The sun was just breaking the horizon still throwing long shadows on the calm Saturday morning streets of Philadelphia. Chloe gazed out her bathroom window letting the warm water rain over her for an extra minute. She watched as a tall broad man jogged down the street in full sweat suit and beanie, his breath visible as he plodded along. Chloe sighed. She hated the cold. She closed her eyes and backed fully under the steaming water indulging in the heat. She ran her hands through her hair. Squeezing out the last bit of conditioner. In her warm bliss she hadn’t noticed James in the doorway. James paused to watch his girlfriend. He loved watching her. He loved watching her study. He loved watching her work on her laptop. He loved how she danced subtly as she cooked, how she hummed in the shower. He watched as she rinsed herself. The steam engulfing her tight wet body. He watched the water beading down her toned abdomen. She turned to shut the water off, putting her tight plump behind on display. James bit his lip and exhaled softly, “Oof.”
Chloe yelped and spun around.“James! You scared me.”, She laughed.
“I’m sorry, I’m sorry!” he apologized as he met her at the glass shower door. “You can leave it on I’m going to jump in.”
“Mmm mm mmm. Please do.” Chloe welcomed him playfully holding the door open.
“Hold on let me pee first.” James interrupted as he slipped off his tight black briefs.
“Awwe babe! You’re so well trained!” Chloe teased as he relieved himself into the toilet instead of the drain of the shower.
“I know I know, quite impressive isn’t it?” he volleyed.
“Very.” Chloe smirked eyeing James plump morning cock.
“Hey hey, this isn’t a free show!” He teased noticing her gaze. He playfully held out his other hand to in an unsuccessful attempt to shield her view.
“Boooo!” Chloe giggled, Still enjoying the site of him. James was tall and athletic. He had dark wavy hair, the kind that looked good even if he just woke up, not in a cute bead head way either. He had the permanent elegantly disheveled look. His eye brows were thick and stood pronounced on his defined brow.
“That’s going to cost you little missy!” He toyed with her as he strode to meet her in the shower.
“Oh no how ever will I pay you, sir.” Chloe played along in a shy tone looking up to him making her big brown eyes as wide and intriguing as possible as he entered the shower.
“Mmm I think we can come to an agreement.” James took her chin in his hand and bent down to kiss her pulling her warm wet body against his as their lips embraced.
“Mmm.” Chloe hummed softly as she wrapped her hands around his neck.
“Good morning baby.” James added softly between sucking her bottom lip. Chloe had full sensual lips. The kind most girls had to pay for.
“Good morning indeed.” She confirmed, tilting her head back as James explored her neck with his lips. His short scruff tickled and she loved it.
“When do they get in?” He asked as he slowly moved away to retrieve the shampoo bottle, letting his large hands slip off her slowly as he reached.
“11:30 I believe.” She answered as she regained consciousness, letting him step away and taking the moment to rinse the last bit of conditioner out.
“Nice. I still need to grab some booze and tidy up the patio. What do you think Jen drinks?” James questioned as he lathered his hair with both hands.
“Hmmm good question.” Chloe wondered as she indulged in the site of her tall muscled man once more. His long biceps bulged tightly as he ran his hands through his hair, his toned abdomen rippling sporadically. “How bout I go to the store instead so I can pick and you don’t have to do all the chores?” she recommended as she pumped body wash into her palm.
“No, I don’t mind babe. I thought you had patient charts to go over still?” He contested as he rinsed the foam from his scalp.
“I do but it wont take all morning.” She said as she began to lather his back.
“Mmm thank you.” He responded to her touch. “If you’re sure. I want you to be able to have your work done so you aren’t stressing this weekend and we can all have a good time.”
“I know baby thank you. I have things I need for my recipe still anyways. I can get my work out of the way first. It isn’t too much.” She looked up to him as he turned to face her. His eyes investigating her. Chloe kissed his chest as she started soaping his front. Her small hands running along the ripples of his obliques as he leaned over her resting his hands on the wall above her head.
“If you insist.” He conceded, looking down at her.
“I do.” She confirmed softly, meeting his gaze as she ran her hands down his pelvis and through his low cropped pubic hair. She held his gaze, taking him into both her hands. She stroked his thick member and massaged his heavy soapy balls.
