This is my first post and the first piece I write. Please be kind but also provide any feedback.
With that being said, enjoy…
It was a dark and stormy night, you could feel the cold cold metal hitting your bare skin, you have the urge to piss but are denied relief. A few hours pass and you start begging for permission, finally you are let out of your cage, but first the little bitch must be on her leash.
You start to piss in a corner, since that is all that you were given permission to do. Once you are done you beg your owner to let you on the bed, you are told to get on it.
Once you are on the bed, you put your ass up and must pay for being let on the bed. A knife is pulled out, and it is passed over your skin, it marks you. You beautiful skin starts showing the tracks of the knife, you are getting all nice and wet. Once your pussy is soaking wet, the teasing stops, and you begin to be spanked.
At first you moan, but are quickly told to be quite. You are spanked harder and a soft cry lets out. You know that you have been disobedient, the spanking stops, you are gagged and tied up. Left on all fours, legs wide open, hands behind your back.
You feel an object stretching your tight pussy, it’s deep inside you, and it begins to vibrate. Your pussy begins to drip, your cum is used to lube up a plug for your ass.
There you are, tied up in bed, bruised, cold, and with your holes plugged up. It’s the happiest you have ever been, knowing that you are being a good little bitch. At that moment you get off, your pussy is sore and dripping with your cum. When you feel your owner start to fuck you from behind. Your hair is pulled as your fuck hole is used. Once your pussy is filled with cum, you are plugged once more and taken to your cage.
Source: reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/avjcaw/a_pet_and_its_owner
Not a..horrible…first draft. Few notes: Ditch the dark and stormy night. Its cliche and so over done. You said cold metal hitting the skin..what is hitting her while in a cage? Your transitions are a little rough, from begging to pee to up on the bed. Add details, add the owner speaking. I liked the parts you added about her thoughts, maybe add more to that aspect. Not bad for a first erotic post :)