I’ve been working on a erotica and would like some input so far.

Road trip
It was the middle of winter and my gf and I had made plans to do a road trip to a winter resort. Daisy(my gf) just couldn’t sit still while I drove us to the closest Walmart for snacks and other things for the trip. She sat voluptuous at 5’2 with 36DDs and an ass to match. Idk how it was possible but she the tiniest waist for her frame. It almost seemed too good to be true 26” waists to compensate all that??? Gorgeous blue eyes that’d pierce you soul and send shivers through your spine. She was a natural blonde but died her hair a dark burgundy(all the more to make her luscious).She knew how to dress and how to get all the attention she wanted. Wearing tight fitted onesies and tops that make you watch to see if they’d burst. Today she wore her favorite unicorn onesie(it was her favorite because it had a butt-flap that was only held up by buttons. Typically she’d go panty-less or only wear a thong. Her bras always fit funny usually ran smaller than she actually wore but I’m not complaining. When they’d break she’d go weeks without one knowing how much attention it brings anyways. We pulled up moments later to the parking lot. I sat for a second watching my gf jump around in her seat listening to “jump around” by house of pain. She’d lip sync the words and playfully get up in my face like it was a rap battle. I cut the music and she looked at me in awe. She squinted and slowly inched her finger to the power button for the radio. She stuck her tongue out and pressed down on the button. The music resumed where it left off,” I’m the cream of crop,rise to the top…” I slapped it off mid verse. She gave me a shit eating grin and snatched at my crotch gripping my semi hard cock over my sweats.” Do it again and I’ll bite your cock so help me god.” She teased tightening her grip after eat word. “ oh really now? I don’t think I mind a bit of fun.” I smirk as she rolled her eyes and lowered her grip to my sack causing me to tense up. A bead of sweat ran down my forehead as she grimaced once again getting the reaction she intended the first time. “Okay okay okay… I give baby. Fuck. Way to literally bust my balls.” I groaned holding my sack.” Oh come on don’t be a big baby. Lemme see them.” She said mockingly. I lowered my pants and boxers revealing my brown sack reddened by her grip. She snickered,” oh hush it was even that bad. Lemme give it a kiss.” She said lowering her head into my crotch. She planted wet long kisses on each testicle trailing off with a low moan. I caught the signs oh what I knew was gonna be mayhem. She looked up to watch my face panicked with the foresight of her actions to come. With a single movement she buried her face into my crotch sucking both of my nuts into her mouth and tightly gripped my shaft. I let out a groan in protest but submitted to her hungry mouth. I held back her hair watching her pop my nuts in and out of her mouth. Groans escaped my lips as she smack her lips harder. The noise was so audible and sharp you’d think my sack would burst from the pressure. I bit my lip and pulled her lips up to mine kissing her deeply until we both sat forehead to forehead out of breath. She unzip her onesie and pulled out her tits sitting back in her seat. She rubbed her pussy watching my cock throb as she gripped it up again. “I’ve played with you baby return the favor.” She’d moan in a innocent little demeanor begging with her puppy eyes. She released her death grip on my cock and I took a deep breath relieved it didn’t pop off. I kissed her navel leading a trail of wet kisses to her sternum watching her pace quicken as I rose. She bit her lip refusing to admit she’s enjoying it. I kissed a bit higher getting in between her breasts making sure it was long and wet(her weak spot). She untucked her lip and let out a growl like predator getting ready to sink it’s teeth into its prey. Her fingers dove further into her cervix as she shook in anticipation. I licked and suckled on the same spot abusing my high ground. She locked her open arm around my neck and held me there. “Mmmmmhhh yes daddy right there don’t move until I’m done cumming.” She howled licking her legs around her own arm her abdominals twisting and jerking her knees pressed into my side as she hugged me against herself. With all the pressure I continued my assault sucking harder and lapping up the slobber I leave. Her face rose and became flush as she loosened her grip and kissed my forehead she grunted and groaned coming down from her high. I sat up taking deep breaths treasuring every oz of air filling my lungs. She zipped up her onesie and put her fingers into gasping mouth.”don’t say I never feed you.” She smirk watching me lick her fingers clean. My cock hardened from the taste and the way her fingers danced in my mouth. She pull them away and licked her palm and knuckles,” don’t hog it all.” She blurted out. I tucked away my cock and we both exited the car with burning red bliss across our faces. She skipped over to me gripping my hand and wrapping herself in my arm. I chuckled as she whimsically walked.