“Oof, yes ma’am.” James obliged through a soft grunt.
“Good boy.” She praised, giving his growing cock a firm squeeze and biting her lip.
“Don’t tease me baby.” James begged playfully, still leaned over looking down on her.
“I’m not…” Chloe confirmed, grasping his nearly full cock with both hands. She began rhythmically stroking him, holding his gaze as he grew in her hands. James groaned softly as she worked him. “Mmmm good boy…” She encouraged him rubbing him with a twisting motion as she pumped his throbbing shaft. “You just work on the patio for me while I get my work done. I want to watch you sweat.” She demanded quietly making him lean further down to listen to her.
“Yes baby, yes.” He submitted through heavy breath.
“Mmm good boy.” She pulled him closer by his cock, now tugging harder and faster. His cock bulging in her tiny hands. James stood tall at 6’4” when he wasn’t hunched over his petite girlfriend and his cock fit him, well.
“Yes baby, yes. I–” He stuttered as he shifted his weight.
“Shhhh.” She silenced. “Cum for me.” She demanded, working his long thick cock from hilt to tip in slow strokes with both hands squeezing as she pulled to the tip making soap foam and drip from his bugling head.
“I—”
“Shhhh.” she demanded now stroking him faster still holding his wondering gaze as he released. “Yes, good man. Cum for me.” She praised him as he convulsed over her, his abs tightening, his breath heavy. She kept stroking him, pumping thick ropes of hot cum onto her torso. His heavy grunts only satisfied her more as she milked the last bit out of him.
“Fuck.” He finished as she eased her grasp on him now petting his empty member lovingly.
“Good man.” She smiled up at him, covered in his glaze.
“Ugh I need a nap.” He sighed appreciatively.
“No, no no mister” She teased giving him a swift spank as she slipped from under him to rinse herself once more, this time feeling much more accomplished. Her man toy remained leaning on the wall and she eyed his sculpted broad back. “You’ve got work to do.” She teased, looking forward to watching his muscles work from the window while he tidies the patio for their guests.
“Yes, yes love.” He turned providing a smile and leaning for a kiss.
2
Chloe strode into the living room flipping the tv on as she passed making her way to the kitchen. The anchor went on about the president and his latest remarks on the virus that had broken out. Chloe listened passively as she poured some coffee.
“Man, they are really worked up about this, huh? Oh, thank you.” James commented,slipping his snug sweater on fully and reaching for the coffee Chloe poured him.
“Well, not without good reason.” Chloe assured him. “I just hope they can slow it down.”
“You think it is pretty serious?” James questioned looking to Chloe waiting for her to finish sipping her tea.
“Oh yea. It will be if they don’t get a handle on it now.” Chloe warned.
“Sheesh, should we have canceled this weekend?” James continued.
“No, I don’t think we are there yet. Our region has no cases.”
“Yet?” He questioned. Chloe just kissed the back of her teeth and raised her eye brows.
“Just a matter of time, honestly.” She added.
“Welp, at least I have a sexy live in doctor to tend to me if I come down with it.” James teased as he raided the fridge for tupperware of fruit. Chloe ignored this remark as she settled into her chair at her desk in the living room booting her laptop.
“You excited to see Jeremy? How longs it been anyway?” James asked without the slightest hint of jealousy. In fact James was never jealous, not once, it almost made Chloe insecure sometimes. In the end she always appreciated his level headed nature though.
“Hmmm, must have been when we hungout on Thanksgiving break my 4th year? And yes I’m very excited! Jen sounds amazing as well so it should be fun.” She answered.
“Jen and Jeremy…. Kind of cute, huh?” Jeremy noted between mouth fulls of pinneapple and melon.
“It is.” Chloe agreed. James could see the reflection of her emails scrolling on her glasses now. He was losing her. He paused to watch her as he ate. She started nibling the corner of her bottom lip.
“I’m going to light the patio on fire now.” he tested her, popping the lid back on the fruit bowl.
“Ok baby, love you.” She responded not looking up. Yup he lost her. James chuckled to himself then sang out as he stepped into his sneakers.
