Help writing my first erotic story!

Hi everyone,

I’m very excited to be writing my first erotic story. It’s already like 4000 words. It’s about me (27, FTM trans guy, pansexual) meeting my celebrity icon, Brendon Urie from Panic! At the Disco. He is openly pansexual, although he is married to a cis woman. He’s a big inspiration for the LGBTQ community for his song “Girls/Girls/Boys” which is about bisexuality. He gives fans a lot of material to work with for our fantasies. Regularly going toppless or in his boxers onstage, kissing his male band members on stage, the Girls/Girls/Boys video, periscoping while getting dressed etc. My story is titled “Girls/Girls/Bois”, referencing how some transmasculine folks refer to themselves as “bois”.

I’ve written most of the scenes leading up to the sexy part, except the balcony scene that gets into foreplay. I want to get some feedback on my writing, particularly on physical descriptions and my character’s visualizations of imaginary scenes. I want to make sure that I’ve set the scene well so that the reader gets a feel for the romantic ambiance of my settings, especially the bar where I proposition him and my hotel suite. I would especially like to hear form other queer writers. I don’t want to write my post here because I’m concerned people might copy it. If you want to help I can message you a PDF.

Edit: The sex is going to emphasize feelings of deep physical attraction based on his desire to experience a new person (basically what pansexual means), and a new body type (i.e. FTM). I have an outline of what I want the sex scene to look like at the end of the text.

If you want a good idea of who I’m talking about, the “girls/girls/boys” video gives you Brendon Urie in oiled up nudity glory (disappointingly only from the waist up.) https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Yk8jV7r6VMk

Source: reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/b3gwta/help_writing_my_first_erotic_story