We entered the store and her eyes light
up to all the cute little outfits that were on the display. I pulled her away as she dragged her feet.” No no no nooooo. Daddy just one thing please.” She begged but I didn’t give. She trudged away with her hands still locked with mine.” Oh come on babe those were kids clothes anyways. If you behave I’ll get you something at the end of our visit.” I spoke trying to lighten up her Weary heart. It seemed to do the trick because she was back to humming and trotting about. I looking her up and down as she bounced. Her tits bounced and jiggled with each impact of the floor. I looked over our shoulder and watched her ass do the same.”Like what you see mister.” She muttered in between humming a nirvana tone. I straightened up and my gaze was darted forward.”I have no idea what you mean honey.” I retaliated knowing damn well I’ve been caught redhanded. She giggled and kissed my cheek. We headed towards snacks. She picked out a bunch of junk knowing I’d put the bunch of it back,while I looked for things high in carbs to prevent altitude sickness. I can back to the cart halfway full of everything from gummies to donuts. I Scowled at her showing no amusement. She hunched over and acted out a pathetic sickly act with faint coughs.” Daddy I need some sugar or I’m gonna die.” She pleas sheepishly looking up after her failed attempt to swindle me. I kept the same look. She kicked the floor and grabbed a box out the cart,” fine the chocolate graham crackers can go.” She tried to bargain. I kept my stare. “Oooh for crying out loud.” She pushed the cart back to the snack aisle and put several boxes back leaving a package of crumb donuts and chocolate milk. She than kissed my cheek repeatedly,” *sssssmmmuaaa* please papi*smmmmuaaa* just these two*smmmmuaaa*.” I sighed giving her a pat on the butt as to say “go ahead”. She did a little dance and took control of the cart again pushing towards the sports goods. I sped walk trying to catch up to her. She went straight for the goggles and headgear. She jumped up and down when she found matching goggles to go with a helmet she liked. It must’ve been too much for her onesie because the flap fell open and she hadn’t noticed as she zipped around the aisle acting like she was skiing. I stood there trying to get her attention.” Babe…. Baby…. BABY!” She kept acting like she was rushing down a slope making wind noises with her mouth and the sound of crackling like if she was trying to put run a avalanche. Each time I got close shed dart towards the other aisle. It was causing a seen since she wasn’t wearing any panties under. Her pussy and voluptuous ass was in view of many when she farted past the bikes. Luckily for us there were only your typical bicyclists looking for discounts and summer gear deals. They still gawked and chuckled some even getting ready to snap pics. I quickly snatched her up with a surprise route(pretending to go one way and heading the opposite to cut off her route of Ass-destruction). I bent her over my knelt knee and buttoned up her onesie and giving a quick swat. “ listen to me when I’m talking to you brat.” I say In a hushed voice. She gulped audibly when she realized the breeze she was feeling wasn’t from her speed but from the flap. Her exposed skin turned a dark red like her hair. My cock twitched and I’ll admit was pretty hard from thinking of how much attention she was getting. She got up and double checked the flap was closed and shamefully wrapped herself in my arms as if I was a blanket.” Hide me I’m too embarrassed… can we leave.” She said unable to bare the eyes that fell on her. “Sure baby but I still need to grab a few more things.”
We finished up at the store and I noticed her spirit wasn’t coming back as we made our way to the car. I popped the trunk and she hurried to stuff the stuff we bought inside. She jumped into the passenger seat and hid her face. “ oh come on baby it wasn’t that ba—-“ I stopped mid-sentence as she teared up. “You think I’m just so slutty gf who likes to put herself on display don’t you!” She mumbled in between her moping. I sighed and hugged her close. “Oh baby it wasn’t like you intentionally did it plus you are crying right now from how ashamed you are. So what if a few people saw your ass and maybe some of your pussy. It’s not like they haven’t watched porn before.” I said trying to cheer her up. Doing my best to ignore the fact that thinking it over is only making my cock harder. She got up out of her seat and sat in my lap. Nuzzling her face in between my head and shoulder. I hugged her but she seemed to fidget in my lap. I realized my cock was rock hard pressed up against her ass and she knows how turned on I am. She looked up at me with innocent eyes and pulled me into a kiss locking lips with me. Her tongue ravished around in my mouth. I twirled my tongue with hers as she pulls hers back a bit letting me into her mouth. She bites down on my tongue and suckles pulling my tongue further into her mouth. She sits up not breaking connection and pulls down my pants letting my cock spring up to it’s full length against her ass. She sits back and rocks back and forth stroking my cock with her juicy ass. I fight the urges as best as I can knowing anyone can come across and see our frenzy of lust. She finally breaks the kiss and unzips her onesie again pressing my face into her burning chest. I felt as if I was melting away into her becoming one. She struggles as she reaches back and pulls down her flap. She doesnt shy showing determination to get what she wants. She rises and setting her feet on either side of my hips and lowers herself until my tip is barely parting her lustful lips. She holds that pose and grinds the top against her slit teasing me into frustration. I groan and get irritable knowing she’s toying with me. I reach up and pinch her nipple causing her to whence as I pump up to catch the slight drop. I manage to fit my girth tip in penetrating her lips and throwing waves of bliss crashing over her. I smile loving eyes with her only to be met with a burning passion a blazed in her gaze. She bit her lip and slams down fully sheathing my rod into her. She lets out a silent scream followed by heavy breaths. The only movement from her is her lungs filling and respirating. I thrust testing the waters and she tenses up and wraps her fingers around my traps holding tightly loosening up with each pump. It didn’t take longer before she rode me like a bull. Throwing her ass back harder and harder. The clapping of her ass made the slapping echo and resonate in the room.
-Dac.dwayn

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