Jeremy and Jen
Come sleep in my den
I’ve roasted the back yard
Lets us toast to new friends!
Good morning my love I’m
Off watch me goooo…..
His voice trailed off as he went out the back door singing now only to himself. Chloe smiled to herself. A notification on her screen took her attention. It was a picture from Jeremy. Him and Jen, who made a goofy smile.
“Philly bound! See you guys soon!” Jeremy wrote.
“Ahh, she is too cute! See you guys soon! Be safe!” Chloe responded. Jen was cute, slender with jet black hair and defined facial features she seemed to use often. She was always making some face, contorting herself to get a laugh. She seemed fun and it made Chloe happy for Jeremy and excited to meet her finally. Jen was a new girlfriend of Jeremy’s and from the short chats Chloe had with him she could tell Jen was different from the rest of the basic bimbos he dated. Jen wasn’t too far off. She was still your generic marketing girl with excessively long hair for her age and a somehow always visible amazing rack but she had a sense of humor. She wasn’t dumb she just wasn’t obsessed with being unique like the rest of us it seemed.
After what felt like minutes Chloe looked up from her screen to realize it was already 9:45 A.M.
“Fuck.” She shut her laptop and took her mug to the sink. Rinsing her mug she watched James through the large glass wall separating the kitchen from the patio. He was still at it. The wet composite decking showing his thorough power washing. She watched as he slid furniture back into place. His hot breath clouding in front of him as he strained. She loved watching him work. He was always so sweet and caring yet so masculine. He moved the bulky outdoor couch with ease his biceps bulging through his sleeves and his sweater pulled taught by his broad back and full pecks. He lifted the cover of the hot tub with one hand and checked a small paper test strip he dipped in the water with the other, his sweater lifting just enough to expose his cut mid drift and defined happy trail. His brooding face studied the strip until he finally dropped the cover. The sudden clap made Chloe jump and release a little yelp.
She placed her mug on the rack and dried her hands as she walked to the back door.
“Alright pool boy, I’m off to the store.” She called to him through the door cracked. “Any last requests?”
“Could you pick up a smaller patio?” He teased, pausing to lean on a push broom he was using to wick the last of the small puddles left by the power washer.
“I’ll see what I can do.” She played along, taking a last glance at his charming smile before tossing the paper towel in the bin as she turned to leave for the store. He smiled after her, watching her hips sway in her tight jeans as she went.
“Just an extra bottle of whiskey please! Don’t want to run short!” He called after her.
“You got it Paulo!” She spoke as she went. James smirked and went back to his work.
3
The liquor store was packed to the brim with others stocking up for the weekend. The virus outbreak had people a little stressed and the liquor store shelves were proof. Chloe grabbed a couple Spanish wines, a bottle of Tito’s and two large bottles of Irish whiskey for her pool boy before realizing she hadn’t checked with Jeremy for Jen’s preference. She whipped her phone out to facetime him.
“Hey, Chloe!” Jen answered his phone.
“Oh hey! What a pleasant surprise!” Chloe responded.
“Jeremy’s in the bathroom!” Jen answered Chloe’s surprised expression with a subtle eye roll.
“Oh that’s cool. I wanted to talk to you anyway.” She laughed, “I swear he uses every bathroom he sees doesn’t he?”
“Oh MY GOD! I knew it was a thing?!” Jen exclaimed.
“Oh totally! Since we were little he has always been rating bathrooms. Such a weirdo.” Chloe confirmed.
“I thought I was the only one who knew!” Jen laughed.
“Nope, ask him about the stalls in the foreign language hall in high school.” Chloe advised, making Jen laugh harder. She really was cute, so willing to laugh. Chloe liked her more already. “Ok, ok I got some tempernillo, titos and lots of whiskey. What do you usually like to drink?”
“Oh I’m easy! I love whiskey! In fact I brought a little surprise of my own for you!” Jen teased moving the phone and opening her purse to expose the bottle of tequila poking out from under her scarf.
“Oh yes, yes yes.” Chloe chanted cutely, enjoying Jen’s bubbly demeanor. “What about mixers.” She added?
“Gingerale?” Jen suggested.
