Part 1 can be found [here](https://www.reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/e1nbf6/not_that_kind_of_girl_mf_mdom_sub/).
I would really appreciate any feedback, what was good, what wasn’t. Better or worse than part 1?
The feedback I received after part 1 means that I remembered to proof read for spelling/grammar, but apologies if there are still errors!
Edit: fixed some mistakes
**Not that kind of girl – Part 2**
The cab journey was a blur, he whispered dirty things in my ear the whole way, telling me exactly what he was going to do to me. What he was going to make me do. We arrived at his place and he immediately led me into the centre of his living room, stood in front of me, and ordered me to strip down to my underwear.
I can’t believe I was doing this. Was I going to do this? The voice in the back of my head started to list all the reasons this was a bad idea again. And I was about to start panicking when he stepped forward, grabbed my hips and pushed himself against me. His lips brushed my ear and he whispered “you know you can leave at any time, but we both know how much you want this. You’re still soaking wet from having my fingers in your pussy earlier, so stop overthinking this. Strip for me right now, and then get on your knees.”
My hands are shaking, but I step back and slowly unzip my dress. His eyes are roaming all over my body as I lift the dress over my head. He breathes out heavily and raises his eyes to mine. “I’m going to enjoy playing with those big breasts, look how tight your nipples are underneath that lace”, he walks around me, just brushing my thigh with his hand. “And we already know how much I’m going to enjoy this arse later. But for now, it’s time for you to get on your knees”. I shakily slide onto my knees, and look up at him, waiting for my next instruction.
“Open your mouth for me, good girl, yes like that. Now, hold your hands behind your back.” He reaches down and cups my chin, lightly rubbing his thumb over my lips. I’m already panting, and I’m mesmerised as he slowly unzips his jeans. I unconsciously lick my lips and hear him laugh. I look up at him, he’s amused, and smirking down at me. “God you’re beautiful like this, I wish you could see how you look. Kneeling on the floor for me in just your underwear, knees spread, just waiting for my cock.” I’m so embarrassed by his words, so excited by him standing over me. So nervous about what happens next. And already soaking wet.
“You’re desperate for my cock, aren’t you, desperate to taste me?” I’m vigorously nodding my head as he unzips his jeans, and I lean in forward in anticipation. He laughs again and pushes me back slightly.
“No you should remember the rules, if you want something, you have to ask for it. In fact, you’re going to have to beg for it”. I’m mortified, of course, I had typed the words out before, but I can’t actually say the words out loud, I’m not actually going to beg a man to push his cock into my mouth, I can’t.
He pulls his thick cock out of his jeans, and I’m whimpering. “Please”, a single whispered word escapes my mouth. I’m panting, watching his beautiful cock twitch in front of me. I’m squirming around, trying desperately to find some friction to rub myself on, I’m so desperate, that I can’t think straight. I lean forward again, parting my lips, reaching for his cock my tongue.
He swiftly moves his hand round to the back of my head and grabs a handful of my hair. He firmly pulls my head back, so that I’m looking directly up at him towering over me. “I was very clear, if you want my cock in your mouth, you will beg for it.”
I’m panting hard now, his words shooting straight to my pussy. His grip tightens on my hair, and with his other hand, he fists his cock, slowly, roughly pumping himself an inch from my face. And I can’t take it anymore.
“Please, please can I taste you? Please, can I have your cock in my mouth” I’m so desperate I would say anything now. I look up at him, meeting his gaze, pleading “Please can I suck your cock, please, please. Please.”
“Okay, open your mouth wide for me.” I part my lips and open my mouth as wide as I can, as he pulls my head firmly back again, “no, I want you looking up at me. Stick that tongue out for me. Yes, just like that.” And then he starts to rub the head of his cock against my tongue. “No, just keep your tongue out like that, no sucking me yet.” I’m so desperate now, my entire body rocking as he just rubs his cock on my tongue. I can taste his salty precum, and I’m moaning desperately. If I could, I would beg for him to fill my mouth with his cum.
“You look like such a dirty girl like that, no, no point in getting embarrassed now. Look at me, now, keep those hands behind your back and that beautiful mouth wide.” He uses both hands to push all my hair into one hand then looks down at me, smirks at me again “let’s see what that pretty mouth can do then.”
I immediately start licking the underside of his cock, from his base up the underside, over the top of his head. I repeat this over and over until the next time I close my mouth around the head of his thick cock and swirl my tongue around him. His grip tightens on my hair “take the whole thing in your mouth right now”, I begin to bob my head up and down, each time trying to take more and more.
He starts to rock himself into my mouth, pushing his thick cock deeper into my mouth, and I can’t take it anymore. I’m soaking wet, I feel like I’ve completely soaked my panties through. And I need some relief, some friction, some pressure against my clit. Without thinking about my hand is suddenly rubbing my clit.
“Oh dear, and you were doing so well,” he says sternly, as he pulls his cock out of my mouth. I can’t hide the desperation on my face. I’m still squirming as he pulls me to my feet, and holds my hands behind my back.
“Well, that’s the second time you’ve misbehaved” he growls as he pushes me towards the bedroom. I’m facing the bed, with him close behind me. “Bend over the bed, now.” I slowly lower my head to the bed, the anticipation of what was coming building inside me.
“Spread those legs for me. And lower your panties to your thighs.”
To be continued…
Source: reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/e81vfg/not_that_kind_of_girl_mf_mdom_sub_part_2
Again, totally loving it. But you kept jumping between point of view/telling through out the story this time. You would be saying “he is doing something to me” and then the next paragraph it says “you are doing something to me”. It gets kind of confusing. Keep an eye on that when you write. I would also suggest having a second person proof read for you. You’ll tend to miss things because you are the one writing it, so in your head you know how it’s supposed to be, so you don’t always notice when it’s wrong. That’s what I do when I write. But you are definitely telling an awesome and hot story so keep it up!!! Can’t wait for the next part!