a/n: this is out of context obviously (part of a story I am writing atm) m is sitting on a chair and f was straddling him. Please ignore grammar as this is a draft.
She slid off me and knelt on the ground, oh shit, I was not going to last two minutes. I felt her hot mouth surround my cock and take my whole length. “Oh fuck Violet, you are so fucking hot” I moaned. She sucked me like a lollipop, then as my cock escaped her mouth, she continued torturing me by slowly licking the base of my balls and taking each one slowly and carefully into her mouth. Once she released my wet balls, she dragged her tongue to the very tip of my lucky cock sending a shiver down my spine. My boasting brother was right, she was amazing at blowjobs. She took my entire length in her mouth again this time slowly and eventually gagging slightly. She worked her mouth up and down my cock while fondling my balls. I was still in shock and could not believe this was really happening. I let her explore my entire manhood, thrusting my cock deep inside her mouth until she gagged and began deep throating. She fondled my balls again and bobbed her head up and down over and over pressing her sweet tongue against my foreskin and the shaft of my rock hard cock.
Suggestions on how to end this scene without repeating myself? (no Im not massively experienced irl) is it boring?
Source: reddit.com/r/Erotica/comments/7xovbl/is_this_hotany_good_im_still_new_to_writing
Sounds fairly good. In order to finish you need to decide how far you plan on going in storyline, is there more sex or does he nut and look for a nap? If planning on more make it so he nuts and than she leaves him wanting more and start the next scene.