“Done.” Chloe reversed the camera to show the 12 pack of gingerale in her cart.
“Perfect! Oh here’s bathroom boy now.” Jen teased. “Here talk to your bestie.”
“Hey bestie.” Jeremy mocked, taking the phone from his girlfriend as he lowered into his train seat.
“Hey bathroom boy. I was just calling to see what kind of adult beverages your lovely lady likes.” Chloe teased him. Jeremy liked it. It was about as far as their flirty nature went with each other. Chloe teasing him made him feel comfortable and at home.
“Oh perfect, well if you pick up a large caldron I’m sure you two can concoct something to get us all sick.” Jeremy played along.
“What are you talking about weirdo?” Jen questioned him playfully.
“He’s calling us witches, Jen.” Chloe answered playfully unamused.
“Hey!” Jen punched Jeremy’s large arm harmlessly.
“Hey hey, calm down Marie Laveau!” Jeremy pleaded pulling away from her.
“Alright you you two.” Chloe interrupted. “I’ll pick you up at the station!”
“If I make it there in one piece!” Jeremy joked to parrying his rowdy girlfriends strikes.
“Bye Chloe! See you soon! Don’t forget extra toilet paper for bathroom boy!” Jen teased from the background of the camera view.
“Hey, you’ll be thankful next time we are on a road trip and you need to–” Jeremy contested as the line cut. Chloe laughed to herself shaking her head. Too cute she thought. She had worried about Jeremy. He had a knack for getting hung up on the dumbest most helplessly boring girl that crossed his path. Which was a real shame considering how great he was. Seeing him so carefree and effortless with someone made her feel… Happy? Yea. Happy, she thought. Maybe a little jealous. She couldn’t peg it. So she let the thought drop as she entered the check out line.
After swinging by the grocery store for the last items of her recipe she made her way to the train station. She sat calmly chewing her bottom lip as she read her book waiting for her old friend and his new fling. She looked up as a young couple embraced at the curbside pick up. The skinny young blonde bounced into the arms of a spindly young man. He caught her, just barely, having to step back to absorb the added weight of her as she wrapped her legs around him and attacked his face. “So much for social distancing.” Chloe thought to herself jokingly thinking back to the repeated announcements made by the news lately. The young man reminded her of Jeremy at that age. He was so tall and lanky. Like James, he had been a rower since high school. Chloe thought back to all the silly blonde cheer leaders she had watched embrace Jeremy similarly all through their late teenage years. She was never jealous, really, mostly just annoyed. It wasn’t that she didn’t find Jeremy attractive growing up, she definitely did. She had fond memories of early morning cross country practice. The girls cross country team would run along the river early in the morning providing a view of the boys as they rowed through the fog. The young messy haired boys working in tandem to cut through the morning fog was always so relaxing to watch to Chloe. She wasn’t boy crazy or anything, just appreciative. Maybe that’s what kept her from jumping anyone’s bones before college. While most girls obsessed over the top athletes at school Chloe was more focused on her pre SAT scores and volunteering at the senior community. So, it wasn’t that she didn’t find Jeremy’s long thin muscled body or his tussled brown hair attractive. She did, just more in the way you find men your comfortable with handsome. She didn’t spend time fantasizing about him like he was Justin Bieber. They were best friends since middle school and shared a respect for that.
Chloe looked up from her book as she turned a page to find a tall less thin still tussled brown hair Jeremy striding toward her car. A large roller bag clicked along the sidewalk behind him. Jen seemed to levitate next to him hanging on his sleeve. He smiled as she spoke up to him. Chloe smiled to herself as she watched them.
“Hey!” Chloe exclaimed getting out of the car.
“Hi hi!” Jen met her at the door embracing her immediately. “It’s so nice to finally meet you!
“You too! I feel like I already know you so well” Chloe welcomed her embrace feeding on Jen’s bubbly energy.
“I know right? Where is Jimmy!” Jen agreed.
“James, Jen. I told you already, we can’t just assign nicknames to people without their consent.” Jeremy corrected from the rear of the car where he was loading the heavy bag.
