**Disclaimer: non-consensual sex is wrong. This was written for someone who had a “consensual/non-consensual” fantasy. The author (me lol) would never take actions that were not previously consented to.***
The Break In…
It was the second house that night. No one home at the first, but there was a car in the driveway so I was careful. Didn’t find anything downstairs worth taking. I need some jewelry or cash so I headed up stairs.
When I entered the bedroom I froze. A woman was sleeping in the bed. She was naked, lying on her stomach. She rolled to her side, accentuating the curve of her hips. I heard a soft snore, she was out.
I moved out into the hallway. I pulled the duct tape out of my bag and tore off a piece. I felt myself getting hard in anticipation.
I moved into the room and over to the bed. She was still out cold.
Looking down at her I feel my cock ache.
Time for fun.
I grabbed her by the hair, pulled her head back and slapped the tape over her mouth. I saw her eyes open wide as I forced her head back down into the mattress. There was a look of shock and fear in them.
She struggled but my grip was firm on the back of her neck. She tried to get up so I slapped her ass hard. She yelped, muffled by the tape, and stopped flailing. Her breaths where heavy through her nose.
My cock already out, I spread her ass with my other hand and forced myself in. She let out a muffled scream as I fucked her hard and rough. God damn she had a tight little asshole. I kept pounding her for a while, as I felt the swell in my balls. One last hard thrust and I filled her ass with cum. There was another muffled scream as I pushed even deeper.
“Shut up”
I pulled out and threw her to the ground. She landed with a thud and lay there panting.
I wasn’t done with her yet. I was already getting hard thinking of what I’d do next.
I taped her wrists together and pulled her to her knees. Pulled her arms up and taped them to the top of the bed post.
She looked so beautiful with her mouth taped, makeup from the night before streaming down her face. That was the first time I thought about keeping her.
I reached between her legs and felt her pussy. Warm and wet. My cum was oozing out of her ass, pooling on the floor below her. She let out a slight moan.
What a dirty slut, I thought.
I yanked off the tape, scooped some cum off the ground smeared it on her face, then shoved two fingers in her mouth. She gaged a little. Let’s see what she can really take.
I groped her tits and pulled on her nipples. I could hear her holding back a moan. I stood up, took a fist full of hair, and yanked her head back.
“Be a good girl now.”
She opened her mouth slightly. I pushed my cock into the back of her throat and held it there. I felt her gag and convulse. I held it a little longer then pulled out. Her head fell forward, drool streamed from her mouth. Pulling her head back, I thrust in again. Her eyes were wide as I started fucking her face. Both hands holding her head I slammed it down on my cock over and over. More drool poured out the sides of her mouth, glazing her chest. Her eyes are shut tight, so I pull out and slap her hard across the face.
“Pay attention”
Right back into her mouth. Her eyes stayed open now and fixed on mine as I used her like a sex toy.
Right before I came I held her head down, burying my cock to the hilt. She choked as my cum filled her throat.
I took a step back and enjoyed the scene. I’m definitely coming back to this house.
I left her there, taped to the bed post. Covered in spit and cum, freshly used like the slut she is.
Source: reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/ls9p28/a_dark_fantasy_im_a_new_author_feedback_and
Very nice overall.
Personally I like to add a little more emotion and internal thought to the subject to try to suck the reader into their viewpoint and make it feel like this naked woman is under them, her flesh being forced to bend to their lust.
But as anyone that reads me knows my stories are rather long-winded, so its a matter of taste.
Good stuff