothir.” You continue shoving your member into my hole.
At this point my pussy is basically dripping. Rubbing faster and faster. I put my left hand on your hip. Choking, I push my mouth off your cock. I’m already so close to cumming, I’m on the edge. “Can I…cum….Daddy?” I say between gasps of air. “Yes little one, you can cum.” You put your cock back in my mouth. Now you have a fist full of my hair. I rub my clit into bliss. The waves ripple over me, the ultimate feeling I crave. The feeling is unlike any other, my pussy is pulsing, quivering with pleasure. I’m gasping for air, my body convulsing from the feeling. I pull back from you and say “Thank you Sir,” I pause for a breath, “your pussy came hard.” “Good,” you say, “now it’s my turn, I’m gonna cum in your mouth, little girl.” Theres spit everywhere and tears on my cheeks. I stick my tongue out. You start stroking your cock, I can tell your about to burst. I take over and stroke your cock,I wanna make you cum. I suck on just the tip, I feel your cock start to pulse against my tongue. “Ohh fuck, I’m cumming,” you say under your breath. I lean forward and force your cock down my throat again. You cum and you cum hard. I can feel your cock is still pulsing in my throat, shooting strings of cum down my hole. Your cum always tastes so good. I swallow it. I open my mouth and stick my tongue out again. “I want every last drop Sir,”I say desperately. “Good girl” you tell me. “Thank you Daddy,” I say proudly. You respond with “No thank you, my little cumslut.”
Source: reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/js2v4y/my_favorite_job_a_blow_job_domsub_mf_blowjob
Fuckkk this got me so hard
Well written and good description for the reader to imagine whats going on. I hope to see more, keep writing. ?
Some notes:
You start to many sentences with “I”, the repetition gets distracting from the sensuality of the piece, it is just the two of you in the room, so consider stringing the sentences together, or starting them differently. (I did the same with my first piece) I think there are one or two places in the 2nd last paragraph where you used the incorrect pronoun. The first one could be intentional to indicate that he owns you completely, but the second cannot be interpreted in that way.
I really hope to see more.
One thing that I think would make it better would be using names. If you are a female reading this, it’s kind of odd to hear that the character of “you” is a male.
As a female myself it was just odd to hear.