“Oh hush. James isn’t uptight.” Chloe assured as she embraced him. Jeremy groaned in friendly satisfaction giving her a firm squeeze back.
“Hey bestie.” he whispered.
“Hey bathroom boy.” Chloe spoke into his chest as he enveloped her. They held each other for an extra moment.
“Ugh you guys are going to make me cry!” Jen teased. “Come on I wanna meet this Jimmy. I heard he cuuute.” She beckoned from the open rear passenger door of Chloe’s crossover.
“Easy, wild one.” Jeremy cautioned her playfully as he released Chloe and closed Jen’s door.
“You wanna drive Jerm?” Chloe asked jingling the keys.
“Ooh ooh! Do you mind?” Jeremy responded almost wagging his tail.
“Of course, I know you never get to in the big city.” Chloe noted, tossing him the keys.
“Yes!” Jeremy exclaimed holding the passenger door open as Chloe slid into shotgun.
“Oh now you’ve done it.” Jen warned her as Jeremy scampered around the hood to the driver’s side.
“Is he still just as bad?” Chloe asked.
“Worse.” Jen confirmed.
“Worse what?” Jeremy questioned as he plopped into the driver’s seat. Chloe and Jen snickered.
“Nothing, nothing!” Jen assured him, as he started backing the car out of the waiting lot.
“Alright where’s the penthouse.” Jeremy inquired as he pulled out of the station.
“It is not a penthouse, Jerm.” Chloe corrected him.
“Uhuh, you have a terrace girl come on.” Jeremy teased her.
“It’s probably cheaper than your place in New York!” Chloe defended her only slightly boujee address.
“Don’t remind me.” Jeremy conceded.
“I’m telling you, you gotta move back its wild how affordable it is. You could have a two car garage and a roofdeck here in Philly for half what you pay in Manhattan.” Chloe informed him.
“I know I know. I’m really thinking about it. Especially with Tim and Karen expecting another.” Tim was Jeremy’s older brother who Chloe most definitely drooled over all through growing up. He shared Jeremy’s good looks but was much less out going and sporty. He, like Chloe, spent most of his time in high school and college focused on his studies and student government. The lack of attention he gave Chloe drove her nuts when they were younger. She was always trying for his validation and never got. Jeremy always found it hysterical and wouldn’t ever let her live it down. Since finishing a residency at Penn he had started popping out adorable babies with his gorgeous wife Karen who was also a doctor at Penn.
“Oh, I saw! So precious. I love them they are so cue together.” Chloe sighed looking out the window.
“Oh are they?” Jeremy prodded her.
“Yes, I’m happy for them! I’m not 17 Jerm!” Chloe protested playfully.
“Doth protest too much?” Jeremy continued.
“Oh my god I hate you.” Chloe rolled her eyes.
“Oooh you have the hots for Tim?!” Jen piled on.
“Why are you blushing, Chloe?” Jeremy harassed her arrogantly.
“Oh my god! Yes, duh. Is you’re brother incredibly smart, sexy and accomplished? Duh! Does that mean I’m still dreaming of him like I did as a silly teenager? No. I am happy for him! And Karren.” She added quickly. Looking away again in an attempted to hide her rosey cheeks.
“Alright, alright….” Jeremy paused waiting to make a turn. “Sure.”. She swung at him playfully only to have her arm caught by his quick hand.
“AAAh! You’re guilty!” Jen teased.
“Let me go!” Chloe playfully pawed his hand off her arm as Jen giggled behind her.
“Hey hey I’m driving here!” Jeremy warned hitting the breaks a few times to jostle her making Jen shriek with enjoyment and Chloe clench the dashboard.
“Jeremy!” She scolded him before laughter broke her scowl.
“Come on whats the address?” He continued driving more normally.
“18th and Walnut.” Chloe mumbled to the window, embarrassed by her lavish address. 18th and Walnut was the north east corner of Rittenhouse Square one of Philadelphia’s fancy parks bordered by luxurious blocks of tall condo buildings. Chloe was still only a general surgery resident but James was a successful real estate developer. Successful for his age at least. They were both in their late twenties but James had got a head start on investing in college with a handful of his more affluent buddies he rowed with and capitalized on it. Coming from a single mother and knowing struggle Chloe was always a little embarrassed by her luxurious lifestyle living with James over the past 3 years had allowed.
“Oooh Rittenhouse!” Jeremy mocked her in a whaspy tone holding his prominent nose up, knowing her insecurity all too well.
“I hate you.” Chloe joked flatly.
4
The triplet entered the large foyer of Chloe’s condo welcomed by some up beat funky lo-fi music James always had on when left home alone.
“Honey, we’re home.” Chloe recited dropping her keys in the bowl and leading Jeremy and Jen into the open concept living space. Their condo was open and the late morning sun poured through the large tall walls that encompassed the space, the ceiling height exaggerated by the sunken living room.
“Wow this place is fantastic.” Jeremy complimented taking in the space.
“Hey guys! Jeremy, man so good to see you.” James strode from the kitchen grabbing Jeremy’s outstretched hand and pulling him in for a back slap.
“You too man. This is Jen!” Jeremy released him stepping out of Jen’s way as she moved to James. James leaned to kiss her cheek and they embraced.
“So nice to finally meet you I’ve heard so much!” James assured her.
“Same! Oh my god Jeremy you weren’t kidding! You’re so handsome!” Jen complimented as she clung to him an extra second leaning back to take in his features with a satisfied look making him blush a bit.
“Down girl.” Jeremy teased playfully from the hall he was following Chloe down with his their bag.
“Here we are. Bathroom’s just outside in the hall. Fresh towels in the cabinet by the sink.” Chloe instructed as she lead him into the large quest room.
“Wow, this place really is great Chloe. Well done.” Jeremy complemented as he opened the suite case on the bed.
“Oh it’s all James really. He loves designing. Took him weeks to get it the way he wanted before we moved in. You know me. I love it. Just couldn’t imagine putting the energy into it.” Chloe corrected him.
“Either way, it’s stunning.” Jeremy continued, retrieving a small package from his trunk.
“Thank you, Jen is really great Jerm, speaking of stunning.” She added leaning in the bedroom doorway. James and Jen bantered in the kitchen playfully making Chloe feeling at ease.
“She’s something isn’t she?” Jeremy agreed pridefully. “Here we got you a little something.”
“Oh Jerm, come on.” Chloe protested taking the small box reluctantly.
“Oh shut up. Jeremy rolled his eyes as she swung her arm around his waist. He kissed her on the top of the head. “Just a little something since its been so long, and Jen insisted we pick up something for you.”
“You really shouldn’t have.” She continued as she leaned on him opening the small box. “Oh my, Jeremy… you really didn’t have to-” Her voice trailing off as she lifted the delicate necklace from the box, a single diamond suspended in from of her open mouth.
“I know I know. It had your name written all over it.” He joked.
“Its a diamond Jeremy.” Chloe laughed.
“Exactly.” He said softly, motioning her to hand it to him so he could put it on her. Sh obliged lifting her thick silky dark brown hair. She moved to study herself in the large mirror.
“Ugh I love it.” She turned and threw her arms around his neck giving him a big sloppy kiss on his cheek.
“Alright alright.” He pretended pulling his face away.
“What?!” Jen interrupted from the door. “You said you’d wait till I was with you! You big stink!” She accused not the least bit concerned with the excessive display of affection.
“I couldn’t wait!” Jeremy said sheepishly.
“Oh I looove it, Jen! Thank you so much, I’m so excited to have you guys here.” Chloe assured her with a tight hug.
“Mmm me too.” Jen accepted her embrace swaying with her.
“Come get some food!” James called from the kitchen.
“oooh what did you make us Jimmy.” Jen asked excitedly.
“Jeeeeen.” Jeremy reminded her.
“I already asked him!” Jen exclaimed grabbing James forearm as she met him in the kitchen. “Right Jimmy?” She flirted.
“It’s fine!” James chuckled welcoming her touch. “We’ve got some sangria, turkey sandwiches and all the snacks you could want.” he motioned to the platters and pitcher as he announced them.
“Mmm it looks fantastic, honey, really.” Chloe met him behind the kitchen island. “Look at the necklace they got me.” She presented it tom him leaning back as he hugged her held her close by her hips.
“Oh that’s beautiful!” James admired.
“Just a wittle something something for the hostess.” Jen said playfully as she reached into her bag. “and a big something something for the master of the house.” She teased presenting a large bottle oh Patron.
“Oh boy.” James acknowledged the bottle fearfully. “I didn’t know it was that kind of weekend?”
“Oh its that kind of weekend!” Chloe fed off Jen’s boisterous energy. She retrieved the bottle from Jen and put it in the freezer returning to the island with glasses for the sangria. Jeremy was already plating some tiny sandwiches and potato salad.
“This is great, James. Thank you so much.” Jeremy said handing a full plate to Jen.
“Of course! Thanks for coming! You good with sangria or can I whip up something else for you. I have some light beers in the fridge too.” James offered.
“No no sangria is perfect.” Jeremy assured him.
“Yaaas perfect indeed.” Jen bopped her lips as she finished a swig of her glass already.
“Did you get these today?” Chloe motioned to a large colorful bouquet on the table.
“Oh yea I ran out for a new propane tank for the outdoor heater and grabbed those on the way home.”
“Awe, they are gorgeous.” Chloe leaned into the flowers inhaling. The sunlight illuminated her as she bent over the table with her back arched.
“I thought you’d like them.” James stated proudly as he indulged in the view.
“Damn Chloe you’ve got a donk.” Jen stated plainly.
“Ha, don’t worry it’s just these jeans.” She stood, a little embarrassed, and made her way past James to fill a plate.
“Oh yea sure just the jeans.” James teased her with a gentle spank as she passed.
“Mhmm.” Chloe assured them coyly.
“Oh, yeaa. She was famous for the booty all through high school.” Jeremy egged on.
“Not surprised!” James smirked proudly.
“Ooookeeey.” Chloe begged.
“Ow ow.” Jen cheered flirtatiously.
“At least I was famous for being a little man ho.” Chloe accused, eyeing Jeremy very sure of herself.
“Ouch!” Jeremy laughed.
“Nooo.” Jen scoffed with excitement. “You big slut.” She poked him playfully.
“I was not!” Jeremy protested, knowing very well he was.
“Oh please.” Chloe rolled her eyes. “They passed him around the cheerleading squad like a peace pipe.”
“Ah!” Jen giggled leaning into him as she listened.
“It was gross really.” Chloe kidded.
“Oh please, you were just jealous.” Jeremy accused, knowing very well this was also a lie. Wishing it wasn’t. Chloe pretended to gag.
“Oh I don’t blame them.” Jen flirted referring to the cheerleaders as she sipped her drink knowingly. “I’ve seen you in that little unisuit.”
“Ok.” Jeremy interrupted her embarrassed.
“Uhhuh.” Chloe confirmed. “so have the cross country girls.” She continued. “They never shut up about him.”
“Oh yea?” Jeremy pressed her gaining interest.
“You little ho!” Jen smacked him playfully.
“What?!” He played along.
“what about you Jimmy? I bet you were clawing them off as well.” Jen smirked eyeing him.
“Oh no.” James assured them. “I was a band dork.”
“Oh you were not.” Chloe protested. “Trust me I’ve seen pictures.” She said to Jen.
“Oh I have to see.” Jen prodded.
“What did you play?” Jeremy asked.
“I was on the drumline, snare.” James answered him before biting into his sandwhich.
“Oh sweet, I play a little guitar.” Jeremy added.
“Of course you do.” Chloe rolled her eyes. “I thought that was only when you wanted attention?”
“Knew it.” Jen said in a high pitched tone as she raised her eye brows and took a swig.
“Hey, hey.” Jeremy raised his hands in defense. “I play for me too.”
“When?” Jen tested him. James laughed along.
I’m hoping this got reddit-mangled. Otherwise . . . paragraph breaks. I’d also suggest tagging for subject matter.
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I like the “Rocky” Easter egg. I sort of skimmed the first . . . bit . . . but that’s as far as I got.
Constructive criticism: use paragraphs. Only 3-5 sentences per paragraph as a general rule of thumb. While this is not a hard and fast rule, it will help your reader track the story better by breaking up actions and events.